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@Katyayani_devi

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Gulaal & kesar OS/SS

pg1:- https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/gulaal/2666374/gulsar-world-new-os-ss-pg1-updated-see-here

PG2:-https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/gulaal/2666374/gulsar-world-new-os-ss-pg1-updated-see-here?pn=2

pg3:- https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/52163619

pg4:-ONE RAINY DAY(15TH APRIL 2012)
https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/gulaal/2666374/gulsar-world-new-os-ss-pg1-updated-see-here

Edited by Savz_uniqueblis - 13 years ago

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Posted: 13 years ago

As the door of room closes with the bang, he looks up and finds her standing against the door;

the anger can be visible in her eyes clearly. He stands up from the bed and walks up to her until

there's a few inches gap between them. She didn't moved an inch from the position, upon seeing him

she lowers her eyes.

kesar: Kya hua gulaal? Darwaza todhne ka naya shauk laga hai kya?

gulaal doesn't look up instead she shuts her eyes, right now the last thing she wanted was to see him

and hear his taunting.

kesar: kya baat hai?

His question came out rather a surprise for her because the tone wasn't a taunting one

but she can sense care in it. She slowly opens her eyes but instead of looking at him

she looks right pass him. Her action makes him wonder. Anger is still there in her eyes,

he had never seen so much anger in her eyes before, or maybe he never looked into her eyes before,

except that one time where she labelled him as 'chauvinist'.

gulaal: Woh vasanth...

kesar: Kya vasanth? Kya kiya usne?

His tone suddenly changes from caring one into rather irritating one.

gulaal: Woh.. tum sahi thay.

Those are the hardest words gulaal spoke in her life, she never thought she would say this to a person

she can't stand. But she can't deny them as well, she hates this moment because he was so right.

kesar thinks he heard something wrong.

kesar: K..kya?

gulaal: vasanth bharose layak nahi hai. Woh hume double cross kar raha tha ab tak.

Woh us detective ko lekar aya jan bujh ke takay... woh information gain kar sakey aur phir bohut

systematically woh yeh case humse cheen le. Woh hum... mujhe use kar raha tha.

There you go, she finally said it. She really hates herself and this moment right now to her

it seems to be one of the darkest nights of her life. Saying this gulaal pushes kesar away and moves

from there and runs to dressing table and bangs her both hands on dressing table,

lowers her head and stand in this position.

kesar is still shocked at what she told him, but he could sense since beginning that guy is not right.

He even tried telling her but being gulaal she wasn't ready to accept anything he tells her.

kesar walks near the dressing table and stands against the wall next to dressing table.

He smirks slightly and gulaal sees it with corner of her eye, it boils her anger more.

kesar: Maine kaha tha na...

Before he can continue gulaal cuts him in middle.

gulaal: Haan haan, kaho ke tumne kaha tha ke vasanth par bharosa mat karo. Aur yeh meri saza hai.

kesar: Main toh... Par tumhe pata kaise laga?

gulaal: main ajj jab ajj NCB Delhi office gayi thi tab usko aur us detective ko saath dekha, woh dono yehi

baat kar rahe thay. vasanth detective ko dant raha tha ke usne hume Chamba ka tip kyun diya?

Woh hume yahin se wapis Mumbai baichne ke plan mein tha.

Whole this time gulaal doesn't look up or dare to look at him; tonight she wouldn't be able to see her

defeat in her enemy's eyes. Hearing this kesar can feel anger building up within him too, even though he

doubted him in heart he wished gulaal was right about vasanth. gulaal can't take the anger, the betrayal

anymore in swift she pushes everything away everything placed on dressing table so hard they almost

fly and fall across the room. kesar is shocked to see this action of gulaal as he has never seen her

in this rage before. He gets completely stunned seeing this; he can see a tear roll down her cheek.

He never thought that she'll be this hurt, he doesn't know how to react or what to say anymore.

kesar: gulaal tum... ab jo hogaya woh..

gulaal: PAR MERE SAATH HI KYUN?

She realises she shouted more loudly than she intended to.

gulaal: Mere saath hi kyun? Har bar mere saath hi dhoka KYUN hota hai?

Har bar main jispar bharosa karti hon wohi kyun mera bharosa thodta hai? KYUN?

kesar doesn't know what to say, he feels dumbstruck hearing and seeing this avatar of her.

One thing he knows vasanth has hurted her badly, because he did noticed how much she trusted him.

He feels so angry at vasanth right now, if he was here right now kesar would have killed him right here,

right now especially seeing how much damaged he has done to gulaal.

kesar don't know but gulaal's that single tear caused a wave of pain in his heart for a second.

gulaal looks up at him with fierce eyes as if he is the one to blame!

gulaal: Chup kyun hogaye? Kaho na, ke mera kasoor hai yeh? Ke maine hi galat admi chuna tha bharosa karne ke

liye.

kesar doesn't say anything, for once tonight he doesn't want to say anything or prove himself to her.

He looks at her calmly and waits for her to calm down but he realises that not going to happen right now.

He slowly walks away from the wall and goes behind her on the other side of room where a small refrigerator

is placed. He takes out the ice tray from freezer which is fitted in fridge. On the other hand still standing

in front of dressing table, despite in this rage gulaal couldn't help but to feel curious seeing the calm

kesar instead of the usual smirking, chauvinist kesar. But it seems world around her is going upside down

tonight, first the betrayal from vasanth and now this calm kesar, who didn't utter a word or proved himself

right; the 'I-so-told-you-so' kesar.

kesar comes back and stands right behind her, gulaal can sense him standing right behind her and close to her,

she quickly turns around and sees kesar. To her shock he has whole tray of ice.

gulaal: Yeh kya hai?

kesar: dekhta nahi hai kya? Mujhe laga abhi toh tumhari akhein khuli hain.

'And he's back!' she curses herself for thinking kesar was different tonight.

A naughty smile appears on kesar's lips, which leaves gulaal stunned as she never saw him smiling.

kesar: yeh baraf dekh rahi ho na, chalo aik kaam karo yeh aadhi baraf apne sar par rakho aur baki ki adhi

khao, kam se kam thoda gussa toh kam hoga tumhara.

'He never fails to surprise me!' gulaal is seriously wondering what has happened to him. kesar takes one of

ice cube from tray and starts eating it. He signals gulaal to do the same with his eyes, she's completely

speechless at his sudden change behaviour. kesar takes big bit of ice and ends ends up spilling the ice out

from his mouth and it's really cold. Seeing this gulaal laughs slightly, kesar looks at her in anger rather

pretending to be, seeing him gulaal tries to hide her laugh but she can't as a huge grin appears on her face.

gulaal feels her anger has came down now, she's a lot calmer now, she smiles and turns around to see herself

in mirror.

kesar stands next to her and finally seeing the opportunity he speaks up.

kesar: ab jo bhi karna hai hum dono ko akele aur aik saath karna hai, aik dosre ke ilawa kisi aur par bharosa...

gulaal: takay tum bhi mera bharosa thod do!

kesar: kitni ajeeb baat hai na, tumhe mujhpar bharosa nahi hai par es baat par hai ke main tumhara bharosa

thodh donga.

gulaal becomes speechless hearing this from him, she doesn't know how to answer him or what to answer him.

kesar looks at her, waiting for answer but she disappoints him when she excuses herself and runs to washroom

to get freshen up.

kesar stands in same position for a minute and then he looks himself at mirror and smiles.

He takes another ice cube from tray and starts eating it.

'Shukar hai, madam ka gussa toh kam howa.'

kesar feels relieved to see her calming down, he just couldn't see her like that he had to calm her anger down.

He knows she didn't deserved to be hurt like this because he did saw how much she respected vasanth.

'Koi toh baat hai, ajj mere saath woh pehle wala kesar nahi tha. Par jaisa bhi tha... shayad... acha tha.'

As this thought crosses her mind, she slaps her head and tries to remove it from her mind that instant.

After all she's becoming same old gulaal!

Edited by Savz_uniqueblis - 13 years ago

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minizz

@minizz

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Posted: 13 years ago

Savz🤗Chalo you also took a dubki in this world.If I am not mistaken this is your first SS right.Please do correct me if I am wrong and do give me the link of your earlier work.This was really good.I enjoyed reading it.The whole dynamic between Gulaal and Kesar is so interesting.The ice cube incident was so,so cute.looking forward to more.Do update soon😃

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@kiran_trudecent

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Posted: 13 years ago

Hey savz 😊 nice starting for an SS yaar, liked it, per many questions to be answered now na, who is kesar who is gulaal, what r they up to n whats vasant's plan n who is he 😲 update soon 😊

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MR21

@MR21

Sparkler

Posted: 13 years ago

Wow...here is a new story on our favorite jodi

Savz 🤗...this is very interesting...the dynamics between kesar n gulaal r very impressive n i had to admit this...whats the relationship between them...her trust in vasant is broken while kesar always said that vasant is not worthy of her truth...but gulaal is the one who dont want to listen kesar..n now she had to admit that she is wrong n more over kesar is correct...which is a very hard thing according to her...its like she is more hurt to accept that kesar is correct than vasant broke her trust...kesar is very well effected by a tear in her eyes...though he dont know the effect of her on him...loved kesar when he tries to make her calm down...

OMG...those words from kesar saying u dont trust me but have trust that i will break ur trust...gulaal had no answer on this n she cant answer...she has to run from there n she did leave kesar with no answer...she notice the change in him but she just brush it off...

Savz...very interesting start...they r having many problems...what kesar never smiled...whats the reason...why r they living like enemies...so many questions...so do update soon the next chapter...

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@Katyayani_devi

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: minizz
Savz🤗Chalo you also took a dubki in this world.If I am not mistaken this is your first SS right.Please do correct me if I am wrong and do give me the link of your earlier work.This was really good.I enjoyed reading it.The whole dynamic between Gulaal and Kesar is so interesting.The ice cube incident was so,so cute.looking forward to more.Do update soon😃

minizz 🤗 i already dubkiii in gulsar world long long before tats y bhatking here till now 😆 .sometimes when i roam here it's very silent baahut kabrati hoti hai. then imagine like mansi entrance scene moonwala scene with beautiful photography. 😆 ya everyone can dream beaufully know wat wrong in it 😳.this is my first attempt at this.becos of busy schedules i couldn't make it last year smahjoki new year resolution at trying my hand at some writing 😃 thanks for liking it.just tried gulsar OS/SS 😕 i think it's OS n started but woh FF bantha jatha raha hai 😲 grrr very hardly i put sudden break very jhorse n flight ko landoff kardi nahi toh upar upar jaraha hai with out any direction n very dangerous ki for people on the board(who studies this) n neeche ki logko bhi if anyone by chance reads this so sabko bachane keliye rokli nn woh pata nahi just scribbles,drabbles,puzzle,OS,SS u guyz give any name to it left for u guyz atlast woh bangaya SOS(ss+os) with lose ends fixing is left for u sab mei toh karo toh aap kya karogi i m not mean sabko chances milna chahiye na.i ended the story. this is when flight landed know my head hit thats y woh black beauty spot don't think otherwise waise i don't mind if u give tomatoes n eggs also n menu change also don't mind 😆 but y so hardwork throwing me catching i don't mind if u give it to my hands any tasty n any nice gift n no gift also chalega 😆

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minizz

@minizz

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

Savz,you are too cute yaar🤗BTW forgot to mention I loved the "Piyu Mhaari" whenever this page opens.It feels heavenly when I hear that music.Thanks for that.ab jaldi se update kar ok😃

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sauris

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Posted: 13 years ago

Savz quite a interesting start,ab jaldi se update kar

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Sree

@Katyayani_devi

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: kiran_trudecent
Hey savz 😊 nice starting for an SS yaar, liked it, per many questions to be answered now na, who is kesar who is gulaal, what r they up to n whats vasant's plan n who is he 😲 update soon 😊

thanks kiran 😊

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Sree

@Katyayani_devi

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: MR21

Wow...here is a new story on our favorite jodi

Savz 🤗...this is very interesting...the dynamics between kesar n gulaal r very impressive n i had to admit this...whats the relationship between them...her trust in vasant is broken while kesar always said that vasant is not worthy of her truth...but gulaal is the one who dont want to listen kesar..n now she had to admit that she is wrong n more over kesar is correct...which is a very hard thing according to her...its like she is more hurt to accept that kesar is correct than vasant broke her trust...kesar is very well effected by a tear in her eyes...though he dont know the effect of her on him...loved kesar when he tries to make her calm down...
OMG...those words from kesar saying u dont trust me but have trust that i will break ur trust...gulaal had no answer on this n she cant answer...she has to run from there n she did leave kesar with no answer...she notice the change in him but she just brush it off...

Savz...very interesting start...they r having many problems...what kesar never smiled...whats the reason...why r they living like enemies...so many questions...so do update soon the next chapter...

ramya 🤗 it's OS of gulsar. they were colleagues n she trusted vasanth n kesar-gulaal were opposite persons.so she never trusted him n like enemies.when her trust broke n she is upset she noticed a change in kesar n next sec brush it off so just tried OS on that situation of gulsar.when gulaal is upset how kesar calm her down n she was surprised n brush it off n went back as old gulaal. seems i ve to add this i think. thanks for bearing with the mistakes dear it's first attemptna n u r welcome to give any tips or suggestions if u want to.😃

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