arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed**

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lakraj80

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Posted: 12 years ago

#641

Nice one! Thanks for the pm.

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Shazeia

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Posted: 12 years ago

#642

Thanks a lot for the pm...

I have been very busy lately so didn't get time to comment on your beautiful story but still found time to stalk for an update 😉.

This story really made me 😭 and you stopped the last update at a Point were I kept wishing that Arnav would come out of coma and things start moving forward for them. So finally the much awaited update is here and a relief that finally he is back and that to with a bang! I liked the way you described both khushi and Arnav emotions after he woke from coma 👏. So his mind has processed the info and now he knows that's its an accident just can't wait to read further...

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IssK.

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: indi52

thank you, so much. i hope there was a part in it you wanted to loop. 😃. hope the dynamism was just what the evening/morning/afternoon needed to wake it right up. 2.30am... very sleepless in singapore.

I hope you know that my favorite moment of the show is in here! And you've played it out amazingly well. Uff. Talking of loops, my insides did a loop when i read it, you sleepless in singa girl!

he was dragging her up the steps of a temple. the night was unforgiving, fires raged within. her wrist was crushed in his grip, her tears flowed, her crimson lehenga studded with a million sequins gleamed, a scream for help? but who was listening.

as fire and the eternal as witness, and in the presence of the night and the winds that howled, the temple bells that rang out timeless words of union, they stood face to face, eye to eye, a man and a woman; caught in a moment where breath would stop and begin.

he thrust a chain of black beads and a touch of pure gold around her neck. she stood still, unable to fathom the claim of a disdained mangalsutra. you are mine, it seemed to say. dismissive fingers took a pinch of vermillion from a ready platter as if someone knew he would come, he would come looking for this one day. he had to hurt her, he had to make her his. you are mine, said his eyes. you are nothing, said his lips, no one to me, just the signs of a wife, but not her place... cruel fingers marked her with red, a sacred streak of sindoor so false. i am the truth, it seemed to say. she had no words...

she was so lovely, all he wanted to do was fold her in his arms and say, "how could you do this to me?
Just so you know, i have collapsed just cutting and pasting!! God, Indi!! This is truly brilliant...
And then, just when i thought i'm done for the day, lo and behold, here it comes! A Luscious Loop Moment tops off the already heightened madness in me😆

"don't you know how i feel?" he wanted to ask her as he covered her face with a hundred kisses, ran his fingers through her loosened chestnut brown hair, buried his face in their silken wiles, felt her skin melt at his touch. he wanted to hear her silent permission to undo that dori of her tunic, to run his fingers up her arms leaving a trail of goosebumps, to hear her moan when he gazed at her perfect body then took her in love, in only adoration. to hear her sigh when they reached where they'd been coming to all along. ever since that moment in a bright blue morning pool. and a plunge that took them drowning. all the way to breathless.

that endless moment.In other words, a LOOP! A subliminal one this, but
loopworthy incomparabilis!!!

And how can i forget you started with Harold Pinter! You had me at Hello madam!!

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meem17

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Posted: 12 years ago

#644

Awesome update
Asr is back
Shaym is now gone case
Thanks for the pm dear

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Chochoo83

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Posted: 12 years ago

#645

Awsumm chap you wrote emotions beautifully

Like i was witnessing everything in front of me loved it

Thank you so much for pm

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henamani

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Posted: 12 years ago

#646

arnav singh raizada - the man oozes control. in the play, even when he was kidnapped, he was far from helpless and it is heartening to see how you managed to show this trait of his in this update

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#647

Originally posted by: nishu_shorna
WOW...Indi Di...I am so happy...I just loved this chapter...can't tell how much...he wake up...their moment of realization...so beautifully written...then tum thik ho...ufff...how I miss this line...and then Brazil team ki tarah...made me smile...everyone's happiness seeing him wake up...so Di & the Doc is in regular conversation...loved it...
So it OP who brought Khushi's purse to Delhi for Arnav...he deserves a thanks...
ASR's shaatir dimaag is already working...he realized its not an accident...wow...this is our ASR...
Loved the update a lot...thanks for the pm...

hi nishu_shorna,

so glad the chapter made you happy. it was ultimately a wonderful chapter to write. he's waking up... uff what could be more thrilling. liked brazil team?😆 the husband is obsessed with that team... thanks so much for reading.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: ArshiHamesha
Indi👏

Breathtaking ...apna dard bhool keh "Tum Theek ho" as always...He feels bad just by pushing her aside and had no clue what happened to him as his time has frozen in those moments...

Green saree and the entire team...What The...😆

New suspense ...Silence from a Doc..no good sign...Do whatever but LG supposed to get better now...for punching that scum bag😡

hi my dear arshi,

aap aa gayi? bahaar... oh forget bahaar, asr aa gaya. 😆 yes, in gulabi, that's our asr isn't it? the man in command, the man who always puts her before himself, the man who can't bear to think of her in any danger... almost as though he came out of that long coma just to make sure she's ok... these guys have written such a powerful character. and what has barun done to it... made it walk talk breathe come alive.

the entire team, green and yellow brazilwa, hyuk.

don't worry, doc saab silent because he was surprised at his own response to miss raizada's joy filled voice. humara asr theek hai... shyam, watch out.

thanks so so much for reading and liking.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: coolbakes
that was adorable!! you write the characters beautifully!! loved how you described arnav and khushi's feelings

anjali and mom part was cute!! cant wait to see arnav and anjali meet!! looking forward to it!! plz don sideline it!!!

loved this chapter!! waiting for the next!!!!😳

coolbakes, hi 😳

good to see you. thank you for saying such lovely things. you liked the anjali and maa part? oh yes, mothers are never too far away are they, today is my mom's birthday, she's no more. i can quite understand now why in many of our movies and shows mothers are given the place they are... the yearning for departed parents in ipk doesn't seem melodramatic anymore... it feels natural.

i promise not to sideline the brother sister meeting. that's another terrific and real relationship. lovely to see you,, coming up with something hopefully not too late. 😆