FF: Hum Tum for Hamesha (part 6 pg 11) - Page 2

Originally posted by: pickle6586

hi shaila,

i told u i will not be able to come and comment before afternoon but had to do it before that..well!!! u did not leave me a choice did you???? 😉

great start honey...!!!! 👏.... hey, muskan is geet's daughter's name???cool... that's the case in my update too,...!!! and geet works in sanjeevani????? 😛 has she not come across dr. armaan yet????? 😳... lol...jokes...it s really nice honey...!!!

and maan geet away for 2 years??? hmmm... interesting.. cant wait to read how they meet and get back together...!!!!!!

update soon sweety...!!!!

soumya

Thanks di for the encouragement
yeah,geet's daughter's name is also Muskaan
Actually,Rahul's character was supposed to be Armaan but then I thought that I should change it to Rahul as she used to be Rahul's opposite....
There is a Rahul and Geet track in the future but of course it'll be Maneet in the end..I mean this is about them right?

Di,abhi to shuruat hai,age age dekho hota hai kya!!!😆
Bye... 😃 😆

Originally posted by: muskanp

hi shaila..lovely

very different..loved it..plz cont..

I am on cloud nine that you,such a great FF writer thinks my FF is nice...Thanks for the compliment di!
Shall be continuing today or tmr....Bye 😃

Originally posted by: IndigoBlues

Arre yaar, aise fanfics likhegi, to mera kya hoga? 😆 😛

Seriously, good fanfic. The whole 'saliva on the cheeks' part could just be 'Geet felt Muskaan kissing her cheeks". As for Rahul, I hope he doesn't turn negative later...very sweet first chapter and I loved the emotions!

PM list mein daal, mein notes le rahi hoon. 😛

Tera kuch nahi hoga...people will love your FF that much..I still love it...har FF ki alag jagah hoti hai....

Thanks for these words of encouragement...As for Rahul,don't worry,wo zada problems nahi create karega.... 😛

Keep reading and commenting and I'll keep the updates coming....
I have added you to the PM list

hey plzz add me to u r pm list luv ur part

Thanks a lot guys for your support and love....so here's the next part...

Anyone else wants to be added to the PM list?
Please comment...really love to read what you feel about my FF...I will definitely reply to each of your comments,okay?
Just keep commenting

Recap: Raima aunty,Rahul and Muskaan are introduced....

After their breakfast had finished,Rahul and Geet left for Sanjeevni, where they work.

Part 2 up...

Rahul and Geet headed to the car park after saying bye to Muskan,who'd stay at home with Raima Aunty. When they sat in the car,
Geet turns on the radio and increases the volume to the max and starts singing loudly in her besura tone...Rahul gets annoyed....

Rahul - Geet,pagal ho gayi hai?Yeh kya hai tera roz roz ka natak...(turns off the radio)
Geet - Tujhe kya problem hai?Main gaa rahi hoon,mera mu hai!
Rahul - Haan lekin mere kaan phat rahe hain tera besura gana sun ke...agar gana sunna hi hai to classical music sunn..Yeh le(taking out a cd from the cd bag,knowing that she would never let him lmake her listen to classical music)
Geet - Chee...main nahi sunnungi....usse accha hai ki main kuch na sunoon...
Rahul - Theek hai...kam se kam main to baksh gaya...(sighs in relief)

The car stops at a traffic signal...Geet looks out the window...she sees a maternity store and a pregnant woman sobbing outside it....Geet begins to wonder what must have happened to her...She becomes incredibly quiet when she is in deep thoughts....

Rahul - Geet,kya soch rahi hai? (tapping her shoulder)
Geet doesn't respond
Rahul - Geet!(more impatiently) He starts shaking her,trying to break her out of her thoughts...
Geet - Kya hai rahul?Dekh nahi raha main kuch soch rahi hoon? Uss aurat ko dekh....woh ro kyun rahi hai?
Rahul - Chod na....tujhe uski kya padi hai....(sees that the signal is going to turn green soon)Chal...
Geet doesn't stop thinking about that woman though...The entire day she thinks about that woman...

Soon,the clocks strikes 8...time to go home...Geet starts packing her stuff and clearing the table for the next lady in the night shift
After 5 minutes, Rahul catches up with her.

Rahul - Tujhe kuch khana hai ki ghar jaa kar maa ka wahi boring khana khayegi...
Geet - (gets furious) Khabardaar jo aise kaha aunty ke khane ke bare mein...(drifts off to her thoughts about that woman again)
Rahul - Accha meri maa!Chal ghar chal....Muski bhi tera intezaar kar rahi hogi...

After a 20 minute drive, they reach home.They have their dinner and are going to sleep.

Geet - Good ngiht Rahul,good night aunty....Muski,tu bhi good night bol(carrying her daughter in her embrace who is dozing off already)
Muskaan - Good night...(mummers)

They go to their respective rooms...Geet places Muskaan next to her,surrounded by pillows and her favourite toy,a big Pooh bear,which was bigger than her... 😆..
Kissing her baby on her forehead,Geet lies down on her bed and thinks about that woman...before she realizes,she has drifted away to her own past...

Yes,she went back to her condition 2 and a half years ago...when she was still pregnant with Muskaan....it was the most unfortunate day of her life...all that comes to her mind about that incident was IF ONLY I HADN'T....

Drifting off to her flashback....

Maan was staring daggers at her..If looks could kill,she would have been dead by now.Her eyes had started watering but due to the darkness in her room,she was successful in hiding her tears...
Maan - Geet,tum mere liya ek ladki contract pe dhudogi...yeh mera order hai....
Geet - Ji nahi,main aapki baat nahi manungi,aap mere boss nahi hain. Dadima meri boss hain aur unhone mujhse ye kaha hai ki main aapki liye ek dulhan dhudun(in a sad tone)
Maan - (tunrs his back facing her as he can't say this to her comfortably) Par mujhe shaadi nahi karni...yeh meri life hai..mujhe apne dhang se jeene do...main yeh dadi se nahi keh sakta hoon kyunki woh bemaar hain...ab yeh tumhari zimmedari hai
Geet - Ji nahi....main aisa kuch nahi...ka..run..gi(feels weak...about to faint)
Maan notices her voice slowly fading away...he turns around just in time to catch her in his strong arms...He starts panicking.Yes,the great MSK was panicking...
''Kash maine tumhe itna na daanta hota...yeh maine kya kar diya...''thinks Maan to himself with regret in his mind...
He carries her to her bed and tries to revive her but to no avail...
He calls dadima through the intercom but Nakul picks up and says that Dadima is sleeping.
Maan slams the phone onto the table and then decides to calls the family doctor to the outhouse.
Maan punches the key on his phone...The phone starts ringing but no one picks up..he calls again and this time someone picks up.
Doctor Riddhima - Hello Mr Khurana..kaise hai aap?Kya hua itni der raat mein aapne mujhe phone kiya?Sab theek to hai?
Maan - Nahi...(explains the entire situation)...kya aap jaldi se mere outhouse aa sakti hain...
Doctor Shivani - Ji zaroor tab tak aap please Geet ke bagal mein baithiye...
Maan - Ji jaldi kijiye...

Dr. Riddhima arrives in 15 mins and checks Geet's pulse rate which is slowly decreasing...Dr Shivani knows that Geet is pregnant but doesn't tell Maan yet...

Doctor - Dekhiye Mr Khurana, inki halat bohot kharab hain..inhe hospital mein admit karna hoga...
Maan - To aap kis baat ka intezaar kar rahi hain..Chaliye!!!!

Maan calls his driver to drive them to the hospital quickly....In the entire ride,Maan holds Geet in his lap and caresses her forehead...He had never been this worried about even his dadi..The doctor was smiling seeing this,that the MSK could be so compassionate...She just smiled in her front seat..
In 15 minutes,they arrived at Sanjeevni...

to be continued...tmr

Bye...Sorry for leaving so abruptly

Hi dear 🤗
Sorry for the late reply
I think the name is great after reading the sketch of your story, so this name suits 👍🏼
Well, your first attempt isn't bad, infact I feel that this is a different story line and the way it's moving is great 👏
I would love to read more, so pm me 😉 when you update

oh god...itna suspense me naa daal, nahin to main bhi maan sir ke jaise frustrated ho jaaongi!!

Originally posted by: IndigoBlues

oh god...itna suspense me naa daal, nahin to main bhi maan sir ke jaise frustrated ho jaaongi!!

nahi nahi aisa mat kaho darling
main abhi kuch der mein update karungi

sorry guys for not sending the pm as i was in a hurry but i shall send as soon as i update again

interesting!!

continue sooN!!!

add me to ur pm list!!!