Gulaal: What If chp 26(part II) upd Pg 57 - Page 18

Originally posted by: manzilmukul

WEEKEND KAB AYING😭

Aditi.😳. me here🤗

Chapter5:

Gulaal as always best in getting her way at last and manaoing, here with the help of Panba.. So he was not getting eager to study but to teach his teacher a lesson.. good Kesar, u are proving to be the Kesar himself, as u are growing up. loved the PB, Kesar convo bit and there comes the typical Kesar na.. no matter waht he talks about it should end with Gulaal and PB very clearly switched the topic. The sulking and complaining Kesar is always a treat to watch esp infront of Gulaal.. There comes the bacha thing again and Kesar couldnot hold it anymore.. .. he is so hurt na and Gulaal this is the one thing that she knowingly/unknowingly kept on ignoring that he is growing up..

hmm "Mein bimaar hun na" so reminded me of the Kesar(Ali) who asked her to feed him with her hands, because she had beaten him and his hand is aching...

And he couldnt take it anymore when he came to know that Gulaal went with Dushyanth that too not even informing him and that was the end for him and finally he had to blurt out the very thing "aakhir patni

hai woh meri..." not that aware or even more he doesn't care about its consiquences.

Chapter6 &7

Gulaal all tensed and worried on the mere thought of Kesar leaving the house and moreover her, but Kesar, all determined and seems more 'samajdaar' than her, or he understands the situation well, for he was expecting such an action from MB or rather he believes it is good for both of them at the moment,. And later on chapter 7, the father son bond is ever admirable and specially because of the maturity that Kesar shows here like a grown up. And the last bit where Kesar all gets in to complaining mode with Vasanth about Gulaal and his way of telling him the inablity to bring imli for Gulaal for esp that she has not eaten anything and yes as the title indicates, all about the promises. All in all this chapter was awell built up for the upcoming events.😊

Chapter 8.

Her wait for him the whole day was so beautifully described and also her disappointment of not finding him with Dushyanth and later her angry or rather being more worried and last his arrival, as if came only for her.. and all her anger just vanishes to thin air na,.. and all got transformed in to concern for him, when he gives her the plan of going for a ride and within seconds they are in their own world.. back to their dream land and the last bit where Gulaal thinks Kesar for Vasanth' felt like a new beginning.

Beautiful Aditi.. just beautiful.. really a good feel while going through all these chapters, the beauty of their bond is well explored dear.. just no words.. brilliant 👏

Originally posted by: manzilmukul

My haseenqatil😡Is it right to stop the chappi there..Where is my danda😡..Mummy.😳.Kesu is back 😳 and you had to stop right there😭

arrey itna gussa,bapre dekh main kaan pakad ke maafi manging choory,please ab to smile kardo please😊

AWWW Chal ja yaar 🤗..I know the reason for stopping there😳What a jhakaas chappi 👏

Thanks you yara I am glad you have no complaints about the pace

I lubbed it...👏.Well starting right from the way she enjoyed their little trip to Kesar explaing to her the need of his going to study in shehar and then their parting.. and the wonderful letters where Kesar said he was amrried and yet Gullu mata has to play ostrich and Oh biwi thinks that Kesu will find other gals attractive...hahahah WAKE UP..YOUR PATI IS BACK😆...Awww she was so anxious to meet him na and also loved the little jealous brat who orders biwi to stay away from Dushy😳and that brat has to sneak in to met his Gulaal first na😳So Kesarish😳

hmm typical Kesar overprotective,overzealous and over possessive when it comes to Gullu aur Gullu mata ka kya kehne inko toh sabhi chheze bacche ki nadani hi lagati hai,jab baat samaj mein aayegi tab tak toh bagut der ho jayegi na😊

Lubbly update and I want next chappi ASAP😆Next weekend tak intezaar karna padega kya😕But Yes YOUR CHAPPI WUD BE WORTH THE WAIT 😳Am waiting desperately for an update Aditi😍

Thanks Piyu,Main kya karu yaar,I don't get chance to even think about the story on weekdays aur mere liye 12 hours sleep awakens my creative juices so weekend mein hi likh sakti hu😳

Thanks for being here for me always,it means so much🤗

Originally posted by: without-fathom

Okay I want to go the proper way about this and comment on Ch.8 before reading 9 - because if I don't, then the final comments will probably be a diluted version of my current reaction, at some level!

Ahh Jzee thanks it was such a pleasure when a reader expresses their immediate reaction on having read something that actually made them think even if it's for a nanosecond I would like to say I achieved the purpose,that's what the intention was,to make readers think and envisage what she meant,what it really a slip of tongue,was it just reflection in the past or did she fully intended to acknowledge Kesar was indeed Vasant's reflection and hence the justification...

Aditi - what a beautiful, beautiful moment that was. Kesar catching her from a fall, Gulaal addressing him as Vasant, Kesar smiling and correcting her, and Gulaal going deep into wonder about the slip. I guess the standout point has to be Kesar's reaction. The GV bond has been such an interesting prerequisite especially from Kesar's POV in his profound sense of love for Gulaal. It's like one of his source fountains - elixir like - which made him love her yet more, and all over again, was her love for Vasant - and that by itself is such an interesting dynamics between GK. I like how Kesar's smile in reaction has more than a single undertone to it. There is one of course, of Gulaal's fidelity for Vasant - which always mattered so much to him; but I guess subjectively from the POV of Kesar here in this chapter, there is also this sense of almost proclaimed accomplishment for him, Gulaal mistaking/addressing him for Vasant - an iconic image he has been striving and struggling so long to match up to! Of course, from Gulaal's POV - Kesar, even as a shadow of Vasant - is his own unique person. And that's only fair to him - emulating some virtues, sure, but striving to be a clone - not really! Loved the sense of support and freedom that Kesar could lend Gulaal at once - to an extent that to her preoccupied mind with all the thoughts of Vasant, her past, and Kesar - for a moment, the overlap becomes a tangible something!

I dunno if I really made sense of what I felt reading that final bit - but if nothing else, I'd like you to know it was a stroke of genius - you almost make a reader catch for a nanosecond, before flooding them with such a wholesome fulfilling feeling that they've long waited for - fantastic stuff, as always 👏

That's such a huge compliment thanks a lot,feel like I am on cloud nine,I am so glad you are finding this version of "What IF" somewhat reletable and not out of the context cause given show's shortcoming in parts it remains the only show till date to have captured my mind and heart in equal measures almost a miracle😊

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*reserved for Ch. 9*

Originally posted by: minizz

Aditi,loved it...You know na that this is exactly what I wanted to see in the next chapter so I was very happy with it.i loved how you kept the flow of the story.

Thanks Partners😳 but you know na how difficult it got with this chapter,I couldn't think of how to continue but then somehow everything changed in the evening and I went on writing so much,I guess with writing it is like this you spend hours contemplating how you want to move forward and then give up but suddenly an idea strikes and lo..you don't know where to stop,I am actually enjoying myself it's fun to write just for that kick it ggives you when that eureka moment strikes you😊

That was nicely done.At the same time you are taking care of the subtle things.For example-Kesar extending his hand to help Gulaal.That is a tiny gesture but is so meaningful.love it.I am happy that you are not forgetting that part at all.

This is something I have kept consistent from 1st chapter I am glad you noticed it,I have tried to built Kesar's characteristic using small gestures like this, I hope to utilise the same in forthcoming chapters...

Aditi,I have to say you are becoming quite an expert in reading Gulaal's mind😊I could feel her pain at having to stay away from Kesar,her confusion regarding Kesar's attitude towards Dushyant,her mild jealousy (if I may so and and not in the romantic sense at all) when she asks him whether he has a liking for any particular girl and her understandable wariness when she hears Kesar's answer,her disappointment at the fact that Talli was the one cleaning his room(once again such a small moment but so significant-at least I felt so) and finally the happiness that she feels when she realizes that her Kesar is back-every single emotion was beautifully described.

Yes Mini,I am progressing her character here with her attachment to Kesar given equal importance and it's due place,it wasn't all of a sudden that Kesar started feeling for her it was a gradual progression and she made it possible for him with her devotion,love and sacrifices she made in every step of the way...

I loved the bit where Kesar breaks down before Vasant's photo-that was poignant.Kesar's possessiveness,jealousy and insecurity regarding Dushyant is coming out na.I am looking forward to what will happen now that he is here.The equation between him and Gulaal is definitely going to change and then what will happen.I want to know so badly😍.Aditi,this was a beautiful chapter and the tempo is excellent.I thoroughly enjoyed this update,yeh le badi waali jahppi for that partner🤗

Return Jhappi to you Mini🤗 I am so happy you are liking the story so far,Your lovely and encouraging comments is what keeps me going every weekend,Thanks for being around partner it means a lot😊

oh forgot to add loved the bit about Kesar's towering over gulaal.That made me smile😊

I have updated the last bit of my previous comment.Do check it out.

I have and have replied to that too🤗