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Posted: 13 years ago
#41
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Originally posted by: lively-piia

oye teri itna lengthy update diya hai yaar...kuch toh taras khao is
nacheez par...
i hv update yestarday n today too...now i m tired...and u give me a
looong ...
comment
get it...šŸ˜‰

Ok ok u know what I just came back from work and first thing I did after dinner read ur update
Though I was sleepy after reading ur update I do wanted a ill more thoda aur types heheh
Ok coming to the update honey
I love the flow of ur story apt language and rhythm kicks and punches at the places
Perfect recipe for a great story
Loved Maan's anger the way he protected her even when drunk
Like a true gentle man he honoured and saved a damsel in distress well that is our maan 😳 After all hain na
And what the hell she is educated still aise kyu
Hope maan helps her more
Ps long comment now one more update šŸ˜†
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Posted: 13 years ago
#42

wow

my pouting queen updating great wha a pleasent surprise i loved it to the core awesome plzzz update more or else i am pouting
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Posted: 13 years ago
#43
will like regular updates to keep intrest in story other wise it can be forgoten ya like ur story concept-
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Posted: 13 years ago
#44
awesome...waiting for next update.plzzz more maaneet moments
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Posted: 13 years ago
#45
loved d story
read it in one go
waiting 4 d next...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#46
any one need update 2day??????????????šŸ˜‰
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Posted: 13 years ago
#47
Act 3 scene [A]
maan woke up pretty late in the morning it was not him...he never gt late in his life...actually he never slept late...he normally wake up in the nights haunted by nightmares...but last he slept peacefully his mind told him it was the effect of the drink bt his heart knows the answer ...he denied it...bt ofcourse...he is msk...
*p.s:- hard nut to crack...
while gettin ready for office he opened his dressing table to took out his wallet only to realize dat it was in the coat...
the coat which he had given to the girl to hide her modesty...
maan[st]:- tahzeeb...or??????????????
maan u gave ur coat to a girl whoes name is also not real...
aaahhh...my all credit cards and not to mention hell of cash was there too...i knew u cant trust anyone...maan she didnt ask for it...she didnt look old enough...may be 16-17years...oh hell no u r thinking about a kid...
maan gt a grip on you ...just think that u lost ur wallet.
IN KHURANA MANSION...
Girl of 19 years approx...but in total rugged dress...more like boys...come down the stairs skipping two at a time...
*p.s :- misha from pkyek...as annie

savitri devi who was sittiing on the dinning table commented:- annie beta stop doing that you know i really doubt you are my daughter's daughter seriously u are a boy in body of a girl...

annie:- [anvesha khanna daughter of maan's bua her parents died in car accident when she was only 2 years old'she is maan's family from that time onwards] take a chill pill babes ...hey hv u seen my so called driver????

dadi:-he is outside ???????????? y u r asking dat??????????

annie:-sun rises from the west today he woke up so early today men dis is miracle''..

dadi:- my mistake''''I thought u were asking about rammu''''..and no ur personal driver is completing his beauty sleep''.

Annie :- I just knew it''..that kumbhkaran will get me late '.

She stomped towards his room''''''

A guy of 22 years approx. laying on his bed upside down'''whole room was a mess and walls are decorated wid the pics of annie and anvesha wid him'''..he is none other than..

VIKRANT SINGH KHURANA''''''..VICKY'

Result of maan's dad illegimate relationship but given name by savitri devi as his mother while giving birth to him''he has everything bt n twat he desired most''''maan's love.

*p.s:- choosen ezaj khan'..kavya 4m kavyanjali'''..as vicky

Annie:- wake up u lazy bones''''..idiot'''.we r getting late'.

Vicky:- I m not going '''''..let me sleep.

Annie :- okies''no prob'''..hey 4gt to tell u'..mahek is joining the college 4m 2day onwards'''''. C ya''

Vicky :- [startled '''''.jumped up from the bed]

Wat???????????? Are you nuts????????????why didn't u told me earlier we r getting late for college'''

Annie :- hey don't bother u were not going na??????????

Vicky:- I 4gt I hv important lecture 2 attend''..

Annie :- ya '..ya'''.i know'''now just get ready fast.

Vicky:- 5 min'''''''nope just 2 min'''.

Annie winked at him n left d room''..

After some tie Vicky joined her at dinning table''''..

Vicky:- hey sexy'''''[to dadi]

Dadi:- hey hotty''''. Wats up?????????

Vicky:- nothing dadi just going to attend the most boring professor lecture''''

Annie [ in hushed voice]:- with most adorable company'''rite Vicky.

Vicky [ glared at her]:- as though u don't hv pretty nice company for urself'''''

Annie:- u shut up ur mouth otherwise'''

Vicky:- otherwise wat??????????????? U cat'''

Dadi:- oh god !!!!!!!!!!!!! stop it''' not again''.when will they grow up'''..she left the table n let them fight'

Annie picked up an apple and ws abt to munch it '''

Vicky :- hey ''''..dat's mine '''''give it bak''''.

Annie:- kyun ????????????? tumhara naam likha hai??????

Vicky started moving towards her with warning:- give it bak'..

Annie:- catch me if u can'''

And she ran outside the mansion ''''she slipped n was abt to fall when a strong hand hold her preventing her from falling'..

Maan :- wat nonsense is dis???? Annie cant u be careful?????

Annie got frightened……..she was scared of maan……

Annie:- aaahhh………..woh……………….i……….just…[she fumbles]

Maan got irritated:- cant u say one line properly……….

Just then Vicky arrives………..

Vicky:- who bro…..its nt her fault……..actually she ws running from………

He was cut short by maan's raised hand indicating him to stop…….

Maan:- did I asked u for explaination???

Vicky :- that's a thing bro you never ask "ANYTHING"……….

There was hurt and pain clearly visible in his voice……….

Maan looked at Vicky he never hated him….but still cant open his heart to him……………though he knew it ws nt his fault………he felt bad for him………..bt still cant do anything abt him………again….as EMOTIONS are not eant for him……

He sighed and left the place……

Vicky kept gazing at him ………..he longed for his love…he was his father which he never had……….brother……..mentor………..everything………..but his everything hates his mrer existence..this thought made Vicky teary…….

Annie came beside him n offered him his apple:- hey now don't be in sulky mode………and for u ….woh kya kehte hai……

Main hoon naa………

Vicky laughed at his sister antics to made him smile……………

They left for the college…

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Sorry guys for half update ystrdy...but now it's complete...

sorry again for no geet but character of annie n vicky r of real importance so hv to introduced n gv u glimpse of their relation with maan...

i m sad with no. of likes n comment it discourged me a lot..

press like n do comment...

Edited by lively-piia - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#48
that was too awesomeee !
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Posted: 13 years ago
#49
bus thats it .

i thought you were going to give us some more. disappointed 😭 😭 😭

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loved the introduction of Misha and Daadi . so she is Maan's cousin.

overall the whole update felt very abrupt and incomplete to me.

i guess i got used to reading update after update , you spoilt us by giving multiple updates earlier.

thx
gitz.




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Posted: 13 years ago
#50

Originally posted by: ixray

bus thats it .


i thought you were going to give us some more. disappointed 😭 😭 😭

********

loved the introduction of Misha and Daadi . so she is Maan's cousin.

overall the whole update felt very abrupt and incomplete to me.

i guess i got used to reading update after update , you spoilt us by giving multiple updates earlier.

thx
gitz.



i hv updated dear...n sorry for half updated yesterday...

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