SALVATION...MG(FF) sorry..discontinue note - Page 4

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nice part honey
Do update soon

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Posted: 13 years ago
#32
Thats nt fair. Shi moke pe ff rok diya. Mujhe update chaiye.
Superb part. Pm krna
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow

this is a captivating story . ( i think i have a thing for older man )

i loved the addition of that song from janam samjha karo. beautiful song and a very nice movie.

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this ff is going to be part of my favorites for easy access as u seem to be on a updating Roll !!

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hmmm so when is the next update ?????
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Posted: 13 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: ixray

wow


this is a captivating story . ( i think i have a thing for older man )

i loved the addition of that song from janam samjha karo. beautiful song and a very nice movie.

*********

this ff is going to be part of my favorites for easy access as u seem to be on a updating Roll !!

*******

hmmm so when is the next update ?????

loved ur comment...u liked it...i m honoured
u hv a thing 4 older men...u naughty girl...
i m thinking to update...u want that????
do you????
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Posted: 13 years ago
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ACT 2
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Posted: 13 years ago
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hi hi madam ji... kya bat hai ajj kal app online mai bahut dikharai hoo... 😉



for the start dear...

its really nice to read. i will read the parts and comment on saturday...

by the way how are you? and your kids? hope they are not troubling you much😉 i m seeing you online after very long time. i tried to send pm to you but i did not reach you due to your pm box is full..😭



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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: harshdb

hi hi madam ji... kya bat hai ajj kal app online mai bahut dikharai hoo... 😉



for the start dear...

its really nice to read. i will read the parts and comment on saturday...

by the way how are you? and your kids? hope they are not troubling you much😉 i m seeing you online after very long time. i tried to send pm to you but i did not reach you due to your pm box is full..😭



i m on winter break along wid some medical leaves so free a bit now days...i gt on line read d updates...n comment if needed...in between do my work too...
aur jahan tak aapke pm ka sawal hai...dear i emptied my pm box so u can mesg me now...
mmmuuuaaahhh
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Posted: 13 years ago
#38
ACT 2 Scene [C]
...When he heard the voice.
guy - how much u will run???
oh!!! mr. maan i never thought you have same taste like mine...ok let me introduced myself ...i m Rahul chopra son of ravi chopra.
maan - i hv heard of ur deeds ...hv seen rite now.
rahul - i dn't like 2 share my things...and men she is real beauty...but dont mind 2 shaare her wid u...i mean we r after all we r partners...we'll enjoy her n hv fun wid her all night ...
it ws when the girls body in maan's arms gt stiffened and maan felt that he was boiling wid rage and rahul crossed his limits when he tried to touch her face...
maan gave him one knock out punch and he was on the floor with blood oozing out 4m his mouth.
rahul - u cud hv said dat...u wanted her all 4 urself 4 2nite...it was no need 2 gt violent for it...dat 2 for a s**t like her...
he again gt a severe blow on his stomach as a reply by maan...result rahul fainted...😃
then at the same time a man wid strong build n cruel face appeared on the place...
the girl in maan's arm tightened her hold on him ...she tried to conceal herself by hidding behind maan...
guy- Tahzeeb...tareko bola tha bahut hua tera natak ...aaj tujko mera paisa dena padega ...aarey kyun khali pilli bhav kha rahi hai... tune jo paise khushi ke ilaz ke liye liya tha woh tune abhi tsk nahi lautaya hai..
aur jab aaj ek grahak tere itne paise de raha hai...toh tu kehti hai ki tu dandewali nahi hai...kab tak bachayegi aapne aapko...
girl first time ever after the arrival of man spoke - jab tak bacha sakte hai bachayege aur nahi bacha paye toh maar jayege par danda nahi kareyge...robert yeh tum jaan lo.
robert- bas teri koi baat nahi suni muje...
he came forward to grab her hand...
but a strong grip prevented him to do so...
maan - dont dare to touch her...kitne paise liye the issne??
tell me...
robert - 4.5 lakhs
maan took out his mobile and called adi ...and asked him leave 6 lakhs
on the hotel reception in the name of robert...
after finishing the call he said..
maan - 1.5 lakh extra tujhe de raha hoon...aaj ke baad is ladki ke aas paas bhi nazar mat aana... and if u do u will not be able to enjoy the money u just got...as no body wiil be able to fish over for u in mumbai gutters...aur yeh MAAN SINGH KHURANA ka waada raha..
*p.s :- haila...mardala...koi itney nasahe mein itne attitude se dhamki de sakta hai...maar dala...
robert was terrified...😆
maan - and yes inform the hotel staff to remove this garbage [ while looking at the fainted body]...quickly otherwise it will leave permanent stains on the floor...hurry...
*p.s :- kya line maari hai...uufff...
with that he started to move but due to alcohol was abt to fall when one soft hand came forward not letting him fall. she carefully adjusted his hand on her shoulder and hold him by his waist while helping him to walk.
he was heavy and huge they reached the parking area..his driver come running towards him... she distangled herself from him...he was about to open the door of his car when he heard...
"SUNIYE"...
he turned and she continued...
"Shukriya"...'hume nahi pata ki hum aapke is ihsaan ka badla kaise chukaygey par hume yakeen hai zindagi koi mauka jaroor degi..'
he was amazed by the dignity of this girl he kept staring her with awe..
girl became concious as her dress was torn.
maan felt her uneasiness he took out his coat and made her ware..she resisted but his one angry glare was enough for her..
maan - where do u want to be dropped ?? mera matlab hai...
but was cut by the girl...
girl - it's ok ...i would easily make it to my room...
maan [st] - oh man!!!!!! holy shit...she is educated ...she speak such a fluent english ...
girl - nothing to worry about it's nt far away...thank u again.
she turned her back and started taking few steps.. she turned back raised her hand to wave him gud bye with a smile accompanied on her lips...her smile was like a first soft morning ray of sun...
he kept on standin g there until she disappeared in the night darkness...
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Pheww...jaan nikal gayi...it is lengthy update again...
but i m nt happy wid the response i m getting...
i m seriously disappointed..
do press like and comment guys



Edited by lively-piia - 13 years ago
ayushi.sinha thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
#39
U better update more I am waiting 😍
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Posted: 13 years ago
#40

Originally posted by: miki14

U better update more I am waiting 😍

oye teri itna lengthy update diya hai yaar...kuch toh taras khao is
nacheez par...
i hv update yestarday n today too...now i m tired...and u give me a
looong ...
comment
get it...😉

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