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Doracake

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Posted: 11 years ago

#141

No more Mr. Nice Guy 😲 Waiting for next

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Deepa

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Posted: 11 years ago

#142

Originally posted by: dqno1

Wonderful! Friends and family and more than that hubby was off for the weekend😳 Diwali was great.

u are married? oh wow...i think i forgot about this...

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Teju

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Posted: 11 years ago

#143

I was enjoying Geet N Sasha convo.. 😆Shayad purana Maan hota toh catfight N'joy karata... Huun.. Maan U dumb.. atleast try to understand what relation Geet share with those boys with whom who see her... Now Dev will bring them together..Nice part..

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ritzy09

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Posted: 11 years ago

#144

loved the update Avi...Maan ka gussa...haye tauba...it reminded me of a song -

kaisa tera pyar kaisa gussa hai tera...from Love story...

i loved the update in totality but don't mind because first time i am also going to give you some feedback. Again I loved the update and this is just my POV...so please do not mind at all as this is feedback on what happened in the story and not on the writing itself...

I felt NT went a little overboard by making Geet dress like that especially when the innocent girl does not know hickey from mosquito bite...personally maybe I would have loved to see her in a churidaar with her jhumkaas making maan's heart go in overdrive...

Secondly, Maan thinks Geet is decieving all😕...ok i think i was fine till he thought she did not respond to his love or waited for him...but his thoughts that he could not recognise her earlier...maybe I am too much in love with this Geet that I am getting hurt just thinking about the hurt he is going to give her...sniff sniff...

But I loved few things a lot...

first was Sasha's skirt and the convo Geet and her had...it was awesome and even better when Daadim asks Sasha to take notes

second was evolution of shy Geet to confident business woman...haye i missed this so much in original series that muaah...for giving ti here

last was Maan's line where he thinks good guys come last and now MSK in action...I love MSK in action especially when Geet in all her innocence thrawts all his palns...😆...just dont want the most gentlest of the souls in this FF to get hurt...😳

last bit and offcourse i am sure you will get lot of comments on was the fall...haye dreamy...and then her taking kajal and putting it behind his ears...kahin nazar na lag jaye...she is so much damn in love with him and the fool MSK is not relaising what Maan is trying to tell him...I will love to read when his brain will give him another mental rant...budhu...khadus...tod diya na dil bachi ka...

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893213

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Posted: 11 years ago

#145

Originally posted by: ritzy09
loved the update Avi...Maan ka gussa...haye tauba...it reminded me of a song -

kaisa tera pyar kaisa gussa hai tera...from Love story...

i loved the update in totality but don't mind because first time i am also going to give you some feedback. Again I loved the update and this is just my POV...so please do not mind at all as this is feedback on what happened in the story and not on the writing itself...

I felt NT went a little overboard by making Geet dress like that especially when the innocent girl does not know hickey from mosquito bite...personally maybe I would have loved to see her in a churidaar with her jhumkaas making maan's heart go in overdrive...

Secondly, Maan thinks Geet is decieving all😕...ok i think i was fine till he thought she did not respond to his love or waited for him...but his thoughts that he could not recognise her earlier...maybe I am too much in love with this Geet that I am getting hurt just thinking about the hurt he is going to give her...sniff sniff...

But I loved few things a lot...

first was Sasha's skirt and the convo Geet and her had...it was awesome and even better when Daadim asks Sasha to take notes

second was evolution of shy Geet to confident business woman...haye i missed this so much in original series that muaah...for giving ti here

last was Maan's line where he thinks good guys come last and now MSK in action...I love MSK in action especially when Geet in all her innocence thrawts all his palns...😆...just dont want the most gentlest of the souls in this FF to get hurt...😳

last bit and offcourse i am sure you will get lot of comments on was the fall...haye dreamy...and then her taking kajal and putting it behind his ears...kahin nazar na lag jaye...she is so much damn in love with him and the fool MSK is not relaising what Maan is trying to tell him...I will love to read when his brain will give him another mental rant...budhu...khadus...tod diya na dil bachi ka...

Putting Geet in a dress was for another reason also😃 I was not quite done with this update.. more to come.

Maan has been hurt badly. He left thinking she does not want him. He came back and thinks she wants someone else. She is nowhere near the mishti he has thought of her. It is intimidating to see her move on and be happy in her life for him.

He has also seen Dev broken up before in London, so he is being over protective. Once he observes her more his opinion will change regarding the true relations she has. It is a necessary step to make him a dusht danav to show his growth too.

Sadness is not a part of this FF too much, so I will not dwell on it. Besides that there are too few chapters left to focus on it.

Thanks for the support Ritzy🤗

Edited by dqno1 - 11 years ago

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Ann

@annbell

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Posted: 11 years ago

#146

very nice update ...

sasha is dreaming a future with MK ... 😆..

geet is on full dreamy mode ..

i loved geet n sasha's conversation ..

but da thoughts dat going on in maan's mind .. i'm afraid to think he going to hurt her .. in someway or the other ..

i don't want him to fall in guilt after knowing the truth ..

altogether his thoughts are useless ..

he even thought dat geet is plotting games wid his family n himself ..

yeah i agree he is hurt .. deeply .. but he knows her from college ...

he can't even control himself whenever he thinks about her or she is around him ..

hmm ..

nd manishaa has entered into da picture .. 😆..

he is going to bug maan .. 😆

Edited by annbell - 11 years ago

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kavya.sravya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#147

wonderful part !! geet's dress is cute...but for our ever doubting maan, it symbolised her change over !! just you wait MSK ...just you wait !! once she starts her own innocent talks...you will fall in line..rather out of line !! loved dadi for making sasha...take notes !! geet's idea to get her mann chaha husband was too good !! sasha ka bhala karo...😆 dresses ke mamle mei !! and the song selection is fabulous !! just love it !!

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893213

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Posted: 11 years ago

#148

Originally posted by: custodian75
Beautiful update.
Geet and samaj seva. Helping people with phata kapda, lol. Very funny.😆

Manish____a. Was fun. Seva at midnight, god. Maan royally screwed.😆

The current track is fine, please tell your story and please no trimming.

Thanks for the pm.

Glad you liked it😃

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893213

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Posted: 11 years ago

#149

Originally posted by: jasraj123
love the update sooo much
omggg love the way geet told sasha that her dress is torn😆
I really hope maan ne yeh suna ho then he will knw that us ki geet abhi bhi nahin badli

like the way tara made wear dress and then the pin😳
heyyy yeh pin to bana hi maan se attkne ke liye naa😆😆😆 and pin did it's work
poor maan trying his best to control himself but kya karien phir bhi geet ke charm se nahin bach paa raha😉
ufff he is thinking that she has her jadu on everybody in his house😆😆😆
ab kaise bachega poor maan😳 geet ke jadu se

but me little bit scared the way he said she has to face now msk😕😕

omg omggg manishaaa is here 😆 and him saying he can come even in midnight😳 totally lattoo wala dialogue

or how can i forget the way geet put kaala teeka on him😉😉 and he did not noticed her concern😉😉

kitna confusion ki wajah se suffer kar raha hain maan

pls update next part soon
or haan pls continue with the pace as u want it sooo that we can enjoy the story in full way how do u want to write it

Thank you so much.

Pehle toh Maan sab notice karta tha but now uski aankho pe gusse ka parda hai.. buddhu kahi ka😆

Don't worry Avi chun chun ke badla legi😆

Thanks for enjoying it. Mujhe accha laga..

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893213

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Posted: 11 years ago

#150

Originally posted by: mammam
I CANT TELL U HOW MUCH I LOVED THE UPDATE. THE BEST PART IS OBVIOUSLY THE KALA TIKA PART AS I MENTIONED EARLIER.ISS UPDATE KI BAAD MUJHE BHI APNI VOCABULARY THODI UPGRADE KARNI PADEGI.DOLT KE MEANING JAAN NE KELIYE GOOGLE KARNA PADA.AUR MAAN KE LIYE MAIN KIYA BOLUN? GEET KO SATANE CHALE HAIN BUT KHUDKO NEHI PATA KI MANISHA USKI WATT LAGA DEGI. WAITING FOR KHAROOOS MSK.

Sowie.. Dolt is commonly used here in the US so I assumed most people would know except my jhalli😆

Thanks😃