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Himanshi

@Blink_Cat

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#11

its really gud annika... such a peaceful os...
shivaay is so guilty abt hs deeds bt yes he is on the path of redemption n to some extent he cover that part
thanks 4 PM

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Shivy

@Gotohelldil

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#12

Awww Anni
This is so beautiful, mind blowing and actually speechless
The way you have described Shivaay's emotions is beyond words
Os series on jaana is sure going to be a beautiful one
And please write on the line ' Tanga adhoora sa khamosh lamha sa'
That is my favorite line the whole song

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rarefan

@rarefan

Navigator

Posted: 8 years ago

#13

Loved the theme. And excellent shot.. So many unsaid things said by the touch. It was reassuring, trusting, strengthening, caring and loving.

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AparnaChinnu

@AparnaChinnu

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#14

you know wat Anniii...you are a rockstar 😎

Oo jaana is my favourite song...I really wanted to hug you or this🤗🤗This song is magical...

you completely done justice to it...

The story perfectly matched the story...you described both Annika and Shivaay's feelings beautifull...👏

His guilt...her understanding...his protectiveness...

her care...everything was just perfect ⭐️

in the show the scene was hurried and I am glad that you are showing wat we missed through this os...

My favourite scene was he hugged both of them...his little family...where just the three of them exist...kitna perfect heina...the next scene i adored much in this is

his realization...that he saw himself in her...she is just like him...his another half...

Annika said thank you to him and cried in his shoulder

i really remembered the car blast scene...for Annika both hell and heaven is shivaay...the prince charming behind the mask of a beast...you wrote it amazingly Annika...🥳

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Mystery1234

@Mystery1234

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#15

Anni

U made the song all more magical

Bautifully written

All the emotions and the unsaid words could be felt while reading

Just beautiful

Thanks for the pm😊

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farinaks

@farinaks

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#16

Thank you so so so sooo much Anni ...
You are such a darling...I don't have enough words to explain now what I am feeling now
I'm just elated and over whelmed.
It's incredible ...fantastic... Emotional...beautiful... Amazing...stupendous... Literally I don't want it to be a sensuous one I want it to be emotional one .
You have done justice to the song and story to
You have penned down on each and every word of the song
Loads of hugs and kisses from my side darlo.
Thankyou so much for dedicating it to me.
It means a lot.
You know I have been working from 10 in the morning I was just exhausted... But thus story soothed and relaxed me
I was so irritated before reading it but now I'm in a good mood.
As you can see how happy I'm as I have not use short forms as I always did .
Thank you once again
XOXO SQUARE
THANK YOU FOR THE PM 😊 👏
I would conclude with these lines written by me
Ishq sukoon hai Ishq junnon hai ...I
shq hi rabb hai , hai khuda..
..Ishq mein har shay hai haari ( specially for SSO because in starting he didn't believed in love but fell in love with Anni so deeply )...
Ishq mein har rasta juda...
Yeh log jo Ishq karne wake hai
Unhe kch nhi khabar Unhe kch nhi pta ..
..Aankhon se baat karte hai...
Dhadkanon ko padte hai ...Rehte hai ek dooje mein mubtila ( here it means lost in each other )

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KashiTessa

@KashiTessa

Navigator

Posted: 8 years ago

#17

It was as magical and soothing as the song.
Their emotions, contempt, love everything added a special aura .
Waiting for next update

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Khidki

@Khidki

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: water9786
Loved it totally..
ISHQ SUKOON HAI RAHAT HAIN...
perfect story for a perfect line...
Awesome read..
You did complete justice with it..

Now waiting for another perfect line and perfect story with it..

Thank You Chhaya!😃

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Shaina744

@Shaina744

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#19

O my Mata... It's bubbly bubbly feeling... Flowers all where... M in dreamland... How badly I want a person in my life like Shivay... Love this os a lot... And the song made this one more magica beautiful...
I have lost my words... It's jhakkas outstanding khidkitod blockbuster etc etc etc... You just made my day Ani... I love you a lot...

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Archie

@_SilverLining_

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#20

Res

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Unres

Anni I'm so sorry for being insanely late with the comment, I'm having my exams from this week and lately I've been so caught up with studies and stuff that I hardly had time to sit down and give it a read, and I didn't want to read it while I was preoccupied with other things.

This was so lovely dear, I love almost everything you write and this is no different. The concept is lovely and I hope you continue it! As a music lover and as a Shivika fan O Jaana surely holds a very special place in my heart- without this one Shivika would be so incomplete. The song very aptly reflects the essence of their relationship, and I love everything about it, especially the lyrics, and it's great that you are using them as a theme for your writings!

The first shot is amazing, all those emotions, it really touched my heart. Shivaay's guilt was beautifully portrayed, and so was her understanding of his feelings. They can read each other effortlessly, they communicate without words and it's so endearing to read about.

Also the poolside is my favorite place in the mansion, and I love everything that happens there, and you added another beautiful memory to that. Absolutely loved that part!!

Will read your second shot soon and come back :)

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