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mystique_girl

@mystique_girl

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#491

I am a seriously confused with the update.

I dont if its me who's not being able to understand... what is exactly happening...who thinks what about whom...why is pinky running from Geet and doesnt want her to know about them...why does Geet not want maan to know about Yash and Pinky...everything's a blur...

I am not being able to connect the updates.

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SleepingSoul

@SleepingSoul

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Posted: 13 years ago

#492

awesome update... Completely loved it

do cont soon

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punam2712

@punam2712

Sparkler

Posted: 13 years ago

#493

YASH WAS SO SWEET THE WAY HE REASSURED PINKY

ONE BAD INCIDENT SPOILS A GIRLS LIFE

BUT WHY DO THEY WANT TO HIDE FROM MAAN

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Posted: 13 years ago

#494

Originally posted by: angel_smily
awesome part

Thank you! 😊

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Posted: 13 years ago

#495

Originally posted by: sarah_zaisha
kiss to complete karne dia hota ...main point pe ruk gayee

That's the whole fun of it 😉 😆

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Posted: 13 years ago

#496

Originally posted by: shalini_s
y isGeet so obssed abt Maan not knowing abt Yash & Pinky.. but loved it how she delayed their entry..

Because they requested for Maan not to be aware, for reasons which shall be revealed in due time 😉

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Posted: 13 years ago

#497

Originally posted by: KaSh-Maneet-Fan
hiii my barfi
awesome update

loved it

loved pinky n yash

adorable

geet is crazy

cant believe she kissed maan

cant wait 4 more

will maan find out da truth

con soon

love ya

thanks 4 da pm

Saiii meri ladoo 🤗 all will be revealed soon, have patience 😆 thankyou, love you more! <3

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Posted: 13 years ago

#498

Originally posted by: 6th.Element
I'm a lot behind Fozia and I just finished Chapter 5.

Some initial thoughts: Family feud, takeovers, sibling rivalry, boss - secretary, father -son elements all warrant undiluted drama and I have to say, I'm getting my fill here.

Eventually, I think, Maan will have a steeper character curve than most others in the story (Ok..no speculating)

I love the small details that you add and how they directly point to the characters themselves.
Maan's note: "Early lunch" which he'd left at 10 PM...the guy doesn't even want to be delicate about it, eh? Nor does he seem to have a care about the impression he was leaving on the new hire.
Also, especially in the scene where Geet comes into Maan's room and he's aimlessly swiveling in his chair. Lord! In that scene, for obvious reasons, I could only picture him as a lost boy in his dad's office where everything is of size monster - ready to eat him alive.
Withdrawal seems to come easy to him. Would be good to know, why so?
I can't wait for you to explore this man of many layers, for I have this strong instinct that he is not the same inside as what he seems to be on the surface of it all.

I will wait to speak about Geet. At first, she comes across desperate need a job and yet there was - how do I put it? - a laid back attitude on the first day of office. I believe that is just her way of sweeping aside her first-day jitters. But again, this is only chapter 5...

-H

PS Your crisp dialogue style is very easy on the eyes.

H! What a pleasure to have you here :)

Hmm, you're right about Maan, there's a lot more to him than meets the eye - which you've indirectly covered with the lost boy, laidback attitude he's developed. There is a reason for all of this which I can't reveal yet of course, but it'll come to fruition ;)

Geet, well *sighs* what can I say about her? I have to admit, writing about this Geet is one of the most enjoyable yet taxing things to do, she changes her mind all the time! You're right about her persona, she's that type of relaxed person who tries not to let anything overcome or faze her... tries being the co-operative word ;)

Thank you! I like to keep it snappy & simple when it comes to fanfics, short stories & one shots tend to be more intense & layered on the dialogue.

Enjoy the rest of your read :)