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Posted: 13 years ago
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The Broken Bits of Life (part5 a)

The bride and the groom were showered in petals and blessings during the pheras..and the rasams of Mangal Suthr, Sindoor were all followed one by one..and at the end of the ceremony Vasanth and Gulaal were announced as husband and wife before all those who were gathered there...
But the entire festive mood was soon burried under the cries, outside that approached the mandap.
...
Two three men and a few women entered there in agony..
One of the Men (in fear and worry):Motaba..wahan kaarkhaane mein aag laga hein..hum log tho baahar thi..lekin baaki ki log anthar phas gaya hein (in urgency)..aap jaldi chaliye...patha nahin ab hum jab Talsaagara tak waapas pahunchne par..wahan ka kya halaath hua hoga..hum log tho wahan aag bhujaane ke poori koshish kar rehe dhe..aur abhi bhi sab log wahin koshish mein lage hue hein
The news shocked them extremely and Motaba took some moments to digest what he had heard)
Motaba(shocked):kya??(he gathered himself and was about to leave with them) Chaliye..Jaldi.
Vasanth:Motaba (he stopped him and hastily took away his Varmala) Aap yahan rukhiye..mein chala jaatha hun
(Paanba interfered):Beta teri Shaadi ...
Vasanth(tensed):Maa..wahan logon ki jaan khatre mein hein..aur kuch bhi sochne ka waqt nahin hein (he swiftly moved leaving Gulaal alone in the mandap while the gadbandhan got loosened which went least noticed)
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Hours and minutes passed...there was no trace of his return..Kesar now strengthen himself , wiped and warmed his face..he felt something strange in the silence that prevailed outside..he slowly got up and opened the door..
Kesar(at the stairs:frightened voice):Motaba..
Only then all of them found Motaba losing his balance, holding the receiver..Kesar rushed through the steps and hold Motaba from falling...while all others moved quickly towards him...Gulaal stood there in distress, trying hard to make out what was going on around her...and within a while the horrible news stricked the badi haveli..

VASANTH IS NO MORE..he paid his life in return for the 10-20 lives he rescued...yes Vasanth is dead..and never be back..never ..

Revji and Dushyanth rushed to the spot
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The sea was at its peak of violence.Gulaal kept looking at the raging waves, with her dread filled eyes..
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Kesar sat on the dark, in the same room where he was before..the unexpected moment has caused him a great loss -his brother - his guardian - his friend - his pillar, is no more...the loss is something out of his logic..
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A few minutes passed...
A faint sound of prayers and sobbings of a woman reached his ears..he recognised that it was of Poonamba's..
[Poonamba(weeping):Aap hamari beti ke saath aisa nahin kar sakthe..ab thak uski bidaai bhi nahin hui aur iski zindgi aisa mat ujadiye... (begged)..mein aapki paav padthi hun..
Jamuna Kakki(heartlessly):Koi faida nahin..rishta tho ban chukki hein.!!]

Suddenly he stepped out of the room and was perplexed to see a crowd of women in the room nearby..Kesar entered in, baffled, while he got the shock of his life, seeing Gulaal; in her bridal attire..Jamuna kaki harshly rubbed off the sindoor from Gulaal's forehead,.. rudely crushed her bangles..
Kesar proceeded towards her with shaking steps..he looked at her in disbelief..tried hard to recollect the memories of his girl that he once saw at the sea side..the chirpy and lively girl has turned to stone faced and lifeless, her shining eyes were dead..
He fall near her, and his shivering hands, cupped her face..
Kesar(in trembling voice):Gulaal...yeh kya hein??, yeh sab (his eyes traced her bleeding arms and the shattered bits of bangles and the terror reflected in his voice, even when he assured her)
Ab..sab teek hojayega..m..mein aagaya hun na.sab teek hojayega..tuje koi kuch nahin karega..(and in wild deperation)..kuch tho bol..(he broke in to tears)
Everyone including Paanba, Poonamba, Jamunakaakki, stood there bewildered..
Jamuna(shouted):Tu paagal tho nahin hogaya?? yeh sab kya kar raha hein... hat ja..(she tried to withdraw his hands from Gulaal)
Kesar (shot back): Nahin...khabardaar, agar koi hamaare paas aya tho (he moved her close to him..while his eyes were shivering with fear as if, all of them have come to grab his most precious possession from him...Gulaal's senses were paralysed and sat there oblivious to the surroundings...Paanba couldnt withstand it any more and left the place half dead in bewilderment)
Jamuna(in a disgusting tone):Yeh ladki apshakhun hein..khor apshakhun..
Kesar stood up with raged emotions.
Kesar(shouted):Bas kejiye...kaunsa apshakhun ke baat kar rahi hein aap..(in a shattered tone).iss bechari ki kya kasoor hein..agar shaadi ke jode mein hi ap log ise widwa bana rahi hein...
(Poonam helplessly stood at the corner, weeping..)
Jamuna:In sab se tera kya matlab??..(in angry)..aur humein jo karna hein wo karne de..(she moves to Gulaal who was sitting at the floor..and made her hold a white saree)
Jamuna(in a harsh voice): jaa jaake pehen le jaldi..(Gulaal was still sitting there as if dead..Kesar looked at her with his tear filled eyes while his whole body pained..seeing her and he could not stand it for much..Kesar frantically threw away the saree and paced towards the table where the sindoor dhaal was kept.
He stood there and remembered his Vasanthba, as if seeking his permission..

[Kesar:(eagerly) Vasanthba...aap mera saath denge na??
Vasanth(glanced at the veiled portrait and turned to him with a smile):Kaise sawaal hein yeh...mein tere har faisle pe tere saat hun..aur muje poora bharosa hein ki mera Kesar kabhi galat nahin hosaktha(confidence reflected in his voice..and with a smile of assurance he left)]

After a moment, he poured a hand full of sindoor over her maang and it overflowed her forehead..that made the entire atmosphere so thick and the ladies (JK, Pooba,...)cupped their mouth stunned, but even the extreme act didnt made any change in her,..which made him even more bothered..
...
After a few seconds of silence..Kesar turned towards the others.., looking at Jamuna..
Kesar(in a determined and stern voice):Ab Gulaal ek suhaagin hein..koi widhwa nahin..ab koi ise apshakhun nahin kahega...
The eccentricity in him, that reddened his eyes, made them tremble in fear and they left the room frightened..
...
At the next moment, Kesar sat on the floor near to her..all drained off..waiting for any sign of response from her...
...

When a suppressed mind comes in to play..it would never be less than an explosion

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part b coming soon😊

Edited by alanta - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#92
update at the top of this page
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Posted: 13 years ago
#93
res😃
Atlanta,It was beautiful. very,very emotional but loved it.the moment you wrote aag in factory I knew that Vasant's fate is sealed😭what a misfortune has fallen upon Gulaal.I hate these ceremonies where women are made to do such cruel things to another woman in distress.Jamna kaki😡loved Kesar in that scene.aur kya karta bechara😭and the way he asked his Vasant bha for his approval-so sweet😊Kesar took control of the situation and did what he thought was best for Gulaal.valare adhigam ishtapettu.great work👏 looking forward to the next part b
Edited by minizz - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#94
Phew, i read that super fast.
It was beautiful :), absloutely love the way you write. im like so awestruck :)
Hope Gulaal gives a good reaction rather than a bad one and is happy with what kesar did. :).
Lovely :). update soon.
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Posted: 13 years ago
#95
Alanta...ohhh such a heart breaking scene in the house...really feeling bad for gulaal..bas shaadi hua n she is already a widow...JK😡...goos that kesar had taken control on the situation n also loved how he took permission of vasant to do what he is doing...
looking forward to gulaal reaction on this act of kesar...
update soon...

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wow, Atlanta! I just love how you describe such emotional scenes. Feeling sad for Vassy, died for a gr8 cause- bt jaate jaate hum GK fans k liye bhalaa kar gaya! Looking forward to Gulaal's reaction
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Posted: 13 years ago
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oh ur ss is so captivating cant stop myself and thought to peep in...oh wow loved kesar protected her...and vasant deadth was so sad but anyways life has to move on now me curious how love blossomed between the two lovely update and waiting for next😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow, really nice update .really a high voltage update
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Res for two parts😳

EDIT

Alanta..pehle ye jhappi le.👏🤗.For the fantastic updates.👏.I am really in awe of your writing style specially last chapter was way beyond fantastic..IT WAS EXCELLENT..⭐️.and the interesting fact is Kesar being impulsive adding on to his own feelings about Gulaal..It will be interesting to see How thses two bond from here on...I loved the updates..Already waiting for the next one😍

Edited by manzilmukul - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Phew... kafi emotional chappi hai,but liked the way kesar stood for her.He became like a gaurdian angel &married her to protect her.Ab jaldi se update kar

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