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Originally posted by: AshesToDust
The start...😳
Simply awesome... where are you getting all these amazing words and ideas from these days. the way you linked the chapter with the prvious suddenly reminding me ...yes ...she was hurt at his words. The precise judgement there and its garb which veils us...splendid. Haha...well I guess I am getting inspirations from one of the awesome writers here 😉 My ideas and words sound immature compared to yours 😳i noticed this chapter was more focused on details than the dialogues and nothing can explain feelings better than the details. and you were so precise in measuring every single ounce of pain and hurt feelings both had... mind my scientific lingo. Oh I am so glad you liked it 😃😳 In this update I wanted to explore their feelings particularly of Shlok's because I figured if I wanted to move the story then I had to make Shlok realise that somewhere he's doing wrong.The moon...the glow and the atmosphere you created there...man i have no words. the mystery she was to him and the puzzle the scene had become... no wonder it took you so much time. your work was like a perfectionist's. Perfectionist? 😲 😆 Aren't you being a little too kind on me? 😈i liked it that Shlok only saw what played on her face and did not reach out to her. if he had consoled her...it would not fit in the turn of events. Yes you are right. That's what I felt, even though the original idea had him reach out to her and console her. But I changed my mind at the last minute. Glad to read someone else's point of view on that 😃Astha decided to distance herself from him just because she was so hurt? and she did not want to be hurt more? well i think it was more or less a valid reason for what ever she decided.Amazing how shlok has started to care about her words and gestures...of course not that he knows it already. Yes he's gradually learning 😆 And he wouldn't find out abt her feelings until sometime later 😃So she took gauri into confidance before telling him... you know i was pitying shlok all the time... he doesnt even know what he is supposed to do when she is pulling out such a cold shoulder in his direction and her words of course... taunting and a must shock for the poor boy.Made him miss his childhood friend... 😳That garden scene was so awh... i wonder if it happens to me... the rain crazy i am..i would have started enjoying before knowing anytime soon that it aint rain but those garden sprays.😆 Haha...just like me. I'm water crazy, whether its rain or sea 😆and ab precap ke bare me kia kaha ja sakta hai...😳😳😳Update soon!
Thank you so much Suri 🤗 Always love ur thorough reviews on my updates.
Btw sorry for the late reply 😳
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