Gulaal: What If chp 26(part II) upd Pg 57 - Page 20

Originally posted by: without-fathom

Aditi ji - maafi de dein, for my repeated delays and disappearances, but I've hardly been around the forum since midweek, and have had (understating the matter) some of the craziest days at school packed with much more than I can or should be expected to chew! Khair - sachi mein, iss baar toh I wasn't lazy at all - my week was a wreck.

Jzee I am sorry I really feel like a dictator now who wants everyone to oblige him by just acting and following his/her every whim and fancy I am so embarrassed by that little melt down,it's nothing to do with your delayed comments,I knew you will get here at some point so sorry for all that drama and I can completely understand that's it not always possible to comments/provide feedback immediately,I will have more patience in future😊

But - here I am now 😃 Got done reading 9 and 10 in a go - to make sure intending chapter wise comments doesn't end up in indefinitely delayed ones...

As always, kudos to the subtle but substantial ways you weave in the changes and signs Aditi, really, I don't know how to be emphatic and yet not dramatic about saying this - I truly feel in awe of your attention to detail and progress simultaneously. Feeling a constant hiatus from the show myself - given my school and NBT phase currently - the awe just multiplies over how intricately and minutely you've taken care of every character, every nuance, every slightest of evolution.

Something I can't entirly take credit for,lot to do with my profession which actually taught me there can always be more than one meaning to a statement it depends how you say it and sometimes it's best to say as little as possible leaving readers/viewers to come to their own conclusions but do not forget your points needs to be substantiated by the characters behavious/action/growth and that's what I have tried applying in my story as well,As I am doing it for the first time there are bound to be mistakes/error of judgment but I am glad that you have liked and picked up on nuances so beautifully,It's always a great pleasure to read your comments and feedback it makes me view my story in different light altogether sometime to go back and reread stuff just to relate with the effect you describe,Thank you so much for your detailed and thoughtful analysis

Kesar's letters. Simple and straight "being married" statement. Gulaal and her ever trivializing/putting off habit with regard to the not so trivial things that - if she was candidly rising to her inner voice - poke her exactly when and where they should! I love how you carve PB here. As a mother who is not unfair - but a mother's heart that must follow a rule book to ensure her child's happiness. I like how you carve MB's one up acumen in that respect. I LOVE how you show the evolution in Kesar's responsibility - while still keeping the elemental traits in tact! I love how Gulaa - for all her evasive and self oblivious ways - has an all the more pronounced soul connection with Kesar which rises beyond and above the logic and norms and righteousness that binds her. The way their hearts just connect is so evident from that hug - where both GK simply succumb to what their hearts seek!

In this story Gulaal's character is going to be just as layered as Kesar's,I always wanted to see her trying to fight her pull towards Kesar and justify her stand because of her promise to Vasant,She cannot/will not turn around and walk away from the fact that she feels that soul connection with Kesar albeit she will try and fight it in name of righteousness or promises but she is human too and she has every right to love,live and be happy as anyone else,PB in my opinion was someone I couldn't relate to completely in the show,she was shown to be more concerned about Gulaal's opinion and her requirements than her son's welfare,any mother would first like to ensure her child's happiness over and above everything else in the life and that's what PB is doing in this story,I agree she is not unfair she is just a mom whose main focus is her child...

I love how you contrast the wisdom in Kesar and Gulaal. They are, each to their own space - very sensible individuals, beyond their years and experience made. Kesar barely at the threshold of college is world wise already. He may show Gulaal a moment of tantrum or such, but he is already appreciating the need of conducting his intentions without a bang and a shot! The way he summons her to the room, makes sure he understands what she wants and then implements her "want" through MB - fantastic writing Aditi! 👏 For the nth time, I'm in awe of the way you progress the track, without leaving a single moment or instance of event that feels like it could be otherwise. I remember telling you in the beginning that I was all up to read your take and how you would envision this what if - I can safely say, that if I ever had vague other conceptions, they're gone with a poof. The only credible, well manifested and oh so justified way this what if could have ever been, seems like yours now! 👏

Thanks Jzee,that a huge huge compliment I just hope subsequent chapters are able to justify the faith,I will try my best to justify each and every point to best of my ability and convictions,hope it meets everyone's expectations

And thank you - even if everyone must say this to you all the time - for filling in not just gaps, but actually making up for points of ruse from the actual show for all of us. The best thing about your story is - the situations still bear their strain and imperfections and all the material that goes into making powerful stalemates and lock down situations - and yet, you leave literally no character or situation in a place where another "what if" can even be speculated! 👏

In wait of how this second rendezvous at the "GK hangout" will go! Are you updating again this weekend? I have to admit even though you do a chapter a week - it leaves me very satisfied!

I have updated next one Jzee,I tried doing two chapters but that was taking almost entire weekend making my other half really grumpy so I am back to one chapter a week,I will see if I can manage another one through the week but if not then it will have to be one chapter every weekend I am afraid,Thanks for your lovely analysis and continual support it means a lot to me😊

xx

JZ

Originally posted by: manzilmukul

A very big res🤗

⭐️A very big res🤗

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First of all a big big thank you for considering our request and taking this SS as you had visioned it to be.And wo hoo what a weekend bonanaza.I had a huge grin on my face while reading it.I am and I have always been in awe of the fact and conviction with which you have come up with the basic essence of the characters in an alter scenario where Kesar literally grew up with her .Each and every emotion beautifully worked out and each and every detail consistent till the very end.GREAT JOB!!.

Wow that's a huge compliment Piyu,It means so much when it comes from you,i am in awe of your characterisation and background detailing skills just awesome yaar so I will take this with a big green on my face and now next time you notice my pic it will still be there😳

OK NOW COMING TO MY BAK BAK😆

I love you bak bak thanks for your promp unres yaar,I am toh so late na always

PART1

WOW!!the much awaited re-union and BANG ON!! so Kesar ishtyle..He sneaked into meet his Gulaal first na.The hesitation on the part of Gulaal was so well potrayed and the uninhibited display of his feelings again so wonderfully established 👏So Kesariya as he has always been the one who wore his heart on his sleeve na😳and then the Superb recreation of the Aur tu scene👏I lubbed the dangerous question of Kesu whether he is only a zimmedari for her

Kesar was more of direct action nah,jo dil mein wahi juban pe,aur jo juban pe wahi harkato mein,He was imo someone who never minced words or hid his emotions and that's what his plus points were he always stuck to what he believed in and executed the same with utmost conviction ,no hesitation in saying he loved her,no hesitation in accepting in front of his family,no hesitation in walking out when it wasn't what she wanted and no hesitation in accepting her when she confessed,I am toh fida over his straightforwardness

I lubbed the little jealousy when Talli billi barges inside the room😆and then the reunion between the family very well described too.I loved the little eyeplay between the pati patni and JK to humesha se rockstar che😆Oh and the pati patni rituals 👏

Yeah Gulaal will feel that and more in chapters to come,she is human after all and she accepts her soul connection with Kesar in this story as Jzee said beautifully that hug was proof enough

PART2

Awww A responsible and grown up Kesar slowly carving his way so that he could step into his bro's shoes.So good.MB and his decision to give Kesar all the answers very well written.Looking forward to that father son convo😍

Yeah this is something I though was overlooked in the show,there was so much potential in Kesar accepting his responsibilities and trying his best to fit in Vasant's shoes not because of family's expectations or Gulaal's but because of his love for his brother,someone who he admired and respected and loved more than anyone else till Gulaal walked in😳

Oh And I can totally relate to the insecurities of PB and her so called plan though for Gulaal's benefit butI feel for PB And oh again finally a dangerous statement again bacha talking about pati patni having the right to talk and and the conversation that followed very interestingly done👏Need I say I am loving this Kesar who loves to take things in charge whether in matters of Gulaal like talking to MB and not allowing her to go away or whether asking biwi to follow him...So Kesarish😳

I am so glad you can identify with this PB cause this is what they should have shown too,how can a mother forget all about her son's wefare and concentrate on her DIL's whim and fancy imo she failed Kesu miserably in the show,Kesu to kesu he rahega na, he is just using this Pati/Patni tag as excuse he is still to realize what he feels for her na and the day he does all this haq will go away only unconditional surrender remains path for true love always follows this route na😳

and Is it right to end the chappi there😡I just cannot wait for their little venture in amidst the beauty of the nature.Ahhh ye chappi kahtam kyun hua

Ab toh update kar diya na,maaf bhi kar do sarkar,galtoi ho gayi aage se dhyan rakhungi,waise aap se hi shikha hai maine chapter kaha end karna chahiye

Ahhh Adu ..Tune my impatience ko aur badah diyaI want an update😭

chal jane de...I know the next one will be worth the wait.

Update kiya aur har hafte karugi,pakka promise,thanks for your patience yaar

and Ya I almost totally forgot about TAlli billi ...use dur ralkhne k liye thanks.Kesar way to go Talli billi ko paas bhi nahi phatakne dena😆

nahi kabhi nahi,main toh uski sundarta se itni prabhavit nahi hu na,isliye meri story mein woh sirf fill in the blanks ka kaam karegi yani ke khabhi khabhi hi dikhayi degi😆

Lubbed it👏⭐️

Thank you so much for your lovely comments and constant support Piyu,It means a lot to me🤗

Originally posted by: minizz

Res😃

hawww main bahut late ho gayi😭

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Aditi,pehle yeh le ek badi si jhappi for such awesome updates🤗I am in love with them😳What a beautiful twist to the scenes from the show.I enjoyed it a lot.I will give my detailed comments tomorrow😃

Hey Mini return jhappi🤗 Thanks partner,I am glad you liked it

The wait was so worth it😳

Aditi,I feel like I am repeating this too often but I really don't care...I am loving Gulaal so,so much.Her character is human here and I am able to relate to her feelings completely.I am happy that you are presenting the story through her eyes cause it gives the readers the chance to peek into her mind.The CVs did that to a certain point but then later on they stopped relating the story through her eyes and she became almost impossible to understand.For me Gulaal was perfect with that mix of vulnerability and strength which she had during the intial episodes of post leap.Later on she became sort of a demi Goddess which made her character unrelatable.ok sorry about blabbering but I am really enjoying this version of the show and I kinda wish I had gotten to see this Gulaal on the show.

Mini,I completely agree with you,Gulaal should have been like this more human aware of Kesar's growing attraction and equally feeling that pull towards him but she had her to break her shackles of promise she bound herself with also the odd of society and family if she accepted her feeling for Kesar the connection she realizes but doesn't want to accept

I loved her slight apprehension here...she is aware of the fact that Kesar has grown up and is no longer the little boy yet at the same time she feels so happy when he hugs her...but once again what struck me was her feelings about Talli barging in.That dialogue about whether she had been right in not stopping Kesar spoke volumes.She was not happy at all that Talli had interrupted her moment with Kesar.I loved it.How can I forget the "Aur Tu"scene.Your version of that scene was beautiful and quite intense.It was a brilliant little scene and I loved how Kesar is so impatient to know her answer to his question of zimmedaari.I have to admit I loved his mild flirtatious teasing a lot.aaah kaash aisa ek chota sa scene show mein bhi hota.This reminded me of the madir flower scene.

Aur Tu is their signature line na,mujhe bahut pasand hai,I will try and use it liberally i guess and Kesar toh wants answers na,he will not rest till she makes her accept that he is more than zimmedaari😳

I love you JK⭐️...have to say she remains the unofficial cupid here too.PB is understandably insecure and fearful.The start of Talli's band bajaofying was done in style.As you know I love the authoritative Kesar a lot.So I loved it even though bechara had to suffer for it.

The next chapter was absolutely wonderful.I loved your version of the zaruratein scen from the show.Wow...that was very well done.PB's insecurities gave way for an intense GK scene.awww Gulaal doesn't want to go.she wants to spend time with her Kesar.You have no idea how much I loved that part where you explained her state of mind.Kesar was quite mature and responsible in this chapter na.I mean his attitude is there but the way he starts taking on the responsibilty at the karkhana is admirable.The way he speaks to PB and Gulaal was really brilliant.waise bhi when Kesar is not overcome with anger or grief no one can beat him at logic and sense na.loved him here.The GK scene was so good.aakhon hi aankhon mein ishaare and then the pati patni statement from Kesar.I loved it.I want more of such scenes.You are good at it yaar.

Kesar though 18 is wise beyond the years,Vasant's untimely death did not leave him with luxury of normal childhood anyways but the experience made him mature and responsible very early in his life na

Kesar can read Gulaal like a book and he knows her mind and with that confidence he is able to talk to MB about it.oooh all this is making me look forward to when the secret is revelaed to Kesar...wow what will he do?His reaction to Gulaal is going to be much more intense than the show na.The last bit was really good.I want to see what happens this time when they go that place cause everythime they go there we get to see some huge revelation happening.toh ab kya hoga.waiting anxiously for the next update.

Aditi,you are doing a fab job yaar👏

Thanks Mini,I am trying my best to not deviate from the story at all trying to change the scene as we would have liked to see it,I hope I can do a satisfactory job with this yaar,It would mean a lot to me,Thanks a ton for your lovely comments and appreciation means a lot to me🤗

Originally posted by: Kesarmania

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kal sab unres kardunge

good nite

hi aditi, this was such lovely chappi👏. gulaal was yearning for the support of her kavach, he meant everything to her. but still she could not answer his question when he asked her he is just her jimmedari.

and his signature dialogue ' aur tu'.

i loved the first scene😳

and their conversation in kesar's room. he understand's her feeling more then she herself can understand.

totally loved it, wilhl wait for interesting chapter's like this one.😃

Originally posted by: alanta

Aditi.😳. me here🤗

Hi Alanta🤗

Chapter5:

Gulaal as always best in getting her way at last and manaoing, here with the help of Panba.. So he was not getting eager to study but to teach his teacher a lesson.. good Kesar, u are proving to be the Kesar himself, as u are growing up. loved the PB, Kesar convo bit and there comes the typical Kesar na.. no matter waht he talks about it should end with Gulaal and PB very clearly switched the topic. The sulking and complaining Kesar is always a treat to watch esp infront of Gulaal.. There comes the bacha thing again and Kesar couldnot hold it anymore.. .. he is so hurt na and Gulaal this is the one thing that she knowingly/unknowingly kept on ignoring that he is growing up..

Yes,Kesar is eager to teach his teacher a lesson,typical teenage trait I would say,For Gulaal he was always a baccha,because she never wanted him to grow up re,there was that dependency on her part but Kesar had that urge to hold on to her to,for her to do things for him that exclusivity he always sought what made their bond truly unique

hmm "Mein bimaar hun na" so reminded me of the Kesar(Ali) who asked her to feed him with her hands, because she had beaten him and his hand is aching...

And he couldnt take it anymore when he came to know that Gulaal went with Dushyanth that too not even informing him and that was the end for him and finally he had to blurt out the very thing "aakhir patni

hai woh meri..." not that aware or even more he doesn't care about its consiquences.

Chapter6 &7

Gulaal all tensed and worried on the mere thought of Kesar leaving the house and moreover her, but Kesar, all determined and seems more 'samajdaar' than her, or he understands the situation well, for he was expecting such an action from MB or rather he believes it is good for both of them at the moment,. And later on chapter 7, the father son bond is ever admirable and specially because of the maturity that Kesar shows here like a grown up. And the last bit where Kesar all gets in to complaining mode with Vasanth about Gulaal and his way of telling him the inablity to bring imli for Gulaal for esp that she has not eaten anything and yes as the title indicates, all about the promises. All in all this chapter was awell built up for the upcoming events.😊

Yes I would say that he was growing up and realized his mistakes immediately the way he said was not right though his intention was wrong😊

Chapter 8.

Her wait for him the whole day was so beautifully described and also her disappointment of not finding him with Dushyanth and later her angry or rather being more worried and last his arrival, as if came only for her.. and all her anger just vanishes to thin air na,.. and all got transformed in to concern for him, when he gives her the plan of going for a ride and within seconds they are in their own world.. back to their dream land and the last bit where Gulaal thinks Kesar for Vasanth' felt like a new beginning.

Yup she was worried about him especially that he had never been away from her for so long,this was first time they had been apart for five days and naturally she was concerned for him and Kesar always managed to bring that genuine smile on her face na😳

Beautiful Aditi.. just beautiful.. really a good feel while going through all these chapters, the beauty of their bond is well explored dear.. just no words.. brilliant 👏

Thanks Alanta for your lovely comments,Thanks for your support for this story means a lot to me😊

Originally posted by: sharmishta

Hi aditi,

Aww Thanks you Sharmishta for lovely flower😳

kk, so Kesu's back... good dat she didn't refrain herself frm exprssn d sheer joy of his retrn aftr lng two years... loved their passionate cnvrstn.. oh talli, iss KMH ko abhi aana tha... @$#&!!😡, grrr

Na he is returning after a year,and well Talli ko mein jyada bhaav dene wali nahi hu isliye fikar nahi

Gulaal doing the welcomn rituals as his wife was really so rmntc...i mean, she was doin it wholeheartedly instead of being galool..

Well she was doing it for her Kesar irrespective of what tag it came with even if there was no DV between them she would have done it with same enthusiasm

he is one ziddi bacha, his insistence of gettn an answr 2 what he's 4 her..

Well that's what defines Kesar I guess😳

Coming 2 d second part,

Kesar's reactn on gulaal going to maayka, der brief eyelock n gullu follown him was so hubby-wifey type..

Yeah well I just wanted to establish their understand here😊

den comes his bang on questn abt her necessities.. kesar being kesar knws very well to turn things in his favor,na...

Am sho happy dat he turned down PB's request to take Talli billi with them... Lage raho Kesu...

Waitn for some romantc yet emotnl scenes, aditi...

Update soon...

Aww Thanks for your lovely comments Sharmishta,I am glad you are liking the story so far😊

I have updated next chapter hope you will like it😳