OS: THE LOVE SHE WANTED TO FATHOM [ShivIka+Sahil] [TY note:Pg 6]

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panjami

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Posted: 7 years ago

#11

Such a beautifull os...

Sahil is seeing a dad in shivay and shivay is always dad to his brothers...Lovly

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Amnu

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Posted: 7 years ago

#12

Beautiful and Perfect! This was wonderful writing. Looking forward for more work from you😉

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Priyanka Rajgor

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Posted: 7 years ago

#13

Amazing😊 I always wanted to see this side of shivaay😊 thank-you for this wonderful piece

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@BoonAndBane

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Posted: 7 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: S.love1
Beautiful concept and written nicely
Loved this idea of sahil requesting shivaay to be his dad officially
Annikas hesitation and insecurity about the matter was so real and understandable

Shivaay is really a great man, love and respect him as a character
Thanks for this enjoyable one shot
Much love!

Hey Saumya🤗,

Thanks a lot the kind words you used for this shot.😊😊
It is always a pleasure to know that people are liking your work. 😳😳
Sahil and Shivaay's duo is a combo that I adore a lot. I just love their equation from their initial tiffs to the super-sweet bond. 😛😛
And about Annika's insecurities, I am glad they looked real to you. The idea behind it was that I felt he herself doesnot seen to be too much attached to Sahil's parents and them neglecting Annika after Sahil's birth can be a possible reason for that. So, she didnot wanted Sahil to feel the same pain if later the inclination and love would shift to their own child in future.🥱🥱

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Posted: 7 years ago

#15

Note: I will be replying to all the comments personally but it can take a few days as life is keeping me a bit busy right now. Or, I may reply to two-three comments in a day.

I hope you all will understand .😛😛

Thanks a ton to all the readers for liking my work. 😳😳

Edited by Rainzz - 7 years ago

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Posted: 7 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: cestlavie
This was so beautiful! 😭

Thank you so much dear.😳😳

I am glad you liked it.😊😊

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Posted: 7 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: samiksha1993
Other than the fact associated with LCPD that you have mentioned here what really caught me was "Rudra will be my first baby."
This shows the kind of responsible person this Shivay is. To make new relations you don't give up on the older ones.
The way Shivay was unable to spare a glance at Anika when focused on that door and red light is actually a very powerful moment you described here. There are times when mutual dependency does not work no matter how profound the love is. One prefers to stay with their own-self and dwell in their own strength and t is very normal. It did not mean Shivay loved Anika less it only meant he was waiting for the storm to pass.
I am a sucker for information anything that can make me find something new l I love reading it and when it is given to me in such a beautiful packaging as this story isko kehtey hain sone pe suhaga. You made me read about Legg-Calve-Perthes disease.kash humari harneet ji bhi thoda research kar leti to bahut kuch dikha sakti thi. Par in this glorious era of information they love living in the oblivion of ignorance.

As always Poignant, well crafted and it was a beautiful story.👏
Loved it.

Hey Samiksha🤗,

Thank you so much for sharing your view about this one -shot. It makes me extremely elated to know that you found this shot nice. 😳😳

About Rudra part, I must say his mention was necessary. If he is trying to convince Annika that he will not forget Sahil in future, he should also not forget whom he called his first baby. In my opinion, if he didnot mention Rudra's name there is ni assurance that he will not neglect Sahil after his own children. But then, it is Shivaay we are taking about here jo apni jimmedaari se kabhi peechhe nahi hat-ta. 😉😉

About LCPD, I wanted to add a bit of medical information regarding his disease to bring a sense of realism. I hope I suceeded in it.😊😊

I know why the writer doesn't do research as it requires effort. Searching, sorting and then selecting is sometimes a tedious process. So she keeps it simple. No research ever . No logic ever. No ummeed for these things in viewers ever. Any ways, kahan pahunch gyi main.

I am glad you liked the red light bit. And yes, you have decoded his silence too aptly. Sometimes we just need us to pick and hold ourselves in our own private space. 😃😃

I love reading your comments and your explanations about the scenes. They are sometimes even better than what I had thought while writing the scene. ❤️❤️

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Posted: 7 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: ArhiIPKKND
Perfect...love d idea ...

Thank you so much dear. 😳😳

I am happy to know that you liked this idea.😊😊

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Posted: 7 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: bworm
Wow, awesome os.
Lots of details on medical terminology.
Sahil shivay bond is so cute.
Anika thinking about Rudra getting hurt..so sweet.
Love these two

Thanks a lot for the appreciation dear.😊😊

About incorporating medical terminology, I wanted that the disease and treatment should look a bit real.😳😳

Actually, my thought process while writing was more on the future. It was about Annika's insecurities for Sahil's future. But the way I wrote it, it looked more like Annika was talking about Rudra. But I think both versions are correct and you are the first one who made me aware of the second one.😛😛

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Posted: 7 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: ithihaas
This is such a heart felt shot... whenever I see Shivaay Sahil and Annika bonding it was always like a perfect family...and I guess that's what you have translated into...
Children are such pure souls that who ever gives them that undying love and care they simply melt into them seamlessly... and for Sahil Shivaay has been that person after Annika...so Shivaay earned that from little Sahil with his care and love...
I loved the last line that you described about Shivaay...
Shivaay picked handful from world and loved them limitlessly ... 🤗

Thank you so much for appreciating my work dear.😛😛

I am glad that you found this shot good. 😊😊

Yes, Sahil , Annika and Shivaay makes a perfect family and that was the idea behind it. 👍🏼👍🏼

I simply adore Sahil. He is too cute.😆😆

About what you said about children, it is very well put. I could not agree more, children are most unadulterated creation of God with lots of innocence. 😃😃

And yes, Shivaay did earned Sahil's love for him. 😳😳

I am really happy to know that you loved the last line. 🤗🤗

Edited by Rainzz - 7 years ago