arshi ff: without you... thread #1, chapters 1-13 **completed**

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#491

^^^ dips,

awww the man. when will he let our wait end. me... doing something about it, soon.

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#492

^^^ wiwy 🤗

i did notice the 10k crossing and giggled madly, poor forum wasion, no idea what to do with a story that starts with a buss colliding into the asr. par hume vishwaas hai, that it's the bus that will go back home crying. 😆 thanks, sir, for keeping track and darooning. i notice yours has crossed 25'k, kya baat hai. 👏👏

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supriya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#493

on your chapter 6

on the past

ASR was soo rude nd harsh...i mean he pushed her...tht was uncalled for i think...cuz isnt it violent to an extent!!!! pls don make him hurt her physically ever...its somethin i don think any girl is okay with...

i liked how Khushi din let him walk away without giving her piece of mind 👏👏

on the present

What The!!! 😲 tht leech did this...the unknown no. nd Anjali Pyal's expression was enough to guess who it was!!!! if he really was involved i hope he crushes brutally under the same truck itself!!!!!!

Khushi telling him abt everythin thts happenin...trying to get him invovled her her silent plea to him with the rose...touching...she went to Ma's garden nd got it..too good

Anjali...i so get her feelings...wish she could help her chotey somehow😊!!

nd on the dinner scene...he yelled cuz she was waiting for so long for him...how typical...but i loved the aftermath room love...her shoulder touch d his hug to her...love for each other 😳

really wonderful writing...⭐️👏

ps: pls don forget to pm me...😔

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#494

^^^ hi supriya, 🤗

thanks so much for reading. will pm you, no idea how i missed out a coupe of times.

totally with you on that violence bit. but this seems to be so much a part of their cataclysmic effect on each other. when he ripped her dori scattering pearls, i'd been horrified... saw the scene several times... finally realised he snapped when she mentioned his sister's marriage. here too there was reference to the women of his fam being treated badly. doesn't make his action right, just him. and she didn't cower... she never does. that's khushi and asr... not always right but somehow perfect. i am sorry you were upset. i have tried to remain as true to the khushi and asr i know as i can.

glad you liked the love making and the garden. and yes, that shyam does deserve much worse than whatever he's got till now.

am working on it 😆.

hoping to update this weekend. will pm. 😳

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supriya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#495

Indi thanks for explaining why he reacted tht way to wat she said...made it easier to understand

Arnav calmin Khushi...i loved tht entire bit...so touching...such emotions...nd your note abt love, feelings nd Rabba vey...beautifully written ⭐️👏

nd the hospital scene ...Anjali is really strong...i am refering to Payal's thoughts of how she thought abt her di nd everythin...nice nd Dr.Verma ...his way of sayin..."we won't let him" i feel lik hugging him!!

Anjali was so quick in her thinking...my thoughts on her...i hope she is the one to take Shyam down completely drag him by his feet nd giv him hell...tht would be Fantastic

nd abt the past part...Arnav goin bck to La...Nooo 😲 i hope he doesn meet her at all
nd here our sanka devi is busy makin jalebi's hai re Nandakisore!!!

nice chapter 👏
really good edit by your reader 👏

ps: m with your family here...get him out of Coma Lady!!!!

Edited by supriya.arshi - 12 years ago

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#496

thanks, supriya,

he did meet la as we all know, but when his jhalli appeared all else had to disappear 😆. see ya soon with an update.

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cheesemad

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Posted: 12 years ago

#497

hey

just read prologue and chapter 1...

loved the prologue...

it looks very promising...

chapter 1:

OMG don't tell me ur killing him...

no please...

okay m running to read chapter 2...

m a bit confused but I guess things will get clear as I read more...

Love,

Komal:)

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#498

hi komal, 😊

you're here... lovely. so you're sort of liking it and confused. well, it is a little confusing this tale i guess... hope the bhoolbhulaiya effect is pleasant and happy making... though yes, i have been told the story brings tears... but sometimes it's kind of nice to cry, isn't it? 😳 looking forward to your thoughts.