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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Gayatri9

Bahut Short?

Short was Ok but really you want to make it longer?
Actually this is just half as when I typed the first update it was till end of the song but here I stopped in just starting of journey...
So maybe hence you felt it.


Please update ur college ff also
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Gayatri9

many more actually means I mean what are you expecting yashi?



AkshAn scenes 😆

Update today 😃
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: KajalTiwari


Please update ur college ff also

Thanks actually I updated it last night as buffer ho raha tha so I thought post hogaya but when I saw in morning it was notposted and I deleted the update too so need to type it gain Sorry but I think site ka koi issue tha
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Raglak_akshan



AkshAn scenes 😆
Journey main toh zyaada nahi hai
But I will try to give maximum during rituals

Update today 😃
Let's see if possible

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Posted: 6 years ago
As my updates will be quite late from now onwards still I will try my best to update it regular so I will try to give maximum.So jyaada bak bak kiye binaa let's move to story faster.
Chapter 10

As in the bus dadi and Guddan took one seat,lakshmi and Vardaan on the other and Kishore and Durga on one seat Saru was ruling the whole seat.
and our beloved khadoos AJ uncle[guddu's pov] occupied a seat in cabin.
Everyone tried hard to convince him to join with them but itni aasani se maan jaaye who AJ kahaan.


After looking out from window taking fresh air on her face for about more than 2 hours Guddan got bored.
Guddan- Aren't you all bored,Let's do something naa. guddan pleaded while making a puppy face.
All who were busy in themselves got shocked at this.
Durga-abb yahaan kya kare,tum bore ho rahi ho toh it's your problem. Learn to solve your problems by your own.
Kishore trying to save Guddan from Durga's rage,actually I am too getting bored.
Kishore- Guddan do you have any idea?
Guddan- Yes I have an owesome plan smiling or the same way chahakte huee as she does in show.

Guddan- Let's play Antakshari together.
Vardaan-It's a brilliant idea.
Dadi- haa haa let's play.
the 3 DIL's as expected rejects this but after Kishore,Vardaan and Dadi's request agreed to play.
They all were quarelling songs.

At their noise AJ who was sitting in cabin got irritated.
AJ blabbering I knew pehle se that all of them are going to create chaos, hence I deliberately told Vardaan to arrange flight tickets for all.
But he brought bus for all.
After some time their voice raised more and now Aj could not tolerate it.

He came out of the cabin and shout.
Aj- Kya bhudgi hai yeh,tum log shanti se nahi reh sakte kyaa.
guddan making puppy face complained Dadi.
Guddan- Dekhiye na dadi,khud toh khadoos hai hi ab hum sab ko bhi khadoos bana rahe hain.I mean na toh khud enjoy kar rahe hain aur hume bhi rok rahe hai.

To this dadi pulled ears of Akshat
dadi-yahaan aakar baith,lalla.
AJ- No maa, aapko in ke saath bacha banna hai aap bano. I can't.
Dadi-Oye maine kahaan na,Come and sit.
AJ- No maa not interested.
Dadi- Theek hai toh main bhi tujhase baat nahi krungi phir tarasna apni maa ke liye.

To this Akshat sighed in defeat and mumbled.
AJ- Everytime she proves ki zidd karne main yeh meri bhi Maa hai,apni baat manwaa kar hi maanti hai.

Akshat came and sat beside Dadi on the seat next to Guddan and Dadi.
After some songs Ma came on Guddan.
After thinking for few minutes she couldn't find a song.

Saru and Vardaan started timer.
tick tick one
guddan- Nahi nahi let me think
tick tick two
As the timer was about to end Guddan started singing

Meree duniya Hai Tujhame Kahee
Tere bin mai kya Kuchh bhee Nahee
mere Jaan me teree jaan hai O Sathee mere
Meree duniya hai Tujhame kahee
Tere bin mai kya Kuchh bhee Nahee
mere Jaan me teree Jaan hai O sathee mere
Meree duniya Hai tujhame kahee
tere bin Mai kya Kuchh bhi nahee..

Saying this she stopped
Saru- not fair aage ka mukhda kaun gayega?
Guddan biting her nail gaa toh diya.
Saru-Saasu maa 2 lines repeat karne se gaana nahi banta.
Lakshmi-Aur nahi toh kya,sahi keh rahi hai Saru.
vardaan- Either sing the full song or accept your defeat.

Guddan again started singing.
Meree duniya Hai Tujhame Kahee
Tere bin mai kya Kuchh bhee Nahee
mere Jaan me teree jaan hai O Sathee mere
Meree duniya hai Tujhame kahee
Tere bin mai kya Kuchh bhee Nahee
mere Jaan me teree Jaan hai O sathee mere
Meree duniya Hai tujhame kahee
tere bin Mai kya Kuchh bhi nahee..
Ummm

To her shock someone started to sing the song and the voice was too melodious.
Guddan got pleasantly surprised hearing Aj's melodious voice and that too watching hr khadoos uncle who hates Bollywood singing Bollywood song.

Palako Me tere rup ka Sapna saja diya
Pahalee najar Me hee tujhe Apna bna liya
hai yahee Aaraju har ghadee baithhee raho Mere Saamane

mere Duniya Hai TUjhame Kahee
tere bin mai kya Kuchh bhee nahee
Aisa laga mere Sanam ham jo yaha MIle
Sehara me jaise Shabnamee Chaahat ke Gul Khile

Yeh jamin Aasmaan kah rahe,ham toh kabhee naa honge juda
Mere Duniya hai Tujhame kahee
tere Bin Mai kya Kuchh bhee nahee
Meree jaan Me teree Jaan hai O sathee Mere
Meree Duniya hai tujhame kahee
mere duniya hai tujhame kahee
Tere bin mai kya Kuchh bhee nahee...


I think it's Ok for today.
free feel to bash me but atleast kuch toh bolo.Kam se kam yahin boldo ki main zyaada bore kar rahi hoon and you all can't tolerate,but bolo as I can see decrease in likes and comments and this story I didn't had any plan as I was going to write for a single shot.Zyaada bhatak gayi ho toh we can stop..
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Posted: 6 years ago
Nice update
Aj singing a bollywood song is treat to watch but update thora short tha...
Continue soon..
One night in uncle's house os ka ek part aur update kr do na plz...
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Posted: 6 years ago
Nice chapter
Aj singing for guddan haye

Update soon
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Posted: 6 years ago
Beautiful update dear
Loved it
AJ was behaving like those typical headmaster type
But iam quite surprised he just sing for his wife 😆
do continue soon and want next update today aur lamba
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Posted: 6 years ago
Superb update
Love it
Cont soon
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: KajalTiwari

Nice update

Aj singing a bollywood song is treat to watch but update thora short tha...
Continue soon..
One night in uncle's house os ka ek part aur update kr do na plz...

Thanks😊
Really?
baat kya hai mere updates padhne ache lag rahe hai or actually short tha?
Aww dear I would have really wrote but the fact is I wrote sorry stoled that Os as an apology to Secretfollower and still she hasn'tcommented on it.Despite I have requested.
So for that particular story she will take decision as it was specially for her.
We will write an another story for you as time permits if you want bekaar min bore nahi karungi...

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