SHORT STORY - Page 10

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Originally posted by: BrainEaterOwl

You know, I so wanted to read Maan's thoughts. His monologue was very needed for me to know what exactly he thinks about himself. About their past, present and future. Or how deseparate he is to get her back in his life. I want to know his thoughts to conclude something cos I was clueless and was just assuming things. So really, thank you for this much needed update. I was going to request for it. When I first started reading, five years ago, my instinct was to side the girl. I mean really, I didn't like blaming the girl for anything. Probably because being a girl myself I empathized with the female characters more. Over the years, once I started writing, I understood men may not be as bad as they seem. They express less, and when they do, they're pretty bad at it. Understanding them, is a pain in the neck. These days, my instinct is to side the guy. I have no clue how that happened. I don't like books which are female oriented. I prefer knowing what the men think. But writing that is another matter all together.😆 Pura bheja lagana parta hai😆 But then I don't like it if my characters aren't just a little enigmatic. If a reader likes them from the start, understands them from the get go, it takes the fun out of reading for me. 😳

For me, its also the best update so far of Second Spring. The way you have written it is simply beautiful. It gave so much about Maan, his life, his ambition, his love and feelings for Geet. It made me understand him a lot better. Thanks a lot. I have never been confident about expressing what my male characters feel. Always a risk of it becoming absolutely unreal. I had a hard time understanding Maan too.

You even made me warm upto him a bit, since you might have known by my previous comments that his sudden wish for a second chance was not settling down well with me. But now, after knowing what he thinks about himself and understand, realizes everything that I wanted to him acknowlegde has made me respect him now. Whole after 8 updates, I for the first time liked Maan.

I enjoyed reading each and every sentence of this update simply cos of your beautiful writing style. In fact, your style of penning down Maan's thoughts is so marvellous that I couldnt help but feel Maan's emotions as I was so cold towards him. Thank you😳 Means a lot.

Him not hoping at first, but later letting the hope in after coming to know about her fake engagement, and lastly his fears after again seeing her with Ronan just says how deep his feelings run for her. Though its also surprises me to no extent knowing that he had this overwhelming feeling to go back to her yet he fought hard for the initial days after them parting ways.

He was almost getting negative in his thoughts thinking it to be fate's way of punishing him, but he striked back hard and decided to fight for her head on. That, strong mind and his decision of doing anything by hook or by crook and have her, is what I admire about his character. He is a fighter there no doubt in that. I had seen that when he had so much wanted to hold her on the last day yet he fought with his own feelings and ran. So if he can fight his feelings for his ambition, he can definitely fight for his love, double hard.

He was selfish back then, he is selfish now. But I hope he wins her back gentleman style sincerely with all his heart and not hurting her feelings. He's older now. Wiser😛

The story behind her love for those books and her wish to have them with her forever was crazy. She was a crazy teenager, head over heels in love, who believed those books to be the lucky charm for her. But what surprised me was that Maan had stolen them for her. He was equally crazy. Lol.Teenagers do crazy things😆

Though he couldnt bring himself to give them to her in his own emotional turmoil and conflict, he did took them with him and also brought himself to read them.

I found it really cute that he was so jealous over a bookish character just cos Geet loved the guy so much. And he was accepting it now to her, that too in a letter.

Guess, he still dint had enough strength to come to her and say all that he said in the letter. Maybe sometimes expressing things verbally is really tough and writing it down is the easy way to convey our message. Easier to write than speak. Confronting her would be putting too much of his heart on the line. Uncertainty will stop him. That's something he has to fight and understand that putting his heart on line is what he has to do. Being vulnerable to her . . . is the course he has to take eventually.

I, for some reasons, loveddd the letter. It was wowww. Again, thanks to your beautiful way of writing it down. That gesture of his of gifting her books with the letter was touching.

The update was fantastic. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Thank you😃😳

-Sanjana!