SALVATION...MG(FF) sorry..discontinue note

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Posted: 14 years ago
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SALVATION...
means... MUKTI...
HE WANTED SALVATION FROM HIS SORROWS...
FROM HIS FEARS...
FROM HIS NIGHTMEARS...
FROM HIS LONLINESS...
And
she was HIS
ULTIMATE SALVATION...
DIS IS MY FIRST HAND EXPERIENCE IN WRITING...
I M TRYING MY IMAGINATION SKILL...PLZ BEAR WITH ME..AND TELL ME SHOULD I CONTINUE...
The main characters of maan and geet will be introduced in the first scene itself mainly there would be maan in first few of acts of my story...
Maan singh khurana:- 32 years old businessman with no heart..wounded in past
Geet aka ????? :- 18 years old girl dancer by profession studied till 12th faced many problems in her life but still live life to fullest...hv scars too deep in heart...
rest characters will be introduced with the flow of the story...
LETS BEGIN OUR JOURNEY TO SALVATION...
ACT 1 :- scene [ A ] :-
It was pretty late at night round about 2:00 clock MSK flight just landed in bombay airport..it started raining...
He hated it...rains...the feeling of calmness the drop brings to others normally leave him with anger,frustration & agony...he simply hated it..
driver was there to drive him yo K.M. but maan was restless he took the keys and told to drop his lugage in mansion...
he drove the car...he hated the rains..when he lost his mother it was raining that night...he went to his beach house..rain had stopped he decided to stroll around the beach near by..his private beach...while he was walking along the sea he saw a figure sitting near the shore writing something..he was angry how dare he or she to be here? he reached near the figure...
suddenly it stared to pour...rain..
maan- wat the hell???
it startled the girl..the girl turned around and bumped to maan..her face was covered with dupatta like a veil only her eyes could be seen..her eyes as if there was so much to see and to feel..there was pain in her eyes yet some kind of hope was also there...the moment got disturbed by the thunder and lightening..
she got scared her eyes widen with fear...it was then he noticed the colour of her eyes...
they were of hazel blue color...maan's mobile started to ring..adi his assisstant on whom he rely though he never addmitted that was calling him..he turn his back to attend the call. maan-wat was an emergency to call at this time?
adi-maan sirrr...i tried to call u earlier also but u were nt reachable..sir the meeting with chopras have been finalized 2mrw at 9:00 pm at hotel raizada..
maan- fine prepare the final deal documents i want to crack dis deal at any cost.
adi- gud nite sirr
maan - hmmm..
after finishing his call he turned around to get back at the stranger who was sharing his beach with him...but he found it empty..just few letters were scribbled on the sand most of the letters were washed away by rain and waves only the first letter was there "G"...
maan felt strange as though he lost something ... he felt lonely though he knew he was always alone..
He reached pretty late in the morning.he was tired but something was bothering him just didn't knew wat? he started practising his tai-chai to get himself exhausted but even that does not seems to effect or subdue his anxiousity.
It was normal morning at khurana mansion... SAVITRI DEVI KHURANA ... dadi of maan singh khurana was the lady of principles but had one biggest grief in her life that she was not able to save her maan from the cruelities of human nature and bitter experiences of relationships which made him so heartless almost inhuman. She used to miss her 12 year's old maan with the cutest pout and a frown on his face. She knew everything which he saw in his life made him loose faith in everything especially EMOTIONS.
GUYS DIS WAS MY FIRST HALF INSTALLMENT...AND YES IN SECOND U WILL COME TO KNOW THE MAJOR REASON OF MAAN'S RUDENESS TOWARDS LIFE...HOPE U LIKE IT.
Hey muski di i was missin u so much dat i started my own ff..lol
AND to my irresistabal buddy...guess who??
too all my buddies lv u..
INDEX
Act 1 scene A :- page 1
Act 1 scene B :- page 2
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hey guys dis my second intallment enjoy...
ACT 1 :- Scene [B] :-Maan was getting ready for office when dadi enterd outhouse and came to his room.
dadi:- maan when did u arrived ? we waited for you last night but you never showed up? where were you ?maan :- dadima its nothing to worry about. i wasin the beach house and u should take care of ur health, i m nt a kid i can take care of myself...he spoke with annoyance and rudeness in his voice..dadi:- maan enough of ur attitude show it to ur employees not to me. i m done with i m asking u one last time when u are shifting to main house..maan:- dadima im nt getting into that discussion again...u know it ... it will never happen..
dadi:- stop it maan js't stop it. why r u so stubborn ? why can't u obey me once ?
maan :- like father, like son ...like my so called father obeyed u... he smirked with pure hatred..maan ...dadi yelled.maan :- no dadi...something cannot be mend ... i can't live in dat place where the walls are painted with the blood of my mother and my unborn brother... the walls of dat mansion are decorated with broken pieces of shattered dreams of a small boy...who used to cover his ears to stop hearing the crying of beaten mother and abuses of druken father... the rooms of that mansion r decorated with the pictures of ur so called son infedility...not to mention the live example...i hv nothing to live for but i hv too...i hv to breathe...for that i hv to be away 4m dat place that place suffocates me ... i can't breathe in dat air..
He was already panting while ending his muscles twitched, his jaws tightened and his eyes were bloodshot red filled with rage and anger. maan:- excuse me dadima i have to leave for office i m already late. He left the room walking past his dadima without even glancing at her.dadima slumped on the couch nearby. she looked at the picture of maan's mother.today all her hopes of bringing maan home were shattered. today in his eyes and in his words she felt was much more than the words of despise. dadima pour her heart out to the picture of maan's mother. dadi:- i know i was wrong for choosing u for my son..but i became selfish, i was a mother. i thought he will mend his ways will become responsible for u. but it was the first biggest mistake of my life and my second biggest mista was when i left u alone with that monster...i will regret that my last breathe...and the last fatal mistake mine was when i belived u wenever u said it is o.k...it was not o.k...it never was...
she started crying bitterly...
it was bcz of me u died..i hv lost my friend, my daughter on that fateful night but i also lost someone who was as close as u that night...i lost my maan...maan.. i lost him.. and now i m sure he is never to be found...
she left the room with tears still floating in her eyes...
Someone was watching all this with pain...tears...and sort of anguish in eyes.
SORRY NO GEET...HV PATIENCE DEAR..
AND YES THAT PERSON AT THE END WAS NOT GEET...JS'T WANT TO CLEAR DAT..LOL
O.K GUYS DIS WAS SECOND HALF OF THE FIRST ACT...
DID U LIKE IT???
DO TELL.
AND YES DIS SCENE IS SPECIALLY 4 MY "SURROGATE" BUDDY WHO TOLD ME 2 MAKE A LINK...LV U
LUV U ALL...
Edited by lively-piia - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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o aisa lagtha hai k maan ka past khafi dardnaak tha...no wonder k he has lost his faith in relationships
omg maan ki mom n uske unborn brother ki death uske dad ki wajah se hui...n dadi also thinks that she was responsible for this situ
o take ur time dear geet ko tabhi introduce karna when u feel k it is thew right time
ye lo main bhool gayi
ME FIRST
YIPEE
continue soon
love-Piya
Edited by piya- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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nice part...who was the person?...either maan himself or his step-brother/sister

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