my teacher (II) c index for (III) - Page 8

Originally posted by: baisakh45

her pain was numbing ..not only to her ..but to the entire darkness around her .she sat lost in the lap of mother nature singing lullaby to the sinister .. she listened and enveloped geet as she pacified her only friend left , the night ..

trust me at this point only one thought came to my mind that how can reet write so beautifully???

Because I don't have anyone else.. .

It was the softest of a murmur ..

But it stabbed him . right on the chest .

god this line not only stabbed arjun but also each & every reader who read this update.geet is ,i actually don't know how to describe this character.she is one of a kind.she is defeated by life,by every single thing but still she does not need pity.in the worst form of hers she is standing up with her pride.she has so many flaws but still she is flawless to me.

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about arjun god this guy will he ever say anything?he is actually a riddle.i just hope he will now understand that his geet has no one else than him & he needs to treasure his woman.

Originally posted by: yappingduck

that was one heartwrenching update...wouldnt even wish such cruel things happening to my enemies...my hert breaks everytime i see her going through so much of pain, suffering, anguish, humiliation... its not her who deserves so much of hatred...its her grandpa, people like vikas... and some selfish creatures, who used her when she was at the helm of her popularity and now behave like moral police who shun away her like she is an outcast...cant this get more hypocritic...

she was being used then, she is being used now...

she being about to be raped, is one of the most painful and most cruel thing that has shaken me to the core... it just makes my heart bleed to see her in so much pain and sorrow...completely left speechless with the magnitude of disaster that has struck geet...hope she leaves this ugly memories behind... 😭

Originally posted by: riyasp

It's Saturday morning. Usually I used to sleep like donkey. But your ff is my new alarm. Thanks for the update. Yesterday I waited till midnight and dossed off.

I completed reading "in love with enemy". Reet I don't have any words to tell about your work. All words fail to describe your work. Please go on writing a book, humble request.

Coming to the update, I am really not good @ words.??????

Hence Always a silent reader.

Geet looked straight at arjun for a few seconds before speaking up .

So you , I mean the college needs me to organize the party as there is no one else to do it in time . m I getting this straight ?

That was a moment dear, everyone has their worth right naaa. Good show dear.

That song selection , how do you do it dear, take a bow, I was in tears'' so emotional'.

Raat haamari to'
Chand ki saheli hai ..
Kitne dino ke baad..
aayi who akeli hai ..

That telepathy Arjun got ''it is so true. I had personally felt it several times''..when my dear ones are in trouble.

A humble request regarding that rapist Vikas, please make him suffer. The anguish over delhi bus case, I am still not over from that.

After reading each update I pray to god for your well-being Reet. You are one of my dear ones now.

Originally posted by: Onir

Oh my! Reet You're an awesome writer. 👏👏

Chapter 23 is always going to be treasured by me. I had read it the first thing this morning almost at the end of my night shift, actually was waiting to be free of any emerg calls to read this part in peace. But after reading this part I have made up my mind that how much ever I'm addicted to this story & your writing I'm NEVER ever going to read any part through the mobile, as then I'm left restless to vent it all out in a comment but can't do it as not reading through my laptop, so can't type a comment. I was so into the update that I was living it all and even whispered a NO during the rooftop scene with my trembling hands holding the mobile & a shiver passed through me dreading it all. Luckily I was in my resting cabin with none around or they would feel something's surely wrong.😉

Since then I've been restless to return home and type a comment as the whole part has been going on in my mind like a tape recorder causing a convoluted knot in my stomach which is now untangling while I type this. The whole update had me captured within it with a feeling of a vice like grip on my heart throughout with it just tightening in strength with each scene increasing with the intensity of feelings between the two, right from the union room till the scene just outside the hostel with two individuals brutally wounded for their past & deeds who are meant to be together but can't.

The union room scene was well described & was needed for a reality check for all, be it Geet, Arjun, Dia or even the students. The students were helpless without her, knew only she could help them but yet didn't leave to tarnish her & dishonour her with unjust remarks. What I liked was Arjun declined to take her place because he knew he would do no justice, none could as it was only Geet's right. The students agreed to ask for help but yet they had their own doubts. Sanjay knew she wouldn't refuse. But then they themselves pushed that selfless Geet away from them, like a disease, an epidemic was spread amongst them preventing her to enter and be with them. But now when they wanted her they asked help but yet with their own pride. So when she rejects they again back bite comments. I loved Su & Dia's fitting reply to them all. They showed them a mirror of their own ugly selves. They are far selfish & wronged than her yet just caused she had the guts to confess & bare it all that doesn't give them an authority to point fingers at her forgetting that they themselves are stained & she cleared the muck off them. Though she said college wasn;t hers any longer yet she couldn't leave what she had started & went to help them only if they asked for it.

Their conversation outside was so heart breaking. She was asking him why while he was bogged down by his own web of lies. He is a complicated riddle to her & he can't even solve it to her as she will break down further. He accepts that he can't see her suffering alone yet he shivers remembering the nightmare she created for him. He can't forgive her but yet can't see be humiliated. Dia comes in here but realises she has no space in them.DOES SHE ???? I was pained by Geet's indifference of seeing Dia's touch on Arjun. She feels so dejected & loss of any expectation that now nothing matters, jealousy is very farfetched as she feels she's a taboo to even feel any emotion other than hate, hurt & pain. Numbness she seeks.

Another blow to her dejection & loss was realisation of Su also at the verge of leaving her. It must have shattered her so deep loosing on that last thread of support, that she must have felt her defences crumbling and accepting that she's really the unwanted & tainted to be having any love & relation with her. I felt choked when she realises that nothing such would happen if her father was alive. Yes indeed! If her father were alive she would be safely tucked in his cradle of love & in the embrace of her Maan, away from harsh realities of life, and also the unpredictability of life.

Her plea'. "Please god increase my tolerance level, kyun nahi ho rahi mujhse'. Will this night ever end'" was so stabbing I felt for that lonely child in that adult Geet, who wants to endure it all bravely without breaking down but it each time is increasing than her capacity to suffer silently breaking her bit by bit so much so that finally she does accept that she's lonely and is destined to be so by singing that song (Loved it' so gelled in and apt to the scene at the neem tree') "Raat hamari toh'. Kitne dino ke baad aayi hai'." that now her only friend is the Night. But then she will dread this very night following morning. She associates herself with the dark night as she feels she is all dark within not deserving any light as she herself ruined her light, her love.

His inner thought describing her was of such beauty that I fell in love with those lines. ❤️ - Broken beauty clad in pale blue long ankle length dress. ' Her loneliness was splendour of earth, looking ethereal. All these description was like a premonition of the storm awaiting them ready to taint her & bruise her forever. I have told you before Reet how I love your inclusion of nature with the scenes, it gives a feeling of watching & living it all. That description of her ' Long wavy hair left open almost touching ground (That she the loved by all is now pushed to the ground yet she holds an inner beauty) Frill of her dress was lying on dust (That soon she will come face 'face with harsh tainting') this all was so leading & the words you used here made me jittery for what's coming next, so well woven together showing the flow of your thoughts. 👏👏👏

Originally posted by: Amour_Reet

you have no idea how over whelmed i m at this moment
this ...was worth the trouble i take up ..i come straight from work and dig myself in it .
my roomie had a huge fight with her bf ..all over phone ..i ignored the shouts and wrote ..my fren kept bugging me to leave pc and go for a walk ..i had to make excuses ..my head hurts ..i m gonna catch sleep for just 3 hours ...but its worth it !
so worth it !

the red marked sentences made feel so proud ..cant begin to tell u .
about the worm ..
oh i have plans for him ..

u r so gonna love it !

about dia ...i have plans too😃

Originally posted by: Onir

The scene at the neem tree gave me hope that now might be they will let down their guard and embrace each other to soothe the ache within, will give into their pain & desire for the other but then it all came tumbling down. She was sorry to invade his place, but in actuality it was their place and hideout where they shared themselves & lived those happy moments. Shows how hazy she has become to herself now, running away from all. She asked him to let go, stood loosing the warmth, knowing what she had lost. So symbolic I felt that she lost his warmth & touch going away from him so far that someone else was able to touch her tainting her soul deeply with unhealing bruises. And he let go of her to later regret that he actually let her walk into a nightmare that will haunt him more to let her live through it even when her Husband was there in the vicinity.

I had dreaded this very thing form the time she had confessed and the time you revealed her new secret lonely hideout - the rooftop. I had feared someone taking advantage of her inability to voice out as none would believe as she had already wrongly accused someone before. Vikas I knew was upto something but this was so horrible, I had a fearful inkling that he would do the most heinous crime in the blind of his own misdeeds & revenge. Even after having thought so when it really was happening while reading I felt a tight noose around me tightening with each scene of that brutality. There was so much glumness & suffocation in me that I wanted to breathe in gulps of air to calm myself down and read further on with trembling hands & shiver passing me. I didn't cry or felt numb, but acutely pained while reading. What adrenaline pumping words & kudos to your ability to make us feel it all just by words.👏👏

You know I'm a very calm & collected person, hardly get enraged but today while reading that rooftop scene of that Vikas torturing & molesting Geet trying to rape her I was on fire, I felt a suppressed rage bubbling wanting to do something to such good for nothing Men. You made me aware of this side of me. Thank goodness it's a fiction and that while reading I was off any emergency. Vikas while approaching her said he Loved her. LOVED!! My foot. What a shame he is tarnishing the word love while in the same sentence called her names. And then you showed his true inner demon that while almost trying to rape her after brutally physically manhandling her he said he hates her.😡😡 How inhuman! When he was slapping her, making her bleed tearing her clothes shearing her soul I actually painfully whispered a NO, wanting Arjun to rescue her.

Arjun actually saved her but this is going to be a nightmare for her, bruised beyond repair, far away from feeling anymore. Vikas deserved that beating, trashing and more but yes Arjun doesn't need to dirty his hands with his blood as Geet said.

The way she clung to him lifeless and he tried to soothe her and internally faulting him for it all, was splendid description. I remembered the earlier part when she had questioned him what would he have done if he had seen her in place of the girl Yadu bans molested. He actually lived seeing her bruised now. So painful ti must be for him and he must be regretting to have let go of her earlier at the neem tree where she was a beauty to be held in his embrace while now she was a beauty marred by blood, twisted in pain, attempted to be raped. She clung to him lifeless driving strength from him while he soothed her & himself. His Baby & Jaan brike her wall of pain leading to whimpers.

The dressing part was so well put together. It spoke of the strong Geet that though almost torn apart & is state of undress yet she held on to her dignity. She couldn't bear his pity. I feel she doesn't want him to touch her tainted self as she feels now she doesn't deserve him, that more than all this emotional & physical abuse staying away from him is what she deserves as a punishment. Su has said she will live... but now I feel she will be no longer living but dead from within numb towards all. As she might not even be able to take refuge in him as he in his anger squashed it all that she had to blurt out her truth ... "Because I don't have anyone else..." and he questioning her cry of his name in help made her withdraw even him from her never to ask for him even if it's her end.

Dia came face-face with her position in his life that he found her an outsider even though she was a girl who could help Geet change but he had that right on Geet. Geets' protest hurt him but I feel now its too late as both are broken.

What I question now is ??? what now? Vikas? With Su leaving who will be there for Geet? And what will others react to it all. I will really want a liberty toi punch anyone if they now even speaks ill of her saying ki she deserved it or that now she will know how it feels being molested, or on those lines. Reet you have made me violent girl.😆😆

What will be now ahead for Geet & Arjun. ??? What will Anant do now? ??

Geet's broken state, and self punishment , longing for might to end & craving for her love & Arjun to soothe her now reminds me of a song

Do naino mein aasoon bhare hai...

Nindeeyaa kaise samaaye.

Ddobe doobe aakhon mein, sapnon ke saaye

Raatbhar apne hai, din mein paraaye

Kaise nainon mein nindeeya samaaye

Do naino mein aasoon bhare hai...

Nindeeyaa kaise samaaye.

Jhotte teer waadon pe baras bitaaye

Jindagi to kaate, ye raat kat jaaye

Kaise nainon mein nindeeya samaaye

Do naino mein aasoon bhare hai...

Nindeeyaa kaise samaaye.

Finally I could remove it all here, Now I can be at peace... phew. Going to sleep now.

Continue soon. 😊

Originally posted by: kalabhas

omg!this could be the peak of her punishment and sufferings.
yes,i agreed she did a great sin by accusing arjun,but she confessed her sin,
if this could be the punishment for accepting deads,then i am afraid nobody would dare to
confess their mistake.
enough reet dont make to suffer the poor soul even more,everything has its saturation point but geet 's pain already crossed it.
for the past three updates u made me cry even without my knowledge,
first for maan's condition,then for it always for geet's condition,
how much humiliation,disgrace,taunt to their extreme level,she has to bear.
i wonder how she could manage to gather herself from breaking done completely or from taking any drastic steps.
i really salute her will power,even if she breaking down inside ,she is not showing it ,managed to cover the pain in front of others,her self respect is what i am admiring.
at first i am also angry on geet but after she realised her mistake and corrected it ,
her image is ten folds increased in my mind.
mistakes are human,every body commiting mistakes but not everyone dares to accept that infront of all,still knowing the bad consequences.
she is a brave geet i have ever read in any of the ffs.
arjun is so much confused,he not even know what he is expecting from her,or what he was expecting him to do with her.
geet is very clear that she is facing the punishment for her sin,which she thought it would give him satisfaction,though it was not correct,she was thinking that he was doing things for her out of pity.
two hearts loving each other to the fullest of their capacity or even beyond that,but still they are undergoing hell of time,
i dont know how they over come all the hurdles and become one,its going to be a long journey i suppose.
but my only request is ,pls dont make geet to get any further damage,pls do some repair works.
you r a great writer but u could not expect all ur readers also be a good commentors,
i am very poor in expressing my thoughts in words ,that too in english,
my english is so horrible pls bear with that.
this is my first attempt to give my views to this story,idk it made any sense?
one mORE thing are u a doctor?
but i thought u must be master in literature😆

Originally posted by: sonai-adrica

...but we r not letting her have the post back...

This line reminds me a ritual of durgapuja.. when an artist starts to make an idol of godess durga from clay the first thing he needs is a portion of clay from a pro*****te's house. What a double standard. We use them when we need them after that throw them like leeches.
Everyone used this girl when the needed...
But she is geet raichanda.u can break her but can't bend her.
The coversation with sunanda made her again the 13yrs old child who wanted ther safe shelter under her papaji's wings.


Oh...i m sorry...i..just.i forgot... i will...just go..

And with that she let go her last source of solace for her love..

About rooftop incident i was kind of sure if any such thing happen it'll must be done by vikas.
Why so... because which dog barks never bites... vikas never did thing in impulse. He always used his opportunity.and also his upbringing what u showed in previous chapter spoke loud and clear that how a filthy character he is...
But i'm worried for geet. I think she has gone into the after rape attempt trauma where victim thinks about herself not worthy for anyone.
Geer hailed from an orthodox family. For a boy the first kiss is a special one. But for a girl her first kiss is her submittence towards the relationship.it's special more than her first love making experience.thats why geet decleared to her friends that she is going to meet her would be husband when she didn't even know arjun loves her or not.so when vikas humiliated her dignity she found herself not worthy for arjun anymore.



Now about your writing skill...i have joined IF more than 1yr back and i posted my first comment 4 days back. I shared only one story with my husband that is ILWE. he thinks i m obsessed wih maaneet and simply hate MSK :)...but he asked me for the whole story and i was not able to do that at that time.

Thanks for writing.