Maidens and Madmen Upd 20 Pg30, 13/07 - Page 18

prenote: to answer your question, you can skip me for pms - ni come visit when you've got a handful done! =)

to the four i read just now -

jailbird I - although there is little link (or maybe there is) it reminded me of a poem from high school time val.ed. classes! or moral science, as some schools call it :D) it was titled one - and i don't know if its a famous author's work or not) but the entire poem was about one this that does that... and one this another that does this another... read it? i'll try hunt it up and leave u an offliner... something about ur pre conclusive line reminded me of it... ! =)

jailbird II - another little thing noticed... i recalled the epi for this one, and the ochre color of her veil hence came back in a flash... it made me wonder if the showmakers had actually for a moment given thought to what color she should wear for that particular episode, or if just came by rotation in a wonderful twist of fate! cause ochre seems to define so much about her scenario and predicament, and the overall essence of that period in the show...like a color representation of it!

tears - this one was somewhat cliche and... i dunno, not exciting to my mind as a read... it was just plain and out there, in a not so striking way... or maybe it was me. i thought it was somewhat repetitive of the one you wrote from this very scene once before? although you employed the consequent emotion in this one, as opposed to the other...

apprehension - yeh, this was neat. i notice how you use those four words to describe her ineffable state of mind - and then sum it up as apprehension in the title... not complete in a way, but perhaps the best bet! or maybe you could call it ineffable as such 😆 ... the womanhood line nails a point, like it needed none of the other words anyways!

note to rush - i'm going to sit up and read your verse parallels to sookie's next - without reading the related ones from her thing... i just feel like reading them independent... so, yeh, should be commenting soon - that, and your wishful thinking =)

cheers,
nj

Originally posted by: mayurrocks

Sookie, Rush and Whitepearl, amazing!!! You guys leave me in awe always!!! 👏👏👏

life changed like a motion picture
being married then left in discomfiture

of being abandoned and yet not alone
carrying a part of you was not to condone

fighting for life; yours and one within
of being considered a fool, totally blithering

fear was not the start of it,
though there was no room for it

acceptance first was of womanhood
and it suddenly changed to motherhood

Thanks Mayur

and sure NJ...will await..your comments..whenever you have time..

sookie

what happened to 12th, 13th and 14th updates??

i know i was not around...looks like..you were MIA too
!!

Originally posted by: -RushTrip-

life changed like a motion picture
being married then left in discomfiture

of being abandoned and yet not alone
carrying a part of you was not to condone

fighting for life; yours and one within
of being considered a fool, totally blithering

fear was not the start of it,
though there was no room for it

acceptance first was of womanhood
and it suddenly changed to motherhood

of being abandoned and yet not alone
carrying a part of you was not to condone

thanks so much white pearl..amrita and shreya...


and Sookie..where are you??

we thot we wont need the pm but looks like we need to send you a pm to..start writing...now.4 days worth of updates pending..

the files are piling up girl...pls..show up..!!