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alanta

@alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#111

Originally posted by: MR21
Alanta...just wow...her accusations may hurt him but still she is in a way correct at that moment...Loved how u wrote this below part...
(in a controlled voice): lekin kyun..yeh tho tuje sirf waqth hi samja sakthe hein..chaahe tuje samachne ke liye barson kyun na lag jaaye...mein intzaar karunga..aur anth mein faisla bhi sirf teri hogi..sirf teri...(and was about to leave, when he stopped on the way)..haan..mein kal jaa raha hun...(not looking at her)..baki sab teri marzi..
too good...this made her to follow him...
good that she atlast confessed which made him soo happy...loved the sadra bit also...

Lovely ending to this SS...but I feel u have to continue writing abt GulSar...

Thank u remya...and am so glad that u liked it...yeah atlast it was needed for him...haha.the sandra bit was added for fun..glad that u liked it too..Thank u so much once again Remya..ur words always have inspired me..😊

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alanta

@alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#112

Originally posted by: Kesar04
😕😕WHAT WAS THIS CHAPTER ABOUT AGAIN 😕😕

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alanta

@alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#113

Originally posted by: manzilmukul
Wow alanta .👏.Beautiful SS.👏.I just lubb the KG bond here.😳.its intriguing and so romantic..Ok the flash back seems a mystery.😕.Jaldi se update karo na pls😳

Originally posted by: manzilmukul
Alanta..thank you so much for the chotu sa update.🤗..I must say I am in awe of your writing dear👏..the style is very soulful..and blissful...eagerly waiting for the next one😳

Originally posted by: manzilmukul
Res for two parts😳
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Alanta..pehle ye jhappi le.👏🤗.For the fantastic updates.👏.I am really in awe of your writing style specially last chapter was way beyond fantastic..IT WAS EXCELLENT..⭐️.and the interesting fact is Kesar being impulsive adding on to his own feelings about Gulaal..It will be interesting to see How thses two bond from here on...I loved the updates..Already waiting for the next one😍

Thank u so much dear for ur wonderful set of comments🤗..but sory for the late replies...I was waiting for the story to end..and hope I didnt disappoint you..if so please do tell me..I am eagerly waiting for your comments..ur comments have always worked as a source of inspiration..right from the DS series..please dont ignore to comment at the last one😳

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alanta

@alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#114

Originally posted by: JZephyr
reserved to comment on all 4 chapters thus far - off to read now =)

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Alanta - you've presented a very interesting version of the possible G-K-V trio. I remember having a long discussion about this among a bunch of us during the last phase of Gulaal, especially after the way the finale wrapped up, in debating Vasant's presence in that part - and how the debate stemmed over what if Vasant had never died. In a way, although from a different ground, you're presenting that kind of storyline, where the triangle is genuine, with 3 genuinely good people in complicated love relationships! Liking the sketching of story so far, and looking forward to how you take it from here. Not sure if it was me, or if you intended for us to get some hint of Kesar pulling of fake 'mean acts' on Gulaal post the GV marriage to get into her bad books and make sure he never reveals his vulnerable side?

Continue soon =)

xx

Originally posted by: JZephyr
Wow - the history unfolding fast in the last two chapters. I loved how you portrayed Gulaal's thoughts at the shore - the whole 'flames' being witness to her bliss, and then flames taking away her dreams in a moment - it was indicative, yet mysterious, until the fact came out - loved the way that came to fore. Also liked, of course, Gulaal's take on Kesar in the past, especially the days leading up to her marriage with Vasant - like I said before, this was always to be an interesting dynamics! Although Vasant is out of picture really fast, the GK bond in general will have its share to tackle.

Looking forward to the next update =)
xx
JZee

Jzee..thank u so much dear for commenting..and the discussions on the GKV trio..yeah i too remember..but the span of such a trio is too short for the same reason that u have mentioned.. all the three involved are too genuine..in such a situation, if anyone one would take any decision, then it would be Vasanth and he also may try to unite Gulsar..but Gulaal being Gulaal and Kesar being Kesar..there is no way for such a union...and the only way is for a tragic end..not only regarding Gulsar fans but story wise too...

Vasanth had to get out of the picture asap na..and esp when this is an SS..hope I didnt disappoint u..and waiting for ur comments for the final part..it means a lot😊

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alanta

@alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#115

Originally posted by: prachurya
Atleast u posted up- so I won't complain about the length. The story has a wonderful touch to it. I mean Kesar is ready to live his life with her memories though he didn't even knw a single thing abt her, what can I say more- I am just so glad that he is with his lady love now, eases me even more wen I go back to the past. Kesar's breakdown was beautifully written. Awaiting ur next update, Atlanta

Originally posted by: prachurya
oieee yaar, Vas-Gul ki shaadi ho gayi😭
Bechara Kesuda- apne mann ko maar k- he was distant to Gulaal- I feel so bad for him. if I am nt wrong then, he has planned to go away after their marriage. But then after marriage something bad happen- eagerly awaiting the next chappie to know what it was! For now- a well written chappie

Originally posted by: prachurya
Wow, Atlanta! I just love how you describe such emotional scenes. Feeling sad for Vassy, died for a gr8 cause- bt jaate jaate hum GK fans k liye bhalaa kar gaya! Looking forward to Gulaal's reaction

Thank u so much prachu..for ur inspiring comments so far..and I am so glad that u liked the SS..and thank u for constantly supporting me right from the DS...I am waiting for ur comments for the last part..hope I didnt disappoint u...

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alanta

@alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#116

Originally posted by: MR21
Alanta...me cant see him like this yaar...his pain seeing his love as his brothers life partner is very much...as he said he can never forget her and he can never let nay other girl take her place in his heart...looks like he would not talk to her n also he would behave bit rudely with her...
waiting for next one...update soon...

Originally posted by: MR21
Alanta...Loved it so much...
Good that u are showing both their perspectives of the past...
ohh she could feel his care n concern for her in his eyes but still confused for his rash n ride behavior towards her...loved how u put that she had a strange pull towards him...
Vasant n gulaal shaadi ho gayee...
Yeh kya how can u stop at that high point in the story...
update soon dear...ab ithna suspense kab thak handle karrenge...

Originally posted by: MR21
Alanta...ohhh such a heart breaking scene in the house...really feeling bad for gulaal..bas shaadi hua n she is already a widow...JK😡...goos that kesar had taken control on the situation n also loved how he took permission of vasant to do what he is doing...
looking forward to gulaal reaction on this act of kesar...
update soon...

Thank u so much remya for supporting me so far..ur comments have always inspired me..and I was always happy with your instant comments..hope u liked the SS as a whole.and thank u for the recent comments too...Thank u so much once again dear.

Edited by alanta - 13 years ago

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alanta

@alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#117

Originally posted by: vinolya
Hai Alanta...
Very nice and beautifully written... it was a good start 😃... loved it. Pls do continue and update it soon. I shall be waiting... 😳

Originally posted by: vinolya
Alanta, Wow... like it so much. Very eager to know what will happen in the next chapter... pls update it soon... 😊

Thank u so much dear for ur inspiring comments and glad that u liked it and updated the final part to..please do comment on it too..😊

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Piu Chatterjee

@Transference

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Posted: 13 years ago

#118

👏Alanta ..What a beautifully written story..It is beyond my words..How can I comment on such a beautiful piece of work...It was superb to read your updates and Its my special and humble request that you should pls come up with another SS very soon..I am desperately waiting..Loved this one..and the title..🤗.Now the broken bits of life have been created to form a new fantastic beginning...👏

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Incense

@Incense

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Posted: 13 years ago

#119

lovely piece of writing alanta i loved how u explain the whole scene it like everything is right infront of our eyes adn so they didnt confess and just excepted each other and now are soulmates lovely ss alanta though i would love to read a ff written by u😳😳😳