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lallulal2010

@lallulal2010

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#21

amazing..........................heavenly 😊

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asmara

@asmara19

Navigator

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#22

wooowww that was the most beautiful thing i have ever read. honestly you expressed every emotion and all the sentiments so beautifully that i was totally lost in it. if u ever write more ffs then pls do pm me. it seriously was really beautiful

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afsha

@-afsha-

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#23

Jus loved the way u wrote Maan's feelings

It was jus fab

Imagining them was quite easy in this position n their lovely talks were out of this world

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Yasmin

@Yazzi

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#24

You sometimes go from first person to third person and at the flash back scene there was a part where you went from past tense to present, that kind of gets little distracting, other than that this OS was beautiful 😳👏 i love the way you describe their emotions, specially the scene where Geet was sitting at the waiting room, the way you described that scene was outstanding 👏

Great Job! 👏

Take Care

Yasmin

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suji

@suji01

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#25

really amazing 👏👏

loved the choice of your song and the blending of it with the story😊

keep up the good work😛

👏

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ChhalkiSyaahi

@ChhalkiSyaahi

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#26

Oh God...this was amazing...so profound...so emotional.... Oh gosh....I have read it 5 times by now....plz turn it into an FF...this is too good to be lost.... keep writing more....