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Posted: 12 years ago
#21
omg inne saare likes..
i never thought this will appreciated...
thank u so much...


everyone is complaining about short update..
but i told u when i started this os that i'm a crazy and lazy person and i hate typing.

i seriously salute writers who wrote such beautiful and long stories. i got to know how much hard work it takes to write a story...
actual problem is long update means delay in updating. so i try short but frequent updates.
but next time i'll try to give a big update...😃😃😃😃😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Superb!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Lovely concept.. :)
loved maan's pov :):)
plzzz do continue soon... :)

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Posted: 12 years ago
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this was such a cute story, quite believable. With girls fighting for guys, you reminded me of some things from my own life. LOL! The story is quite cute and I am intrigued by Maan's proposal.
So far so good. Jaldi update karo Mannu!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: TheBrat

this was such a cute story, quite believable. With girls fighting for guys, you reminded me of some things from my own life. LOL! The story is quite cute and I am intrigued by Maan's proposal.
So far so good. Jaldi update karo Mannu!



my friends used to do it. seeing a guy like at maggie point guy would be named as maggie guy and then start "was he better than others in line or not". it was fun. two things which were part of college life were street food outside the college and drooling and commenting on boys...

and yes thanks for liking. it means alot to me..😃😃😃😃
will try to update tonight...😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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i think it is getting more stupid. Tragedy for me as a writer.. 😆😆😆
😆😆😆 guys i've tried my best to give little big update. But trust me i'm up since 7 a.m in this chilly weather of Delhi. had an interview. and then persuaded mariam for her os. which we succeeded finally..

Part 4---

I live in a joint family. My grandparents, mumma-papa, chacha- chachi, me, annie(my real sister), dev Vicky, anshika(my cousins). Dev was 2 years younger than me. He is doing architecture. Actually my family is big drama company led by my dadima. She has just one problem. She needs someone to gossip. Ma and chachi were not interested in kitty parties so dadi has always dreamt about a party girl to be her granddaughter in law which is never going to happen. Three kiddos annie, Vicky and anshika were spies of naughty gang which my daadu leads from front. Every trouble for ladies in my house is product of this gang. Members were 6, all bachhas and my daadu. He was a cool dude, retired civil servant. He is my best friend. I had a hard time in controlling my feelings for geet in those summer vacations because daadu could find out about it with a little mistake of mine which was not gud for me as i was just in preliminary phase.

My college started. I was so happy as now I can see geet. Oh man how much I missed her I couldn't tell. But there was a little change. She was enjoying her college life now. I got to know that the girls play in college like kids after classes were over. We gave them a name GUK (grown up kids). My classmates used to join them sometimes. I so wanted to join but couldn't. Dad wanted me to go for MBA. So i had started to prepare for it.

Dad gifted me a sports bike on my b'day. I was so happy that day. Next day i was so happy riding it that i didn't notice anything around me while waiting for green light. Well I paid for it as I lost my chance. After green light only when I started my bike and looked at its mirror, I saw her looking at me with anger. I wanted to go back but resisted. After reaching college i got to know that period was free. I so wanted to go back to her but soon a discussion started on MBA college and i couldn't get out. After some time we were going towards canteen. She was sitting in playground on a viewers' bench. Her face was in her hands. it looked like she was crying. We all went towards her. She got a call and ran away. Later i asked her classmates about it. He told me about her getting late and then verma insulting her.

Actually our college was sometimes looked like a circus. There were experienced lecturers who were very good. But some are worse than us. more of a show off. Verma was one of them who used to show off more. He had irritated us so much that we decided to puncture all 4 tyres of his car on our last college day just as a small revenge for 3 years torture. But this incident irritated me little too much. She cried but why. She should not behave as a little kid that she took verma seriously. But her crying face irked me. In night, i decided that i will talk to her. Out of nowhere i received a message that our most khadus professor who never let us go not even on our fest day, has cancelled morning class. I didn't know why even god was after me. When i was trying to gather courage to give her lift on my new bike, here my class got cancelled. But then i decided that i didn't see the message. No matter what i'll see her in morning.

But when nature conspires to go against me who i am to get my wish completed. I left on my bike. I was just approaching her, she ran away without even seeing me. When i got out of the rude shock, i saw her catching the bus. Well Dhobi ka kutta na ghar ka nag hat ka. I was left to go nowhere. If i would go back, Daddu would definitely take my class. In college Sagar sinha and Aditya Joon would definitely get everything out of me. I decided to go to college. Atleast i could see her.

This was my bad day really. Sagar was in parking when i entered. He caught me there and asked for reason. I tried to be innocent and said that we have a class. He was puzzeled and asked whether i received a msg about cancellation of class. I shook my head. He was satisfied. But as we were about to move she came from nowhere. There were still 5 minutes before her class would start. I was looking at her. Sagar nudged me ans said,"ab jee bhar ke dekh liya ho to canteen ki taraf prasthan kare, bhaiya ji." I was so irritated. We left for canteen.

First years had come and we were going to introduce ourselves. We decided playground as venue for a departmental meeting all three years student. There came another shock for me actually drama will be a perfect term- Samaira. This girl is granddaughter of my dadi's bestie. She is hell irritating and the thing which made her unbearable for me was she tried to use dadi to go out with me. Well I was stuck. In few days, everyone knew that she was after me and there could be a proposal scene in GBM. Next few days were fun and difficult both. It was fun to watch geet and her friends portraying some scenes on samaira and me and it was equally difficult to hide from samaira. MSK never hides but even MSK had to hide when some idiot girl with no brains is stalking you despite a full verbal warning.

next day was GBM. I was worried as well as angry. Dadi seemed to be very pleased. And daadu sensed my bad mood. He came to my room to talk. I told him about samaira. I also told him that i would show her real MSK rather than cute, handsome or whichever avatar of mine she has seen. She was to face my worst mood. But daadu wad totally against it. He asked me to not to go to college the next and talk to her alone rather than in front of everyone. Insulting a girl is never a right decision if one can handle the situation otherwise. I did what he suggested. I bunked college next day to avoid any temper situation.

After some days, samaira came to my house and directly without knocking entered in my room. I was really very angry. But then i remembered Sagar's advise. Though he had given it for wrong person but was very useful in this situation. With a cute and emotional face i told her that i have always considered as my younger sister just like Anshika. It was a stupid thing to do. But it worked. She was angry and ran away. Later in night daadu and were laughing at this incident.

Geet had started taking some foreign language classes. She used to walk till main road. One day i decided to talk her but before i could talk again something happened. Actually it was cute scene watching her licking the chocolate off the icecream cover rather than having her icecream. I was waiting for my friend there. I was smiling. She looked at me and walked off in hurry. Now she started showing me angry faces but what can i do whenever she looked at me, the ice cream scene automatically flashed in front of my eyes and a smile was there on my face. She took it as a smirk and taunt. I wish somebody to tell her that I've gone mad for her.

Then came our farewell party.





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Edited by mannubhardwaj - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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oh my such a wonderful story i was reading it in one row and all ofa sudden it stoped... pls update next part soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
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NCE STORY
LOVED THE COLLEGE LIFE
AND WOW MAAN WAS ATTRACTED TO HER BUT DID NIT HAVE THE COURAGE TO GO TALK TO HER
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: punam2712

NCE STORY

LOVED THE COLLEGE LIFE
AND WOW MAAN WAS ATTRACTED TO HER BUT DID NIT HAVE THE COURAGE TO GO TALK TO HER


thanx or the comment..
yeah college life is always a fun part...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: change12

oh my such a wonderful story i was reading it in one row and all ofa sudden it stoped... pls update next part soon



thank u so much for this comment. will try to update soon.
going to finish it before 9 jan...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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nice update
loved it
maan wants to give ride to geet on his bike but couldnt
poor maan
continue soon

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