One fine day... (Maan/Geet One Shot) 25 Jul

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Voyager

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Posted: 15 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: -shabnoor-
wow!! its superb
Simply awesome !!
the emotions depicted in maan's perspective were ethereal ....i'm in a trace....

and the emotions tht were woven when he held her hand and she let him...
the relaxed state...and the tiny smile tht tugged his lips....

so peaceful..so pristine..i'm in love with this writing ...with this os of yours !!😊

tc
fatima

Thank you very much Fatima. I am glad you liked this one :-)
I was aiming for a calm piece and this was the outcome. You know a day in their office without any dramatics or major hoopla. It is yet another day at work and I wanted to capture it :-)
This is actually second time I am writing in present continuous tense. My first one is called Blah Blah Woof Woof and it had similar writing in it.

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Escapist

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Posted: 15 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: -Sookie-

<font color="#990033">Thank you very much Fatima. I am glad you liked this one :-)
I was aiming for a calm piece and this was the outcome. You know a day in their office without any dramatics or major hoopla. It is yet another day at work and I wanted to capture it :-)
This is actually second time I am writing in present continuous tense. My first one is called Blah Blah Woof Woof and it had similar writing in it.
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hey have you posted "Blah Blah Woof Woof" out here??? I wud love to read it as I love reading ur stories....even thou i dnt like AR much..as i find it hard to relate to their on screen persona....but I like ur writing and currently i've started "The Bookstore" just read the intro...

*edited*
hey i found it and currently reading it !! :)
sorry for the inconvenience :(

Edited by -shabnoor- - 15 years ago

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afsha

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Stunner

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Posted: 15 years ago

#13

Nice OS

Jus loved it

Loved the way u expressed wat Maan feels for Geet n cares for n all

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Payal

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Posted: 15 years ago

#14

wow u did a fantastic job. The way u described their emotions was really awesome. U did a wonderful job. Hats off to u. Lovely.

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Sookie

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Posted: 15 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: tanya_vi
loved it...sooo dreamy & romantic👏👏👏

Thank you so much!

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Sookie

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Posted: 15 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: Armu4eva
wow.....lovely premise...👏👏👏 well written 👏👏

i luvd the whole interlinking of fingers bit..soo very much......!! Glad to see Geet comfy wit Maans touch..😳

Thank you! I am sure there is going to be roller coaster soon on the series and I wanted to remember the calmness of the series before the storm hits. I would have loved to see a scene of this sort..but alas :-)

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Sookie

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Posted: 15 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: Rolzz
This is soooo beautiful!!

Thank you so much!

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Garima

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Posted: 15 years ago

#18

To be fair, yes, I've read it... but I'm not in mood to comment.

But, for your solace, I liked it... Detailed review will follow later..

Talk to you later! ;)

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imshveta

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Posted: 15 years ago

#19

Dint I tell you you should try writing abt Geet-Maan
it was awesome. But I will comment in detail later

love
Shveta

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Sri

@RadiantTreasure

Dazzler

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Posted: 15 years ago

#20

Hey sookie*

Great one..ManEet ..seems like u r addicted to it..😆..

It is worth adddicting..loved it to bits..the small gestures of maan are something worth to watch n now to read..his angry..his smile..his confusion..u have displayed his emotions greatly..

Looking forward for more..

Good wishes..

Sri:-)