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Posted: 13 years ago
#81

The Broken Bits of Life (part 4 continued)

Gulaal sat on the sands, staring at the raging sea, while her eyes were fixed at the flames beyond the waves. The flame of fire which once witnessed the most ecastic moments of her life...the very same flames which turned the very moment in to ashes and were still eager to swallow her life and the similar glare woke her thoughts, which were burried deeply with in her.
Some of those days, around 2 years back, dominated her thoughts...

Those days, while her destiny was unveiled before her.. while for the first time when Vasanth introduced her to Kesar

The days, while he (Kesar) ignored her for some reasons..which remained unknown to her...

The days, when his indifference pricked some where deep in her heart,
The moments, while she could clearly sense the care and consern in his eyes, that brimmed from a strange passion for her, which he often tried hard to wrap in his harsh words...

The nights, when she struggled hard with her thoughts to dig out the mistery with in him and at the same time she battled with herself while interpreting the strange pull that she often felt towards him..
...

(FB continues)

And finally the day arrived...

The day on which her life being tied with some one...the moment for which she has been preparing herself for all these days...
She looked at her reflection..that looked elegant in the bridal embarishments..and a subtle smile went through her lips with a glipse of shy in her eyes, at the thought of her groom...Vasanth..for whom, no girl on the earth could ever say a 'NO'..and so does she
...

The mandap at the downstairs(at Rewji's ancestoral house at Rashipur) was waiting for her...and she stepped in.., the priest chanted the manthras..and the Gadbandhan is done..
Pandit: Ab Var aur Vadhu pheron keliye khade hojayiye..
Both Vasanth and Gulaal stood up
Paanba(worried):Yeh Kesar kahan reh gaya...

Vasanth's eyes searched for him anxiously, while there was a momentary desperation in Gulaal's

Poonamba(consoling): Arey aap chintha mat ke jiye, uske Kurthe par dhoda sharbat gir gaye dhe..tho upar kamre mein uska kapda teek karne gaye hein..Kesarji aajayega..

Gulaal raised her head towards the room upstairs..to find that the room was locked from inside

Motaba: Muhurat nikla jaa raha hein..Pandit ji aap rasm shuru kar dejiyega..

The bride and the groom were showered in petals and blessings during the pheras..and the rasams of Mangal Suthr, Sindoor were all followed one by one..and at the end of the ceremony Vasanth and Gulaal were announced as husaband and wife before all those who were gathered there..
...

But the entire festive mood was soon burried under the cries outside that approached the mandap.



Edited by alanta - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#82
alanta your ffis really good,but you always leave us at the very curious point,arre yaar thoda bada chappi jaldi se update karna & the suspense is killing yaar
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Posted: 13 years ago
#83
Atlanta,great chapter😊I loved that you are showing both Kesar and Gulaal's perspective of the past.It makes us experience the whole story,not just one person's emotions.and you are successful in maintaining the suspense.that's great.so eager to know how the love story came into play😳but once again small chapter😭and woh bhi aise cliffhanger par.I enjoyed it but bahut jaldi khatam ho gaya.adutha chapter velyethe aayikotte😃please update soon.
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Posted: 13 years ago
#84
oieee yaar, Vas-Gul ki shaadi ho gayi😭
Bechara Kesuda- apne mann ko maar k- he was distant to Gulaal- I feel so bad for him. if I am nt wrong then, he has planned to go away after their marriage. But then after marriage something bad happen- eagerly awaiting the next chappie to know what it was! For now- a well written chappie
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Posted: 13 years ago
#85
Alanta kay yarr tu ne phir se chota chp lika ye nahi hogo jalidi se bada chp likna

chp was really gooddd the way u describe the past of gull in the flash back its too go ...od toda tho bada chp likna plsss
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Posted: 13 years ago
#86
Alanta...Loved it so much...
Good that u are showing both their perspectives of the past...
ohh she could feel his care n concern for her in his eyes but still confused for his rash n ride behavior towards her...loved how u put that she had a strange pull towards him...
Vasant n gulaal shaadi ho gayee...
Yeh kya how can u stop at that high point in the story...
update soon dear...ab ithna suspense kab thak handle karrenge...

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Posted: 13 years ago
#87
i love the chappie buhh i hate u 😡
you always stop on the engaging moments dunt ya over all the chapter was undescribable 😃
update soon 🤢
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Posted: 13 years ago
#88
Alanta...😳
Mere saare res kho gaye...u know na...me from mob...so idhar hi giving chotu comment 😭
M loving ur ss dear...its too good...itna suspense...haaye..main mar na jaun...😳
N latest part keliye main tujhe danda maarungi...kaisi mod pe aake u stopped it...😔
Pls yaar...jaldi update kar...cant wait to know kya hua tha...pleeesh...😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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i am sorry again😳he he 😳but lovely updates alanta both chappi 3 and 4 are interesting, i like the way ur taking the story the transition between past and present which u bring in intervals is an interesting concept, looking forward for ur next update😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I shall reply all of you after posting the update...promise😊
Edited by alanta - 13 years ago

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