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cacoethes

@cacoethes

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#1091

finally read it😆

LOVED IT TIA 🤗

now Maan Singh Khurana is going to go and win his lady love back...i like!!!😳

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uzma

@uzmakhan

Inactive

Posted: 14 years ago

#1092

tia!!! m bk agen!!🤗

jus read part 8!!!

oh my---m ur fan darling---awesum piece once agen!!👏

loved the way u described maan kay dil ka haal---in the begiinin bit!!😳😳

poor guy, he cant really interpret his mixed feelings---buh atleast he realises kay kuch toh garbar hai!!😳 chalo m glad uskay brain ka heart kay saath kuch coordination toh hua!😉

oooooo and i sooo loved the way he cared fer her!! all night (almost😆) he waz awake and the way he got worried--aik dum hubby style--tooo gud!⭐️

loving his possessiveness buh at the same tym m soo hating the way he assumes things!!! lmao he actually thought kay geet sed ILU becuz she wanted to hit bk on him!! wah!!! how random!!😆😆😆
waisay shyt yaar---not gud---maan ka too much influence hogaya geet perh!!😲😲 evn she started assuming things!! and OMG! she sed YES to shekhar!!! *nahiiii* *faints*

bad.....VERY bad...actually very very BAD!!😆

dev kaafi nahi tha kay maan ko abh shekhar ko bhi bear kerna parhayga!!😆 acha hai---kharus kahin ka!! line perh laanay kay liyay zaroori hai!!😉😆

aur oh oh---how can i 4get---the dream sequence waz beautiful!! awwww!! picture perfect fam!!! loved their baby!!!😳 tia yay dream kab tru hoga?!😍

okies my fav dialogues now:

"Will someone tell me why have I been buried alive under a heap of blankets?" Geet shouted.

so that u can get well enouf to make maan's dream cum true!😆

"The nautanki queen has risen," he smirked.

😳😳😳 queen has risen by making the king fall on his knees on the floor---woh bhi puri raat kay liyay!! (almost😆)!!

a very well written and descriptive shot!!

love ur writin style my melted chocolate!!!! 😆

muaazzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz !!!!

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Eva Shah

@maanujaanu

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#1093

yaar plzzzz post ur next update m waitin

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Noor

@Noori93

Explorer

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#1094

Please add me to your Pm list,your an awesome writer!

I love the way you potray the characters....................

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minuu

@minuu

Trailblazer

+ 7

Posted: 14 years ago

#1095

TIAAAAAAAAAAA 🤗🤗 I'm on Part 8 .. Still reading, it's soo good so far, really nicely written FF! You're a really good writer.. Got a few more chapters left till i catch up :)

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Tesha

@Lov26

Explorer

Posted: 14 years ago

#1096

Love it.... Please add me to your Pm list.

thanks

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lallulal2010

@lallulal2010

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#1097

tia plz update soon. 🤗 🤗 🤗 🤗 😍 😍 😍

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Nabila

@Tomiko

Inactive

+ 5

Posted: 14 years ago

#1098

Sorry it took me so long Tia! But I'm finally here to critic the hell out of this FF!😉

Part 1

I love the basic concept of this FF.👏 The characters of Dev, Maan and Geet are well etched but it would be nice to see a bit more background. It doesn't necessarily have to be narrative - - little clues hidden in the actions and dialogues of the characters can fill the reader in on what the characters are like.

Having said that, some of the dialogues could have been easier and I'm sure there are some words in there that we won't find in the dictionary!😆

On a positive note - - very well written and I love the interactions between Geet and Dev, and ofcourse a grumbling Maan on the side!😆

I have another ten parts to get through and I'm sure I'll love them as much as I loved this!😃