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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Siaa-

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It's usually written abt Arnav's past but not Khushi's. Hardly few have written abt it. To say that this is heart-whelming would be an understatement!


Arnav and Khushi are dissimilar yet so similar. Their outer persona, their attitude and perspectives of worldly matters might differ but the notions and feelings of their hearts are the same. They might be all pretense and of facade for everyone else but not for the other. They know each other in and out. And that's one of the best parts of their relationship. The fact that she understands that her husband is back home for her and the fact that he recognises her need of his presence is heart-warming to know about. We rarely get to see couples of so much understanding despite all the odd differences.

"He also knew that she would keep away from him as much as possibble, lest she lose the iron-grip she had on herself and weaken in the face of his concern.

"She had already started doing it", he thought, as he watched her walk away. Her usual habit was to dance around him till he had changed and settled down, updating him of every detail about her day. But today, she'd walked off as soon as she could manage to do it, as if she was afraid of spending time with him.

He knew, since he'd gone through the same thing earlier in the year. He'd held himself together until Khushi came up to their room after the pooja. Having someone this close to your heart meant that in times of sadness, one glimpse of them can break-down your carefully built barriers. You might hold strong in front of everyone else, but with them, you desperately seek comfort, reassurance. So, until you have the luxury of doing it, you keep away from the refuge" - These lines are so poignant! @underlined - trying express the beauty of these would just reduce it's intensity. I love them.


It takes a person whom you know to understand your words, but it takes a person who knows you to understand your silence. And when one is truly in love, one starts noticing the smallest of smallest gestures of that person. That's the reason Arnav could find that spark missing in her smile, the twinkle that's clouded in her eyes, the passiveness in her words and actions.

It takes a lot of effort from her to not break down, to restrain and constrict her feelings and emotions, to not run into his arms and open up her heart. But her husband knows her better. He provides her that support, gives her that warmth, that comfort all silently even without having to voice it out. THat's the sheer beauty of their relationship.

"Mujhe aise aapke baahon mein thodi der aur rehne deejiye" - It's her haven, her bliss, all that a wife like her can ever ask for.

Her past did move me tears too. That guilt, that pain!! And all that's left behind is 'If Only'. If only she's listened to her mother, just if!! We never realise the importance of things until we lose them, and here it's just not about any random thing, it's about her parents. No wonder she feels so guilty and is so engulfed in pain.

Arnav's wish to reduce her pain, to soothe her, to calm her, to pacify her, to reduce her agony, to help her let out all her anguish is so touching, so heart-warming. Her tears is his tears, her pain is his pain, her grief his grief!! :'(

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Feeling his shuddering breaths, Khushi hugged him tight. She knew, just as it had been unbearable for her to witness his pain on his bad day, her husband was struggling to be strong for her.

Lying there silently, Khushi let her tears wash away the burning ache that had been building up inside her since morning, maybe, since the day she had lost her parents. Afterall, this was the first time she had relived the most horrifying day of her life. Maybe, the fact that her husband was the one person who could understand her agony, would help in healing her.

Finally finding peace in her Arnavji's arms, she slept, leaving Arnav to a sleepless night, a night where he kept vigil for his wife. It was his form of paying respects to those gentle souls who had brought her into this world, into his world." He wants to be there for her, to be strong her even though he himself is shattered and is trying to compose himself..And finally she finds peace after letting everything out to her husband...



"Aap bus humare paas rahiyega..."

"Hamesha...", he replied, hugging her to him" - That hamesha one word itself conveys all the love and more he has for her and her need for his mere presence conveys all the love she has for him and the trust and faith she has in him, the comfort she draws from him!!



Like I always say, I love their love and admire them for it..


You've done absolute justice to the emotions. The way you've described them is splendid and I'm sure for the one who's written it and the one who's read it would have a heavy heart at the end.


"When you lose people, you tend to shove your grief into a corner of your heart and get back to the practicalities of daily survival. Then, some days come around during the year, when every waking moment torments you with memory after memory. It leaves you so exhausted and broken, that it doesn't leave you with the strength to even cry. A huge hole opens up in your chest and every breath you take ends up failing to reach your lungs, leaving you gasping in agony. On such days, you just want to burrow deep into something, someone, who'll keep you safe from breaking apart, who'll prevent the hole from opening wide and consuming you as a whole.

All you can do is to just ride out those days, hoping that as the sun comes up the next morning, you'll be able to get back to your daily grind, the latch firmly back on that compartment in your heart. And go about your life, drawing strength from your loved ones, those who remind you that the world is not all pain and grief, there's joy in it as well." We lose so much that grief engulfs us to an extent that we tend to forget ourselves and move on mechanically constructing a wall around us. And there are some moments that actually remind you the truth, the mirror of the pain and grief and that moment, all we wish is for someone to hold us, to stop us from shattering up even more, to just say that 'it's going to be fine'!! And as that moment goes by, we again get back to the same old robotic routine just wishing that atleast the next such moment comes, we have someone by our side and everything goes on with this li'l hope.


Sorry for going overboard! Just that the A/N did tick me off to the past!



Well, that one was one beautiful, heart-wrenching piece from you..Looking forward to that lighter one (:


P.S I was caught up in work so couldn edit earlier and when I edited it, unfortunately I pressed the back button and voila, the whole thing was gone. So I had to write it up all once again and that's taken up even more time! I so wish IF had this option of self drafting, atleast then it would be saved instead of erased totally!



PPS When I read this, I was reminded of Soulmates and I remembered that quote of Dawson -

Lily:Whats a soulmate?
Dawson: It's a.. Well, it's like a best friend, but more. It's the one person in the world that knows you better than anyone else. It's someone who makes you a better person, well, actually they don't make you a better person... you do that yourself-- because they inspire you. A soulmate is someone who you carry with you forever. It's the one person who knew you, and accepted you, and believed in you before anyone else did or when no one else would. And no matter what happens.. you'll always love them.


Somehow Arnav and Khushi reminded me of this!!!



Siaa! My God! My first thought was that 'Ahh, my sis has surfaced...' and then I sat down and read your post...
All I can say is, Thank You! For someone to take the time to write this much about my OS is the greatest of honours...thank you...
And, it is even more of an honour to realise that the Arnav and Khushi I tried to portray, did touch you enough to pour out your heart...🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Angels11

Sorry but i dint enjoy this OS coz most of it is in Hindi. I prefer 2 read stories which r in English though i am v fluent in Hindi. Just a request frm me. Of course its ur wish wat lang u post in but it ll b better 4 readers like me if u post in english.

Honey, I have put up the English version on Page 2!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: polly2312

This was beautiful!! You have touched my heart with this piece of writing!

Oh how I wish the writers of the show had shown something like this. They skipped many important things like this which would have been a great closure to some of the loops they opened early in the show...things that made me connect with the show in the first 6 months.
You described Arnav's emotions perfectly. Instead of going the cliched way, you actually made it seem very real when you made Arnav apprehensive and clueless as to how to handle his wife. But he was clear in one thing...that he will be there for her...even if he does not know exactly what to do to ease her pain. This is very much like how most men operate. They are usually clueless as to what to say or do that will make the woman feel better. But they stick to the woman and follow her around diligently when they see her in pain.
Loved how Khushi finally found a release for her pain that she had bottled up all these years. True soulmates!

Thank you!
I do know how men operate, LOL...the long foreword and afterword must have clued you in to the fact that I'm not someone who's a stranger to the curved balls life throws at us...
And men, bless them, usually shatter completely when we, their 'emotional' support, need their 'emotional' support. I actually think that they suffer more for us! It's just that they do not know how to express their concern...hence the hovering...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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All your OS are wonderful !! Amazing concepts and amazing writing. Please continue writing.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Appurs

Siaa! My God! My first thought was that 'Ahh, my sis has surfaced...' and then I sat down and read your post...
All I can say is, Thank You! For someone to take the time to write this much about my OS is the greatest of honours...thank you...
And, it is even more of an honour to realise that the Arnav and Khushi I tried to portray, did touch you enough to pour out your heart...🤗


I do sometimes go MIA suddenly :D but I return back soon 😆

Your potrayal of Arnav and Khushi is one of it's kind! I love'em..

As far as 'thank you' is concerned, you never thank your sis, right? It's your right to make me happy, and it's my right to make you glad 😳
And moreover thank you's are like boomerang's! You say it, I say it, you say it and I say it and it goes on 😆

For being one of those people who could make me smile and rant my heart out, hugs to you sis 🤗



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Posted: 12 years ago
#36

Originally posted by: abavi

Hi Appurs,

This peice was wonderful, writing grief is difficult, you need to put yourself in that place and then go through that emotion, envision it to put it in paper... You have doen wonderfully!

Thank you...can I take the typos as a compliment? Were so you moved?
I have been in that place before...when I lost my grandparents and my fiance...
All I can say is that experience makes you a better writer...you've been there, felt that...so you can write about it realistically...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: shutter

such a poignant account of khushi's past!!!!!!! u captured it so beautifully... awsome n loved it to the T!!!!!!!

must hv been very painful n draining experience for u to write this!!!!!!!

It was...I was out for two days after writing this...couldn't bear to proof read, even..
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Posted: 12 years ago
#38

Originally posted by: Nidsubh007

👏 you handled this chapter beautifully! I have always wanted the show to address this issue and today you made it into a reality. I can only imagine how difficult it was to write, because reading it was extremely hard! I cried with Khushi, for Khushi. And for once Arnav did everything just right.

Thank you for this. It truly was needed.

It was very very hard...had to confront a lot of bottled up angst to write this..
Which is why I'm so glad that it struck a chord with all of you...thank you for your regular feedbacks...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Appurs

Thank you!
I do know how men operate, LOL...the long foreword and afterword must have clued you in to the fact that I'm not someone who's a stranger to the curved balls life throws at us...
And men, bless them, usually shatter completely when we, their 'emotional' support, need their 'emotional' support. I actually think that they suffer more for us! It's just that they do not know how to express their concern...hence the hovering...


@red - I agree with this. I too wish they had closed all those loops and developed those characters and relationships fully but alas that did not happen! Thankfully we have writers like you to close those loops and further give a new dimension to their story..


@blue You've aptly summed it up. Infact had it been the typical way, it would not been upto Arnav's character. How much he understands a person, he'll never be able to put it into exact perfect words, that would never be him! His apprehension along with his yearn to ease her out is what distinguishes him..

@underlined - That's just so true. Once the men see their lady love in pain,regardless of not knowing what to do, they perfectly stick around with them and I think that's far enough..Atleast they give that much of support!

@pink- Women are known to hold on to their leashes for a longer time than the men. Once their support is down, they withstand till the stretch and then they break down! But men definitely are a different case. The all tough and strong people break down the minute their emotional support breaks down. And they do definitely suffer more as they never know how to ease the other person out and that adds on to their break down even more..

Strange are the ways of women and even more strange are that of men!

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Posted: 12 years ago
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You've written this amazingly, good emotions shown by Arnav and Khushi.
The best bits being Khushi talking to Arnav, Him comforting her & finally realizing what an awesome job Shashi & Garima did...

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