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zajedno

@zajedno

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Posted: 8 years ago

#21

Sir- said Viplav- I am her husband is still required by law because I have not divorced her. I thought he was dead. that was killed in the fighting and she is alive. all along the wings here and continued to live as if I do not, exist. I really do not know who you are and it is now the least important. The man said - I'm her father. another shok for Viplav. He looked Dulari and he could not say anything except -Father ... do Danh father died ... Obviously I'm not Say a man and introduced himself. And you could pray. he said .. to leave Danh alone and that not to bother. She told me you were here was whether he thought you were gone. And so I ask that it be so. get out of here. a lot of you accident brought my daughter. Just go and do more to going back.

Viplav was hit with these words, but he stood still, because he knew that the man was right.

Only Viplav said- I can not go, I need to know the truth. why she ran away and why we never occurred. please . only one to see her and to explain. I Vidha. Dulari as fierce mother said Vidha, .. are for Vidhu. You do not have anything to do with it. please go and do not come back. Viplav he realized that here there are more to do and started to get out of the yard. at the time she left the house and yelled Vidha you are Rakshas. you took the bracelet and have not returned. I told you this bracelet very important to my mother and me. that bracelet is my dad gave my mom when she's done something important. I want to pay me back the bracelet. then came out and Danh. She saw that Viplav stands and watches anxiously Vidhu.

She came and said Vidhi. Let it go. I'll buy you another / Vidha said, but I want right here because it is important to you. It is not important to me. You are important to me. let's go. Dad's waiting. so Vidha called Parshaya.Viplav stood and he could barely breathe. clutched his hands into fists and prayed fearsome god just to pass this day. He looked Danh and just asked - Why?

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zajedno

@zajedno

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Posted: 8 years ago

#22

Danhi looked at Viplav and cold because she do not love you. When she said it Viplav knew that the match but again it's been bugging why any of this came. When he looked in Vidhu wished it was holding in her arms and kissed her long black hair. She could be my daughter. it went through his head.

Then he decided to stay a few more days to investigate what happened. He turned and greeted with everyone and then he just said Danhi waiting for you tomorrow at 10 am in the morning we have to talk. Please come.

tomorrow at exactly 10 hours Danhi entered the hotel with Parshiya and she asked him to wait while she is talking to Viplav. Viplav felt strong pain of jealousy but refrained because he knew it now has the right to do anything. He just waited for him to explain why Danh. She started troubled and difficult silence. No one did not want the first one to speak. Slowly Viplav started to get used to not to touch its highest and only love.

And then it all began. Viplav no longer able to withstand the more he began to examine when, why, how, and all he wanted to know. Danhi matched or all the more was aware that her Viplav nothing believes. Therefore, bring the health and booklet of Vidhi to show Viplav that he was not her father. Viplav he could not come himself from pain and sorrow. percent felt a strong pain in chest got up slowly and headed for the room. Danhi remained in tears and watched him go only person who meant something in her life.

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Mishfan

@Mishfan

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#23

Zaj, bravo dear...a great attempt to continue the story post separation...something many

Of us did not want to see in the show.

Loved how you created the scenario of little Vidhu meeting her dad using the

memento bracelet.

Infact I think bringing back Raj into the story was something I always wanted...in the show,

post separation, Vipu did not have a support system...he was so much alone & in pain.

He desperately needed a good, trustworthy friend to talk to, confide in, but no...

So happy you have rightly included him in your story..👏

I strongly feel, as much as family is impt., true friend/s are equally or much more necessary.

With family it can get emotional but a true good friend can be logical & practical & understanding.

Also pairing Raj & Piya seems like a breath of fresh air...again in the show, some were hoping

Raj gets paired with Rajalaxmi...lol

But just like Hammie, the shocker to me is Viplav's sickness...why did you want that??

It's good that Dhani has her own family to support her , of course with Angel Parsiya.

Hope you cure Viplav ...& bring back color into his life again soon...

Thanks for writing, Zaj..😃

Please continue dear...

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Magnolia2

@Magnolia2

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Posted: 8 years ago

#24

Hi Zajie😃

Congratulations dear at your ability to have created a story which is sensitive and emotional!👏...You have kept our interests alive in wanting to know how the issues are going to be resolved. A child is the bond between the parents and I loved the way in which you used the bracelet to bring father and daughter closer and at the same time be the prop which allows for the chance meeting between Viplav and Dhani after so many years...

Liked the pairing of Piya and Raj... Both are robust and straightforward as characters and I've always liked the camaraderie between Raj and Viplav... Glad you included them in your story ...I would have specially liked to see Raj as a support to Vips after the leap in the show but sadly the writers never fulfilled my wish so thanks to you for including him in your story!😊

I wish to know how Dhani and Vipu get back together and really waiting for him to get over his fatal illness with all his loved ones by his side.

Keep writing dear!

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Mishfan

@Mishfan

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#25

Originally posted by: Magnolia2
Hi Zajie😃
Congratulations dear at your ability to have created a story which is sensitive and emotional!👏...You have kept our interests alive in wanting to know how the issues are going to be resolved. A child is the bond between the parents and I loved the way in which you used the bracelet to bring father and daughter closer and at the same time be the prop which allows for the chance meeting between Viplav and Dhani after so many years...
Liked the pairing of Piya and Raj... Both are robust and straightforward as characters and I've always liked the camaraderie between Raj and Viplav... Glad you included them in your story ...I would have specially liked to see Raj as a support to Vips after the leap in the show but sadly the writers never fulfilled my wish so thanks to you for including him in your story!😊
I wish to know how Dhani and Vipu get back together and really waiting for him to get over his fatal illness with all his loved ones by his side.
Keep writing dear!

Hey Mag dear...How are you ??

Seems like you are busy...haven't seen you here lately.

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Magnolia2

@Magnolia2

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#26

Hi Sudha😃

I'm fine dear... How are you? My father had been down for a visit and before he left wanted to spend time with him...so was inactive in the forum for a few days.

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zajedno

@zajedno

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Posted: 8 years ago

#27

slowly stood up and walked towards the exit of the hotel. Parshiya the video and grabbed her arm. Parshiya said quietly. if everything OK? Danh just nodded. Stepping out of the hotel Danh saw Raja and Dadi. She came Dadi and wanted to touch her feet. Dadi is just leaned leg to the side and went to the hotel. Raja is cold greeted Danhi and Parshaya and he went on. Danhi just cried and said they hate me. I know it's my fault we lie all but easy, my child is for me the most important thing in the world. Parshiya looked and said, let's sit down somewhere to come a little yourself and that you tell what it was. Danhi agreed and they moved into a small restaurant and Danhi began to talk. Viplav all wanted to know whether she is unable to keep his answers. And when asked whose Vidha she got mad at him and told him that Vidha only her daughter. showed him the defense of the health booklet where he could see her date of birth and only he confirmed that Vidha not his daughter. again lie. Kamine knew that she was pregnant and probably anyone else in the house but it seems that Viplav it was never found. They changed the date of birth because Danhi born in the house, even this out and that has nothing to do with Viplav.

Parshiya said. You still love him ...

Danhi was angry but he just told me never liked and did not believe me. If I believed I would now be with him and together bring up our daughter. But he is more trusted his family and I had to do it. all my sisters in the Ashram are dead because of me, because I know that I am the one who wanted to kill. and now I am again in danger if Viplav says that I'm here. I'll have to run. Parshiya reminded that went three years ago in Banaras just to see him, Danhi remembered how he went and how he watched from a distance Viplav because Vidha first time, then asked for his father. She stayed five days and hiding or watched Viplav from a distance. one happened that he looked in and her direction but could not identify it because she wore a headscarf over her face. When she returned from Banaras everyone thought would die as they become very sick with grief. But Vidha her power and she draws all of Vidhi. Parshaya looked worried and asked myself what would happen if Viplav learns that he is the father of Vidha. he wanted to help Danh because it is for him was one person who was and it helped a lot. Parshaya was on the edge of the law and due Danhi and small Vidhi he is back on track and said he will always be in my life with them and that they will always help. Parshaya has agreed to play Danhin hasbend before Viplav although he was not pleased that he lies or Danhi will do. Then he smiled and said. Danhi. when it comes my tied up and when she's talking to me playing your husband both have to kill us. hahahaha Danhi smiled and remembered his best friend who married Parshaya last year. She went to visit with her parents so they can now play husband and wife. Hahahaaha, can you imagine her face when I tell her. While laughing she did not notice that Viplav across the street and look at her. Him every her smile was shot in the stomach. He watched as she enjoyed with Parsha and laughing. Jealousy by the Destroyed and this was just another confirmation that Danhi now happy with another man.

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zajedno

@zajedno

Sparkler

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Posted: 8 years ago

#28

Originally posted by: Magnolia2
Hi Zajie😃
Congratulations dear at your ability to have created a story which is sensitive and emotional!👏...You have kept our interests alive in wanting to know how the issues are going to be resolved. A child is the bond between the parents and I loved the way in which you used the bracelet to bring father and daughter closer and at the same time be the prop which allows for the chance meeting between Viplav and Dhani after so many years...
Liked the pairing of Piya and Raj... Both are robust and straightforward as characters and I've always liked the camaraderie between Raj and Viplav... Glad you included them in your story ...I would have specially liked to see Raj as a support to Vips after the leap in the show but sadly the writers never fulfilled my wish so thanks to you for including him in your story!😊
I wish to know how Dhani and Vipu get back together and really waiting for him to get over his fatal illness with all his loved ones by his side.
Keep writing dear!

dear Mag. I dream this end the series. this is my unfulfilled dream. thank you for your support and I think that I will not disappoint any member of the forum. This is my story and I want to share it with you. I hope you enjoy while reading. Thanks again for your attention by pointing my attempt to write something.

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zajedno

@zajedno

Sparkler

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Posted: 8 years ago

#29

Originally posted by: Mishfan
Zaj, bravo dear...a great attempt to continue the story post separation...something many
Of us did not want to see in the show.
Loved how you created the scenario of little Vidhu meeting her dad using the
memento bracelet.
Infact I think bringing back Raj into the story was something I always wanted...in the show,
post separation, Vipu did not have a support system...he was so much alone & in pain.
He desperately needed a good, trustworthy friend to talk to, confide in, but no...

So happy you have rightly included him in your story..👏
I strongly feel, as much as family is impt., true friend/s are equally or much more necessary.
With family it can get emotional but a true good friend can be logical & practical & understanding.

Also pairing Raj & Piya seems like a breath of fresh air...again in the show, some were hoping
Raj gets paired with Rajalaxmi...lol

But just like Hammie, the shocker to me is Viplav's sickness...why did you want that??
It's good that Dhani has her own family to support her , of course with Angel Parsiya.
Hope you cure Viplav ...& bring back color into his life again soon...

Thanks for writing, Zaj..😃
Please continue dear...

my dear. I see that you liked the story. enjoy it because there is still a lot to write and of course all of you for reading. I hope I'm not missing something. there will be more things in my story.😉

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~DaZZ|ing~

@~DaZZ|ing~

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#30

Zaj, what a beautiful attempt at portraying Viplav's myriad of emotions. 👏 He's battling for his life, but he's so consumed in love that he's still in search of answers. He doesn't understand why Dhani hid Vidha from him. He's being led on to believe that Dhani's moved on with another man. The tone you've set for his devastation and jealousy is strongly apperceived. Emotional pain is often more obtrusive than physical pain. My heart goes out to this poor fella for all of his suffering. 😭 I'm so happy you included in Raja in your story. I'm happy to see Viplav with a support system other than his doting grandmother. 😊 Your story is getting more and more interesting, Zaj. Please do continue soon! Very intrigued to see how Viplav and Dhani unite in the upcoming parts. Wasn't expecting Viplav to be sick with leukemia, but perhaps this is your way of confirming Vidhu's paternity through a bone marrow transplant. 😉

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