arshi os: break of day

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cheesemad

@cheesemad

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Posted: 12 years ago

#31

Hayeee I got late:'(

awesome OS...

loved it...

the pain of ASR is described so beautifully

only are Khushi can soothe her Arnav ji...

keep writing:D

Edited by cheesemad - 12 years ago

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: lalarukh
awe so sweet ...starting from the begining the ambiance u have created was awesome...rain ,darkness ,his speeding drive,his inner turmoils...the way he broke down...wow
and then the relaxing part seeing khushi and a small smile appears on his face ...khushi giving him soothing words and in the end that pala ...:)...loved it dear

hi lalarukh,

thanks for reading and commenting. so glad that pala was liked. came to me out of nowhere as she lay there and he stood watching her. tell you these characters pretty much write their own stories. 😳

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Love.life2

@Love.life2

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Posted: 12 years ago

#33

Thnx for d pm.

Beautiful intense OS.

Loved the way u hve written arnav's pain n his past n his feelings as a 14yr old boy n the shadow of tht past n d pain still reflecting in his actions n this thoughts even today.

He hs been thru a lot n somehow d fear of betrayal of his father affected his pysche so much tht he hurt khushi d instant he felt her getting close 2 him n how he feels he's exactly like his father for hurting his wife his love.

He's blessed with an angel like khushi who heals his wounds n soothes his pain.

I loved ur writing. Pls continue writing n do u hve any index of ur wrk??

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#34

^^^

thanks so much, renee.bee,

and your comment is lovely. how poignantly asr was told by all those who felt his story. especially the writer and the actor. he's hard to forget, makes me write 😆.

i have an index, it's more or less complete... hope it helps. look forward to seeing you again.

indi52's Index-

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BarunDiwani

@BarunDiwani

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#35

Indi! Atlast, after all those times you spoke of the relationship b/w Asr, his gussy and his dad...so happy to see this insight. True lily there was so much potential and you gave a awsome insight into his fear that we all know lives inside of him. Aww the poor man, gotta feel sorry fr him...loved ur description of the scene at start, in the suv and ofcourse the howl. And loved how u incorporated hi paagal as his savior :))) reading ur work always brings a certain satisfaction and depth!

❤️

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#36

^^^

ami!!! you are here. yay. i love your comment needless to say... yes that gussa and oh the pyaar he must have had for his dad, now so fruitless, so lost.

this man is just too much... keeps knocking on my head, makes me want to say things... his paagal saves him and he saves her. we all could do with a bit of sambhalna from someone or the other.

how are you? changa shanga? so happy to see you. please go check your man out, he's all over the forum today.

the last line of you comment, hayeee, me thrilled.

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vandana1965

@vandana1965

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Posted: 12 years ago

#37

This is a beautiful OS indi. lovely to read about him finally moving into her pala wholeheartedly.

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indi52

@indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#38

^^^

aww, vandana, thanks a lot... i loved what you wrote... yeah her pala wholeheartedly. mmm. why are these two so good together. nothing feels false or wrong.