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Posted: 11 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: spvd

part 1
awesome start...
whoa this is the first time u are writing like this...
but interesting start...
poor Geet...
how could Maan do this to her?
Geet and Rajji are alone and have only each other...
hope they escape safely...
cont soon dear...

I am grinning as I read your review! Why I am grinning? You will know when I post the next chappy!
Yes! This is the first time I wrote such a dhamakedaar chapter! I myself cannot believe my writing technique has improved so much!😃 I will update tonight!😉
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Posted: 11 years ago
#62

PART II. GEET ESCAPES!

It was early in the morning when the window in the back of the house opened. As the darkness had yet to go away, no one noticed the window open. A bag was thrown out of the window first and following it was a girl dressed in simple salwar kameez with a jhola on her shoulder crossing against her body. She jumped down and picked up her bag. She turned around and made sure that the coast was clear. Next she signaled to someone in the room and soon another girl, a bit younger than the first one, clad in similar outfit to elder girl, jumped out and both the girls ran from there holding hands. The girls were none other than the Handa girls with Geet being the first one who jumped out and Rajji being the other one. The bag which hung on Geet's shoulders looked more like a college kid's bag and was filled with very few clothes and their certificates of passing and extracurricular activities while her jhola contained some money and other things. Geet's plan to escape was quite simple. Reach her childhood friend Pinky's house in Dilli, get a job while enrolling her little sister in a good college.

Geet and Rajji ran through the lanes of their village all the while trying to make minimal noise. Today was Geet's wedding day and she planned to reach the outskirts of her village by the time the groom side noticed her absence. They reached the acres of farms surrounding the village and started crossing them. This was a longer route to the bus stop but using the shorter route meant going through the main village square and Geet was not willing to take the risk of getting exposed.

After running for almost an hour, they reached the bus stop. Both smiled at each other in relief. They had made it! Both hugged each other and walked towards the ticket counter. Suddenly, someone placed a hand on Geet's shoulder. Geet's breath hitched and she turned around in dread. When she noticed who was behind her, her face became pale while Rajji's face showed horror. There were few goons standing in front of them with the man in lead leering at her. "Kahaan chali Bhabhiji?", the man sneered and Geet gulped. She gripped Rajji's hand tightly with one hand while her other hand sneaked into her bag unnoticed by the man. The man spoke again, "Arre! Bhabhiji! Aise kaise aap jaa sakti hain? Aaj toh aapki shaadi hai! Chaliye! Chaliye! Ghar chaliye! Saahab aapka intezaar kar rahe hain!" Geet's hand reached the pouch kept safely in the bag which contained mirchi powder. She grabbed a fistful of the powder in her hands. The man tried to grab Geet's arms when Geet whispered, "Bhaag!" and threw the mirchi powder that was in her hand into the goons' eyes. As the goons screamed in pain, Geet ran away dragging Rajji with her.

Geet and Rajji ran around looking for a hiding place but the goons soon caught up with them. Geet begged whoever she saw on road to help her but no one listened. Finally they were cornered in an area where except Geet and Rajji there was only one tea stall open with the chai waala preparing tea and a man sitting on a nearby bench sipping the tea. They were surrounded by nothing but empty and dilapidated buildings with a jeep parked near one of them. Geet had the thought of going and hiding into the one of the buildings but they would be more cornered than they were now. She looked around in worry while hugging a crying Rajji tightly. The goons had yet to find them but she was sure that they would be here in few minutes. She looked at the stall owner and ran towards him, "Satsriyakal! Kaake! Thodi humaari madat kardo! Kuch gunde humaare peeche pade hain!" She pleaded and pleaded but the man refused, "Behenji! Mennu is sab mein padna nahi hain! Tussi jaaao!" Geet felt her eyes tearing up as she looked around helplessly. She again pleaded with the man, "Please Bhai saab! Apni behen samajhke madat kardo!" But the man still refused. Geet looked around searching for help. Suddenly, her eyes fell on the man drinking tea while seated on the bench. He was dressed in black vest and jeans with his shirt hanging on his shoulder. He had a looks of a body builder with toned arms and bulging biceps. She ran towards him and fell on her knees. She joined her hands and pleaded to him, "Tussi toh humaari madat kardo! Humein bachaa do! Woh log meri behen nu maar daalenge!" Rajji stood nearby still crying. "Please! Sirji! Humein bacha lo!", Geet again pleaded. The man who was still sipping the tea paused long enough to reply, "Aurat ho! Aur auratein toh Maa Kaali ka bhi roop hoti haina! Toh jaao aur lado khud!" He got up, paid for the tea and walked off towards the jeep parked nearby. Geet looked around helplessly as tears trailed through her cheeks. Ab kya karoon Babaji? Kaise apni aur Rajji ki jaan bachaaun? Kuch toh madat karo! But then she glanced at her weeping sister and wiped her tears. Mere poore ghar waalon ko maara hai tumne! Ab main tumhein Rajji ko maarne nahi doongi! Mar jaaungi lekin Rajji ko bachaakar dum loongi! She looked up. Babaji! Shakti do! She looked around searching for anything to help her and her eyes fell on an iron rod fallen on the floor nearby. Suddenly, she heard a roar of laughter and she looked up to see the goons coming towards them. She picked up the rod and signaled Rajji to stay near the tea stall. She walked towards the middle of the road and glared at the goons. Sahi kahaa us insaan ne! Hum auratein toh Maa Kaali ka roop bhi hoti hain! Mujhe aaj apne aur Rajji ke liye ladna hoga! Aajaao! Kamino! Aaj yeh Geet Handa dikhaayegi tumhein Maa Kaali ka roop! As soon as one of the goons neared her, she hefted the iron rod and hit him right on the head. He fell down in a moment. Geet glared at the rest of them running towards her. Aajaao! Kamino! Aajaao!

The man after drinking his tea went to start his jeep. These days' girls! So weak! He shook his head and tried to start the engine. But the engine refused to budge. He rolled his eyes. Lagta hai aaj mujhe deri hokar rahegi! Suddenly, he heard men run around and he turned to see atleast 15 men run towards the girls. He wondered what the girls had done to warrant such reaction from the goons. He leaned back and waited. Even though he told the girls to help themselves up he was not one of those who would leave someone helpless. So he would wait and watch! Soon, he would have to get into the fray to save these weak and helpless girls. Suddenly, the girl who had begged him for help picked up an iron rod nearby and suddenly a goon was down with her hit. The man raised his eyebrows impressed by the girl. As he watched the girl hit the rest of the men with the rod, he was getting more and more impressed. Very few girls had the bravery to go against such odds and not sit and cry. He was about to clap for one of the hits the girl delivered when he saw a goon approaching the girl from behind with another rod in his hand. The man frowned. One thing he hated was foul play! And hitting a person from the back was a big no-no in his books! So he got down from the jeep and jumped into the fray.

"DIDIII!", Geet heard Rajji scream and turned around only to see a rod coming towards her. Unable to react faster, she closed her eyes and waited for it to hit. But no blow came. She opened her eyes to see the man, who few minutes before sat drinking tea from the stall, holding the rod in his hand trying to stop it from reaching her. He pushed the rod away and due to the force the goon with the rod stumbled away. Geet did not even have the time to thank him as another man came to hit her. Soon the fight began in earnest with the man hitting each of the goons with his bare hands and well aimed kicks and Geet hitting any goon coming near them with the rod. Soon, most of the goons were down on the ground while their leader ran away but not before promising to bring back more people with him for the girls. The man in the vest started dusting away his clothes. After removing dust from his vest and trouser he turned around to address the girls only to see an empty space. Yeh kithe gayi? Lagta hai bhaag gayi!! He looked around but the other girl was also missing. He frowned. Suddenly, his eyes fell on the floor where there was a neatly folded paper on the floor. He picked it up and opened it. There were only two words written on it, "Thank you!" He smiled tenderly and absentmindedly wondered who the girl was and why she was in so much trouble.

Soon, the man got into his jeep and drove away to the market in the outskirts of the village. He parked nearby and went shopping for some eatables. It took him an hour to complete his purchases and he came back and got back into his jeep. Then, he started the jeep and drove away not knowing that the girls he met an hour ago were hiding in the back of his jeep.

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Edited by Kalpana_Writer - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#63
jeo geet jeo...sahi kia unlogon k saath...abb dekhte hai kya hota hai...

superb n beautiful update...

loved it very much...

thank u very much fr d lovely update n fr d pm also...

eagerly waiting fr d nxt prt...

continue soon plz...

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Posted: 11 years ago
#64
datz amazing
loved it
thanx fr d pm
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Posted: 11 years ago
#65
awsome concept
love both prts
tht khurana guy ,he murderd geet full family
geet run away from her house
and fight with goon
and tht will be maan who meet geet at tea stall
waiting fr nxt c
cont soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
#66

Originally posted by: KReyAS

awsome concept

love both prts
tht khurana guy ,he murderd geet full family
geet run away from her house
and fight with goon
and tht will be maan who meet geet at tea stall
waiting fr nxt c
cont soon

You totally guessed it right! Happy that you liked the concept!
Thanks for the review!
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Posted: 11 years ago
#67
now tat was nice. i loved geet.
just wish they cud get away.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#68

Originally posted by: mannu_minnie

now tat was nice. i loved geet.

just wish they cud get away.

They will get away! Next chapter will be a surprise for you!😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
#69
Hey Kalpana😳,
Oh, how I loved it🤗. I love a strong Geet and she is right to do her best👏. The fact that she is in Maan's jeep also shows her witt.
I think the Khuranas in Hoshiarpur are not related to Maan😡. Even in the show Geet figured out that Khurana is a very common surname. But maybe Geet will misunderstand at a point...at least I think there is a reason you picked a family with the same surename. But then maybe Maan is a member of that family??? I hope not. Maan from a family who killed Geet's family? I really think that is not possible🤢.
I am also glad that this time Geet escaped with Rajji👏. I always thought that apart from once Geet never got to know what happened to her sister. I love to use Rajji in my stories, her's is a great character to use and experiment with. I will be waiting to see her role in the SS😲.
Love
Mina
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Posted: 11 years ago
#70


CONGO FOR THE NEW FF



am so sorry that i didnt comment before... now too , yet have to read the updates... just give me couple of days...
i will be there...

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