arshi ff: without you... #2, chapters 14 - 27 **completed**

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DurgaS

@DurgaS

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1061

Chapters 24 - 27

I am glad that I didn't read all this time. The waiting time between chapters would've been very difficult.

We all know there is more to the past story. I had one version in mind. I was eager to know yours. Few things matched. It was a murder not suicide. The way it took place, quite similar to what I had in mind. Pre planned, not on the spur of moment. Also about Khushi parents. It was not an accident and there was a strong connect between two incidents.

But the way you set up the whole thing, outstanding. Everyone's past revealed so neatly. Such a jerk this chacha is. Felt bad for Shyam's mother. Surrounded by horrible men. For once didn't feel bad the way her husband was killed by Shyam. So, Shyam had been a murderer all along!

Always wondered why Shyam wanted to kill Khushi. So he never meant to. Shyam's plans had been failing all along. Rahim chacha, the silent hero perhaps. It was him who helped Khushi mother, isn't it? How did Garima fit into all this. Did she do it so that the chacha doesn't harm Khushi.

Taaliyaan for A and K scenes. Speechless. He sensed her standing behind the door, yay. But now after possibly the most shocking revelations ever for them, it will take time for them to take in all that and move on. In a way, both feel that their parents are at fault and the reason behind the other's parents death.

This is a remarkable story Indi. I am so glad I am reading it. Will meet next at another story hum log, hopefully.

😃

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1062

Originally posted by: FLGirl
Loved the update

thanks so much, flgirl... glad you liked.

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1063

Originally posted by: sutapasarbabhom
Fantastic updt tanx for pm

thanks so much, sutapa... lovely to see you.

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1064

Originally posted by: Javeria3991
I am tongue tied and can't figure correct words to praise this stupendous update.
I love Arnav and Khushi ran away scene and the way you describe it
darkness enveloped the the long narrow tunnel like corridor ahead... flapping of wings as asr held his wife's hand and ran down into the blackness in front, pigeons flying out of nooks and crannies, disturbed again tonight. 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏
Arnav did right to go back to the room from he ran with Khushi. Someone tried again to destroyed his life, messing with it and most importantly involve his life, his breath Khushi, he can't let go this again so easily by fleeing away from the scene like he did in the past. Wrong doers and evils should be punish. Pratap deserved the punches from the Arnav,his end was surely destined by Arnav and Arnav holds all right to take revenge from him.
It's shocking that Ratna didn't suicide and killed her husband, it was all done by pratap and khushi's mother was a pawn who also lost her and her husband life in her stupidity, leaving her only daughter to face the world all alone. I wonder what if this actually happened. I think that Arnav father got over with Garima as soon she left him and someone leaked his affairs news to Ratna which led her furious and those confusions, misunderstanding turned the day into horrible one and chachaji took advantage and killed his brother and wife for power and wealth which his brother and son hold. Power makes a person blind and blood relation didn't matter to selfish greedy people like chachaji. After reading this update I am very happy that Arnav remarried Khushi in the serial because past didn't matter to him and let darkness away from his life when his heart got brightened with love.
Shyam, his end was predictable. He was doing the same mistake. Arnav left him last time that was a second chance for him but he didn't avail it and this time he is definitely losing his life. He was truly inhuman and wicked as usual, even in his last breaths of his life.
Poo Khushi, she is a victim like Arnav and Anjali. Thank goodness doctor was their at the scene and distracted her. I was feeling very sad for her. Two man who played with her life, the sudden revelations of past and her present Arnav, it's all are related. I hope she come out from the shock soon. Arnav, Anjali and Khushi need each other.
Can't wait to read next chapter. Advance congratulations for thread #3.

thanks, javeria...😃🤗 i am so glad you liked the chapter... and the lines you quote i really felt good into that corridor with them...

yeah, it is a sad mess, an absolute tragedy, involving possible each and every human frailty. the way i saw it, pratap calls lajwanti on the night of the wedding to make sure that ratna sees her husband and lajwanti together. he has mixed a little intoxicant in her juice, he knows she will be very upset... and that is what happens... he just goes and waits to kill them after making sure that everyone has seen ratna upset, dushyant running after her, etc.

it is a cold blooded murder, as is khushi's parents.

i ask myself all teh time, do such things happen. the answer always is, even worse happens. sad na?

i do hope these three children whose parents were snatched from them, find peace and meaning again. nothing ever goes away, it's how you deal with it... and i get the sense i now know why they had to meet in sheeshmahal.

thanks so much for your fabulous comment and take on pratap malik and shyam. see you soon.

and thanks for thread #3 wishes. 😳

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1065

Originally posted by: Preety_Nebula
Beautiful Indi di.😊👏

Be honest kind a forget because of long absence so read couple of chapters to grasp the idea.Loved the chapter in Nainital one.Sheesh mahal gives me goose bumps.I wish they had shown some of it .
Loved it.
Thanks for the PM

preety,

😳 great to see you. you liked? yay. nainatal you loved i am thrilled. sheeshmahal is something else isn't it? wish they had gone back there, i felt that was the natural point of denouement. of course you must forget... stories are fun to read again, see you soon.

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1066

Originally posted by: jg12
Beautifully written . So glad that Arnav & Khushi are safe !

jg,

good to see you, and thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed.

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1067

Originally posted by: DurgaS
Chapters 24 - 27

I am glad that I didn't read all this time. The waiting time between chapters would've been very difficult.

We all know there is more to the past story. I had one version in mind. I was eager to know yours. Few things matched. It was a murder not suicide. The way it took place, quite similar to what I had in mind. Pre planned, not on the spur of moment. Also about Khushi parents. It was not an accident and there was a strong connect between two incidents.

But the way you set up the whole thing, outstanding. Everyone's past revealed so neatly. Such a jerk this chacha is. Felt bad for Shyam's mother. Surrounded by horrible men. For once didn't feel bad the way her husband was killed by Shyam. So, Shyam had been a murderer all along!

Always wondered why Shyam wanted to kill Khushi. So he never meant to. Shyam's plans had been failing all along. Rahim chacha, the silent hero perhaps. It was him who helped Khushi mother, isn't it? How did Garima fit into all this. Did she do it so that the chacha doesn't harm Khushi.

Taaliyaan for A and K scenes. Speechless. He sensed her standing behind the door, yay. But now after possibly the most shocking revelations ever for them, it will take time for them to take in all that and move on. In a way, both feel that their parents are at fault and the reason behind the other's parents death.

This is a remarkable story Indi. I am so glad I am reading it. Will meet next at another story hum log, hopefully.

😃

hi durga,

i too am glad you read it one shot... i worry often about flow... no idea if its all become jerky and funny. i could never accept that suicide story... and if asr and khushi dis not have some story intersecting in lucknow, why would the storyteller want them to meet there. she than could have been a girl from lakshminagar in delhi whose parents died in a car crash...

and in my head, khushi's mother had to be the key... why don't ask me, but i jest felt always that she was.

why garima kept quiet is something i would like to think about a bit more. i find her relationship with lajwanti very touching and deep. she would do much for her sister.
and how asr and khushi react to all this and each other... i am still wondering about... a lot. hopefully by next weekend i have some idea.

life is often unexpected and terrible things do happen. i find survivors spectacular and very intriguing... i really would like to know, now what.

thanks for liking the asr khushi scenes and the connection.

and also for reading with so much engrossment.

see you soon.

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.Brooke.

@.Brooke.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1068

I am speechless its simply awesome 👏

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wiwy

@wiwy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#1069

Aww! That was absolutely briliant in thought action and words!👏👏👏 My heart skipped a beat when Arnav changed his direction and ran back to the danger zone. But you are right he had to face Sheeshmahal headlong. Only then would he be rid of his nightmare. That scene that lay at the very core of his dark self was magnificently described by you In Di! And I loved how he thrashed those horrendous monsters. Shyam is poison. Why did Anjali want Chhotey to stop? I hope he does not come back into their lives ever. The last part, how Khushi hugged and broke into tears was amazing. It must have been a difficult chapter to write but you did a great job! It was like everything was happening before my eyes. I could follow it to the minutest of details like the salty relieved tears rolling down her cheeks..