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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: snehasri

lovely chapi yaar i loved how she felt so comfert with kesar

door mat kar na kesar ko apne aap se😒

Thanks for liking dear😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
ahhh...two chapters up!
Glad that MB took up the responsibility to clear up da mess done by his son. Felt really bad for Poonam Baa and Gulaal. Bechari pe dukhon ka pahaad tutt gaya. Kesar comforting Gulaal was really well written and the best thing was Gulaal does like him but obviously the situation is such that she has to push him away. I love da concept! Awaiting the next chappies
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Posted: 13 years ago
Lovely chappi,par bahut choti se thi,Agli chappi thodi se badi ho aur jaldi se post kar
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: prachurya

ahhh...two chapters up!

Glad that MB took up the responsibility to clear up da mess done by his son. Felt really bad for Poonam Baa and Gulaal. Bechari pe dukhon ka pahaad tutt gaya. Kesar comforting Gulaal was really well written and the best thing was Gulaal does like him but obviously the situation is such that she has to push him away. I love da concept! Awaiting the next chappies

thanks for liking.😃
will update soon
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: sauris

Lovely chappi,par bahut choti se thi,Agli chappi thodi se badi ho aur jaldi se post kar

thank you, yes yaar thora sa tha but agli baar bara vala i promise😃
will update soon😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
chapter twelve
kesar awoke the next morning, remembering the past night's events. choro na he thought ,jab gulaal comfortable feel kare gi voh khud hi mujse baat karne lage gi. he looked over at his bedside clock the time read 12 o clock, shit, he thought main itni der tak soya. he got up, showered and then went down stairs.
'arrey talli. tu kab ayi'. 'abhi abhi maa aur bauji ke saath and she indicated to where her mother and father were sitting with paanba, motaba and poonam.
'giga kaka, jamuna kaki aap kaise hoh'.
'bas sab theek hai, vasant ka sun ke baara dukh hua beta, hum toh nayi bahu ke swagat mein aye the aur yeh kya hogaya'.
at the mention of gulaal kesar started to look around for her.
'baa baki sab kaha hai'.
'voh rewa, devika aur gulaal nashta tayaar kar rahi hai'.
kesar felt happy on hearing that gulaal was taking this house as her own, he made his way to the kitchen, with talli following closely behind.
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He looked at her from the doorway laughing, 'kitni sunder lagti hoh', he said out loud without realising.
'tune kuch kaha kesar'. talli said standing behind him.
gulaal noticed kesar standing outside the kitchen and started to feel uncomfortable. she quickly looked down.
'tujhe kuch chahiye kesar' rewa said looking up.
'haan mujhe voh mujhe paani chahiye' and he walked in.
talli followed behind. 'toh gulaal tumhari kitni age hai' she asked.
kesar gave her a dirty look and said ' hamesha personal saval poochna zaroori hai kya'.
'nahi nahi koi baat nahi, main 26 ki hoon'.
'26 wow, kafi umar hai tumhari, main kesar ki age ki hoon, 20 years ki'.
gulaal attempted a smile and looked down, kesar gave talli another dirty look for being so insenstive.
suddenly 'ouch' gulaal quickly moved her finger away from the cooker and kesar raced over to her and took her hand into his own.
'kaha lagi' he said concerned, blowing at her finger gently.
'kuch nahi ,main theek hoon' she said slightly moving her hand back, for talli was giving them a awkward look.
'chalo khana toh ban gaya' said rewa getting up.
kesar couldn't stop staring at gulaal's hand, she noticed this and felt sad.
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the whole family gathered to eat breakfast, poonam had a sort of faraway look on her face, gulaal went and put her hand upon her mother's shoulder, 'aap theek hoh'.
poonam attempted a smile and said 'haaan beta main theek hoon'
motaba looked up and said 'poonamji sab theek hai, aap please koi baath mein jijakiye mat.
'main theek hoon, yeh gulaal bhi na aise hi chinta karti rahti hai'
kesar looked at gulaal fondly, this is why he had fallen in love with her, because of the care and warmth she had for everyone, the way she used to speak to him earnstly abut her mother, father, friends and even animals.
talli who was sitting next to kesar, saw him looking at gulaal and felt jealous. 'chal na kesar tere room mein'
'nahi chup kar abhi toh room se bahir ayaan hoon'.
paanba intervened and said 'le ja na, bechari bore hoh rahi hogi'.
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'chaliye' said motaba, 'hum walk pe chal the hai, bacho ko thora sa vakt batein karne ke liye mil jayga, poonam ji, aap bhi chaliye'
'haan, ho ayi maa, aapka man behter mehsoos karega' said gulaal smiling at her mother.
'accha theek hai, jaa mere kamre se shawl le aa'.
as gulaal climbed up the stairs, she could hear laughter coming form what she thought was kesar's room, as she got nearer she peered inside and saw talli and kesar sitting on a sofa, looking at something on the laptop and laughing.
Gulaal suddenly felt very disturbed she quickly left.
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Posted: 13 years ago
sorry guys thora, chota chapter hai, but im not feeling well.
if i feel better i will write more tonight or maybe tommorow.
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Posted: 13 years ago
Take care dear, Nice chapter👏 yeh Talli kaunsi planet se aarahi hein use 26 bhi kaafi umar ki lag rahi hein..Oh after all she is Talli a real Talli😆.Good going👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
res 😃

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Gulaal is adjusting to this house😳 n doing all things...me liked it...ohh is a gone case here...arey sab ke saamne aisa koi kehtha hai kya..talli is sooo irritating as always😡...koi pehli baar milthe hi job education ke bhaare mein poochthe hai...she is such a dubloo😆...me loved how he took her hand in his with so much concern...talli feeling jeolous for gulaal🤢...gulaal feeling restless n disturbed seeimg talli n kesar together😳...lovely chappie hai yaar...
Take rest n get well soon dear...update soon if it is possible😳


Edited by MR21 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: rimjhim1

sorry guys thora, chota chapter hai, but im not feeling well.

if i feel better i will write more tonight or maybe tommorow.

Aarey ok- take rest! Chapter was really gud- Gulaal finally feeling disturbed seeing KT together. Talli is as dabloo as ever!

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