Together We Are Timeless[IF-NC_ENTRY] For Round 5 , page 11 - Page 10

First of all, I'm so so sorry that it took me SO long to get to this but the thing is I've already read this like 2/3 times over, and didn't comment cause I wasn't sure I'd be doing it justice! Finally I'm trying...let's see! 😳

1st chap: This is so heart-wrenching-ly beautiful! The sublime flow with which you switch between their playful yet deep discussion on the changing social norms and the melancholy of the later times when Radha remembers the former. I love how the narrative then sways on the brink of hope and tension. Then comes Maiya! She is probably the only one is Braja who comes even close to understanding Radha!

2nd chap: Your analogies are always so beautiful. The one thing amog so many that I like about your writing is that the unmistakable touch of the grains from some sweet, forgotten village! It's so sweet, it initiates a sense of nistalgia in the reader (even though I'm city-bred from the first day of my life)! Maybe that is a natural instinct of humans- an ode to our rural ancestors! I don't know but I've always felt for Radha on a personal level! I often wonder HOW on earth she survived?! Radha's monologues are the most painful in these updates! It is as if we see her, and cry with her and smile with her!

The integration of Draupadi, and the subsequent dealing of a woman's freedom be it Radha or Draupadi was very subtle and wonderful while not being too overt or in-your-face!

3rd chap: I loved how Maiya sort of 'clears him' of the charges he faced as a child (not to mention they were true 😆). I'm so glad you finally tackled the side of Krishna in this whole mess. Sure, he's the God, but he sure deserved better than what he got. It was so not fair for the world to deprive him of the pleasure of Vrindavan. Sure one could say that Krishna was never forced to not go, but no one cares why. If he went back he wouldn't be able to bring himself to leave! Even his Dau left him after a point. Krishna was left all alone providing shadow to the scorched Earth like the legendary vata vriksha, but who shielded him?! NO ONE. Radha's initial anger lent extra beauty to their meet, adorning both with the human tinges they both wore so well! He should also know what SHE went through even though he probably did understand! They both had to o through SO MUCH of pain albeit in different ways. I don't understand why they had to, there must have been a different. This is one thing I don't like about Kanha. Why endure so much pain when you ARE a magician, of sorts, and to hell with niyati, it's KRISHNA for God's sake!

Epilogue: It is so delicately woven! True Radha and Krishna's love can never ever diminish even a teensy teensy bit! I was literally crying the whole time! Please keep writing more of such stories, please! ❤️❤️

As promised, I read it. As I'm on my mobile phone and I don't like writing with it. I'll give you my opinion on my computer tomorrow.

Originally posted by: Aarti_

Tha last part?😭😭It is very touching. 😳

Finally he meets her,after all those years😭 And she realizes that he is always with her for every moment.

Beautiful narration and always Madhuri di👏

I am glad I am the first to comment😃

Originally posted by: vibraj

This is a fitting, grand finale, the cherry on the top🥳, adored the way you presented the Epilogue and reinforced the theme of the timelessness of Radha Krishna love, your central theme! Kudos to you for a job well executed👏

Again, narrative, language, imagery, imagination make a simultaneous siege on our senses and weave a magical whole!👍🏼. Loved your interpretation of Radha's love and her surrender to her Lord for the greater good! Radha Krishna were and still are a truly iconic pair, the world over they are revered as a couple, more than Krishna's pairing with his wives!

Stupendous work, Madi, I can see, it was simply not easy to craft a magical story and write reams and reams on it without losing grip or lagging as a story teller, all the best for your future endeavor!👍🏼

Originally posted by: cygnet9

Madhu read all your writings in one go. I am loss of words to appreciate your writing skills, all I can say is👏❤️⭐️

Originally posted by: nn027

Beautiful story, Madi. They say that every end and a new beginning. I expect you to continue writing and to give us a new story shortly.

Thank you my friend. ❤️

Originally posted by: KrishnaSourav

Superb beautiful emotional part, loved it

Originally posted by: Avyakta

Madhuri, what a literary work it is!👏 How can I evaluate the thoroughness of your expressions in enhancing the ambiance of the ancient love story !! The main theme was revolved around the Power of Memory and the Difficulty of Accepting Reality and how they both intrigued Radha throughout her life! Your nature descriptions in your poetic style are so complex and very impressive! Also, your selection of words is spot on, gives a special effect to the readers' mind while reading every sentence and imagining every scene. I loved this protagonist Radha who has the capability of teaching and molding him for future endeavors. A pleasure to read and an honor to me to have you as my friend Madhuri.🤗