arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed**

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Katelyn

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Posted: 12 years ago

#61

Wow...what an awesome chapter, Indi!! 👏⭐️ You granted our wish with a beautifully well written kissing scene! 🤗 You've brilliantly portrayed their thoughts and feelings! You are right on with Khushi's hesitation yet unable to deny the new feelings of passion and ASR is just perfect as the more assertive lover!! ☺️ HOT!!! I'm fanning myself!! A very nice and romantic flashback!!!

You left us with a cliff hanger, Indi! Feeling sad and terrible for Khushi! Eager to read chapter 2. Please update soon!!

Sometimes it does take an extra push for a person to write and I'm sorry that you had to see that awful picture on the net especially on our IPK 2nd anniversary!! I completely understand your need to write and it's your way of dealing with the situation! I commend and support you for doing it! I think in the process, you will end up healing all of us as well as yourself! The great thing about writing is that you could pen down your own vision of the story! I am so looking forward to this journey with you! And I know coming out of this, Arshi's love will be stronger as well as ours for this magical couple!

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#62

^^^ no problem, vandana,

i am sorry you couldn't take it. i couldn't take that miserable picture that was posted, my way of fighting back. i believe in this love a bit too much, no picture is going to mess with my my mind about it.

Edited by indi52 - 12 years ago

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RebeccaDaphne

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Posted: 12 years ago

#63

Omg Indi, I was so filled with tears reading the end part 😭!

Poor Khushi, surely there can be some other way...please don't leave it like this...want to read more!

I loved the flashback of Diwali, it's what I would have wanted it to be like had the kiss not been a miss!

Wonderful description of Khushis feelings in the flash back, and ASRs assertiveness was spot on...that part I just wanted to read more and more to find out what happened after then!

You have to continue, this is giving me dhak dhak in anticipation!👏

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Mysticaldivine

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Posted: 12 years ago

#64

⭐️Just beautiful until the very end and as you know me I am not leaving regardless I am not breathing normally till he is fine and They are fine.I know your are testing my patience here ,lets see how far we both can travel with this or at least me.

Love the way you are taking flashbacks along with the original story.That is helpful to keep any reader to stick to the ground before the next attack.

Finally incomplete kiss got its edge,that part is really breathtaking.👏👏👏

Her hesitations are true to her character and Arnav's signature "Tum Theek Ho" 😊 muahhh for that

OK Last part no comments , want to see how you play with our fragile emotions...🥺

arshi 🤗,

my friend, and the one who gets so deep into asr khushi, you are here... i am thrilled. tell me, do we believe in this love or not? did it change our lives in ways we could never fathom or not? i could never play with this love, never reduce it to an easy way out with a mucked up story line when things got messy.

There is no doubt their love made us believe in things which at least I never did and the strength of it is making me stronger each day.If there is a will there is away and that's what this is...and you will not mess up anything and with that hope I started reading it so I can face this eye to eye

i will never forget the day priya broke the news. somewhere in that post, and all the other posts she wrote at that time are all my feelings about this whole thing. that line in the prologue which goes, "and a silence fell across the world... well, that's how i felt while reading about it...

That day I couldn't focus and still when I read or see but testing my courage now as I always do in my real life too,I try to go in it to get over with it.

and after all these months someone actually puts these pictures on the net? 😡😡😡i have tried to look away every time, but suddenly a thought within... what if i looked at instead... went right in, and found what is inside...

asr and khushi, when mortal danger lurks, how will they react, evolve, find more and more.

i am not a brilliant writer, though, 😳, i am a rambler, and the feelings of these two i just love rambling through. thanks for being here. my first story, really, i am scared, super nervous.

You are brilliant and rambler ,its me written all over so take a plunge and accept it graciously and thnx for listening to all for writing a FF

Edited by ArshiHamesha - 12 years ago

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#65

Originally posted by: RebeccaDaphne
Omg Indi, I was so filled with tears reading the end part 😭!
Poor Khushi, surely there can be some other way...please don't leave it like this...want to read more!
I loved the flashback of Diwali, it's what I would have wanted it to be like had the kiss not been a miss!
Wonderful description of Khushis feelings in the flash back, and ASRs assertiveness was spot on...that part I just wanted to read more and more to find out what happened after then!
You have to continue, this is giving me dhak dhak in anticipation!👏

thanks, rebecca,

i so knew they would kiss, so had to write it... diwali maybe it wasn't, perhaps another evening, but yes, the kiss would not be half done. not if it's my man asr 😆. ok will look at that what happened after then in the next update... maybe you just gave me a path to take, thanks. so glad to see you enjoyed. 🤗

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#66

Originally posted by: supriya.arshi

Indi 😃 you made them Kiss finally...nd such an intimadtin kiss😳...loved it ❤️

the way he went after her...dropped her to the temple..nd took her bck...so romantic...😉 i enjoyed it!!!!

nd the end 😲..no please don kill him!!!

wat a writing...its just beautiful in every manner...⭐️⭐️!!!! its a treat to me...to read your work..Love it!!!!

aww, supriya, you really liked? not too longwinded i hope. i do go on a bit. yes yes yes they kissed. this is asr, he is in the mood, who can stop him... and how she wants him... i love that too. tell me, can anyone kill asr? really? would i be so disrespectful of this force of nature? nahiiin. relax, my friend, trust your lovers and your instincts.

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wiwy

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Posted: 12 years ago

#67

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Indi I know now why I wanted you to write an Arshi story so badly. Perhaps I felt it would be staggeringly different. And how right I was. I have read and fallen for your trademark style of writing while analysing the IPK episodes on BFTP. But fiction writing has revealed a new side to Indi, a new shade of Indi. Awesome!⭐️ It leaves me speechless!

Only one thing, don't let Arnav die! Who will BD and I fight over?😕

🤗

Edited by wiwy - 12 years ago

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#68

Originally posted by: ArshiHamesha
⭐️Just beautiful until the very end and as you know me I am not leaving regardless I am not breathing normally till he is fine and They are fine.I know your are testing my patience here ,lets see how far we both can travel with this or at least me.

Love the way you are taking flashbacks along with the original story.That is helpful to keep any reader to stick to the ground before the next attack.

Finally incomplete kiss got its edge,that part is really breathtaking.👏👏👏

Her hesitations are true to her character and Arnav's signature "Tum Theek Ho" 😊 muahhh for that

OK Last part no comments , want to see how you play with our fragile emotions...🥺

arshi 🤗,

my friend, and the one who gets so deep into asr khushi, you are here... i am thrilled. tell me, do we believe in this love or not? did it change our lives in ways we could never fathom or not? i could never play with this love, never reduce it to an easy way out with a mucked up story line when things got messy.

There is no doubt their love made us believe in things which at least I never did and the strength of it is making me stronger each day.If there is a will there is away and that's what this is...and you will not mess up anything and with that hope I started reading it so I can face this eye to eye

i will never forget the day priya broke the news. somewhere in that post, and all the other posts she wrote at that time are all my feelings about this whole thing. that line in the prologue which goes, "and a silence fell across the world... well, that's how i felt while reading about it...
That day I couldn't focus and still when I read or see but testing my courage now as I always do in my real life too,I try to go in it to get over with it.

and after all these months someone actually puts these pictures on the net? 😡😡😡i have tried to look away every time, but suddenly a thought within... what if i looked at instead... went right in, and found what is inside...

asr and khushi, when mortal danger lurks, how will they react, evolve, find more and more.

i am not a brilliant writer, though, 😳, i am a rambler, and the feelings of these two i just love rambling through. thanks for being here. my first story, really, i am scared, super nervous.

You are brilliant and rambler ,its me written all over so take a plunge and accept it graciously and thnx for listening to all for writing a FF

arshi, you are too good to me. 🤗

i am so glad you liked so many things. about playing with your emotions... i guess all writers end up manipulating the reader somewhat whether they like it or not. but believe me, i don't want to make anyone tense or sad, just give them a rollicking good story that will make them sigh and feel the thrill of life... because to me that is love. if indeed it is true love, it's dukh dard bechaini bewafai tadap whatever pain, along with all happiness, all of it holds the thrill of life itself in it.

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binimoti

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Posted: 12 years ago

#69

Originally posted by: indi52
hi binimoti,

good to see you. ghost... that's a thought, but alas done before and a bit too memorably, so i shall refrain... and khushi will kill me beside. as it is she is not happy at all with what my evil mind is concocting. ha ha. thanks so much, always heartening to see a reader.

I will wait to read then

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DurgaS

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Posted: 12 years ago

#70

Indi,

Ok, first things first. You won't believe, but about 10 mts. before I switched on the lappy, I was thinking about the Diwali missed kiss, and the what if discussions that were going on and how far it would have gone. Then, wondering why am I thinking about it suddenly! Then I log into IF, see your pm and there's the same scene. Telepathy?

Chapter 1, Wow. Written beautifully. I like the narration style going back and forth, keeping both the present and the past in suspense. Excellent description of the intimate moment (though I must admit, it was a little above my comfort 😳). Loved the whole scene to the Mandir and back including the reminder of the guest house scene.

Then, the scary scary hospital scene. Not gonna think about it and deliberate about the situation. Will just wait for the next one.

Excellent writing, Indi. I am glad you finally started writing fiction. 😃

Edited by DurgaS - 12 years ago