Short Story ~Hazaaron Khwahishein Aisi [Plz see Pg 1] - Page 8

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Nice updates and the story is picking up pace and moving forward .. But 2 things that i felt horrible about - the name of the prospective groom being Gurmeet, he cant be a hooligan for Christ's sake 😭
& 2, Geet addressing Maan as Bhaiya .. Omg 😭 😭 that could have been avoided 😭
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: ms.nautanki

Nice updates and the story is picking up pace and moving forward .. But 2 things that i felt horrible about - the name of the prospective groom being Gurmeet, he cant be a hooligan for Christ's sake 😭
& 2, Geet addressing Maan as Bhaiya .. Omg 😭 😭 that could have been avoided 😭



Hey ms. nautanki
Plz dont feel bad. Using Gurmeet name was just for fun.I really had no intentions of hurting your feelings.
If you dont like it then djust dont picturise him as our Gurmeet but some one else. As for Bhaiyaa that is the need of of the story and is unavoidable. We live in a society where we generally tend to call people Bhaiyas and didis if they are elder to us.
And once again thankyou for being honest. I hope i have not hurt your feelings.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Updte most probably coming up tonight.
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To be updted in the next pg
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Chapter 5. A Brief Encounter
She hadn't realized she remembered him until today.
A mere mention of his name and it had brought back a memory that had been buried in the deep recesses of her mind.
A familiar stranger.
He was more or less a familiar stranger.
It had been a very brief encounter between them.
But she still remembered it as clearly as if it was yesterday she had met him and not seven years ago.
And this fact was bothersome.
Seven yrs ago on the wedding day of her Naintara di, the baraati had arrived late. After the initial welcome the most awaited , Jaimala(garland exchange) ceremony had taken place.
Despite being the youngest sister of the bride she had been pushed aside by her elder cousins and di's friends. Standing behind the tall girls she had peered at the bridegroom and his friends who had accompanied him on the stage.
It was then she had noticed him.
In white full sleeved button down shirt teamed up with blue denims, he had looked different from others who were properly dressed in coats and trousers.
And it wasn't just his looks , there was something different about his whole attitude and personality.
Unlike his friends he wasnt teasing or sparring with the girls on the stage.
He stood straight with a neutral face and hands folded across his chest.
At that moment he had appeared proud and unapproachable. And her juvenile mind had wondered if his lips ever curled into a smile.
When his eyes had found hers she had looked away from his face to see Dev jiju being raised high in air by his friends making Naintara di rise on her toes to put garland around his neck.
She had laughed at their antics, he did not not , he wavering gaze had told her.
He did not laugh. He did not tease.
Such a boring person he was.

The marraige muhurat was of around 1:15 am in the morning so after the garland exchange the baraati had been escorted to the hall where dinner arrangements were made.
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She walked in the hall to find the baraatis having their dinner. Her eyes found her father who was busy conversing with Dev Jiju's father. She could see the group of men who had earlier been teasing the girls on stage eating and talking and laughing simultaneously as they stood in a corner.And then she spotted the object of her interest.
The Ice cream stall.
She walked confidently to the stall and ordered 2 strawberry icecreams.
The man behind the icecream stall wasn't much pleased to see her.
Ofcourse he wouldn't be.
Because since the stall had been set up she had gobbled down almost ten ice creams. She saw as the ice cream uncle pushed the cups towards her. She took them and walked fast. As soon as she was out of the hall she ran towards the bride's room.
These ice creams were for her mother and chachiji who had been working tirelessly since yesterday. They didn't even have their food. And it was only now that they were relaxing before the marraige started.
She was about to enter the room when one of the aunty's spotted her.
'Arrey Geet tujhe kaise pata chala mera ice cream khane ka jee kar rha hai laa puttar de de mujhe. Dono de de . Bablu bhi tabse jid kar rha tha. Lekin abhi baraati wale honge na. Isliye hall nhi gyi.'
Before she could tell her anything the aunty took both the cups and went on her way.

After a while she was standing again in front of the same ice cream stall for the other one seemed to be surrounded with people. And that same man was standing behind the stall glaring at her.
' 4 cups . Strawberry flavour.', she ordered ignoring his glare.
'Nhi hai. Khatam ho gya.'
She didnt have to use her brains to tell that he was lying.
'jhuth mat boliye aur jara jaldi de.'
' Kam se kam 20 baar aa chuki ho ice cream ke liye. Aur kitni baar logi. Abhi baraati kha rhe hai. Shortage ho gyi toh. Bade Saheb ne kaha hai abhi baraatiyon par dhyan dene ke liye.'
continued below.
Edited by Commelina - 10 years ago
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She felt humiliated. Being the youngest in her family she had never been reprimanded. With misted eyes she told him,'this is my party. Your Bade saheb is my father. And i am not taking these for myself. Samjh gye . Toh jaldi de.'
The man seemed to be really obstinate for he denied her even after listening to the fact that this party was organized by her father.
'Nhi dunga. Baad me aana.'
That man made her feel petty almost beggar like. She was about to turn when someone behind her ordered , '4 cups. Strawberry.'
On turning around she had found the same person who had captured her attention during garland exchange ceremony. As she looked at him from such close distance she realized he was a young almost 4 to 5 years older than her. She was about to leave when something in his eyes told her not to. Standing aside she saw as the ice cream man scooped large spoons of ice cream into the cups. And with a smile plasterd on his lips pushed the cups in front of her. She watched in wonder as the boy who looked not more than eighteen picked up the cups and handed them to her.
And then turned to the ice cream man , 'Apne suna nhi ye party iski hai. Aur ye apne liye thodi le ja rhi hai. Aur vaise bhi ice cream bacchon ke liye hi toh hote hai.'
Giving a dirty look to that ice cream uncle,she had turned to him. 'Thankyou.' , she had whispered.
'Mention not Ms.Chubby Cheeks.'

And then something struck her.
Ice cream bacchon ke liye hi toh hote hai.
He thought she was a child.
Ms.Chubby cheeks.
He also thought she was fat.
She had immediately looked at his brown orbs with her own fire filled hazels.
"I have a name. ' she spoke.
She had also wanted to tell that she wasnt a child and also that she did not have chubby cheeks. But that would be too big a conversation with a stranger.
'Do you ? Then Can I have the honour of knowing your name Ms. Chubby Cheeks?'
'Geet. And I. do. not. have chubby. cheeks.'
And then she had ran away from there with his icecream cups.
If she would have waited she would have known that those lips did curl . And they curled into one of the most beautiful smiles.

In the morning after the marraige when the families had assembled together had she seen him again. It was that day she had come to know his identity.
Her chachiji had introduced her to him, ' Geet. Meet him . He is Maan , younger cousin of your Dev Jiju.'
'Brother . He is my younger brother Chachiji.', Dev jiju had declared with warmth emanating from his eyes.
After contemplating for 15 secs on what she should call him she had looked at him with a smile and said slowly ,' Hello... Maan.'
'Maan nhi Geet . Maan Bhaiya bol kudiye. Tujhse umar mein bada hai .', her chachiji had interjected.
And she had again looked at him without a smile and wished him again, 'Hello Maan... Bhaiya!' , her voice lacking her usual spirit.
He had replied back with a simple Hello.
An amused glint danced in his eyes as he kept watching her.
And if she wasnt wrong she heard him add Ms.Chubby cheeks in a whisper like tone.
It was spoken for only her to hear.
She had been so wrong in her judgement.
Maan or rather Maan Bhaiya as she was supposed to call him very well knew how to tease a person.
Edited by Commelina - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Chap 5 updated.
Thanku for likes and comments. It is your love that keeps me going.
I am unable to send pms this time.
Asli duniya keeps me busy.

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Posted: 10 years ago
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I forgot to tell u people we will get to meet present Maan in the next update. Shower me with ur love and i ll updte sooner.
Till then apna khayal rakhna.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Oh so they had met at NT and Devs wedding. It was an interesting and amusing encounter. Geet didn't want to call him bhaiya and it seemed that Maan wasn't wanting to make her a sister either😉
Waiting to read more.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hay Babaji ye kya bol rahi hai writer sahiba
The entry of hero in the next part!😲

Kya maan hero nahi hai😡

Lekin intro me tho a boring geet was married to a robotic maan nahi??😕

Jitna acha update utna hi confusing note🤔

Finally sara wedding wala jhemela done!"phew"

Nice first meeting

Waiting for the next!

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