' Humsafar'(Short story)Part VI(last prt) - Page 3

Originally posted by: golu_1677

this is amazing story bhoomi just loving it. Its just beautiful.

Hi Golu... am glad that u r likign the story so far... aww u felt its beuatifully..hope u like it...as it ends..the sme feelign hope stays on..😃

Originally posted by: SuhanaSafar

yaar, why aren't you telling the name of the guy?! I want to know!! How could Noor not know his name if her father wanted her to marry him? Anyway, nice chapter! Loved how he picked her up and carried her to her car...so sweet! I'm kinda confused about the ring. How did it end up on the statue if he didn't take it? I guess I'll find out eventually.

Just to let you know, the correct spellings are "shehzada" and "mareez", NOT "shehjada" and "mareej"...hope you don't mind my saying so.

Continue soon!

Ya his name is not yet out...ehheeh.. when her dad asked she wasnt interested to hear anythgin abt him remeber...as she saw him and knew this guy is that same man... abotu the ring..the ring her hand whcih she lost and the ring whcih that bronze made statue had were exactly same to same...adn its not like the statue had her ring..but the look was same..and her girl was lookign same like her..so she wanted to know if the person knew where the ring was...

eventually u will get to know a lot 😉 short stories wait nahi karati jyada u see... and the spellings..... u checked it correctly..😃 and though the know the correct spellign while typign errors happen few i sort it out few i havnt... 😃

Part IV

A couple of weeks Noor was thinking about why she had rejected the proposal she should have thought for some more time. She realized she had not even asked that Man's name. She daily thought about him, his eyes, and his way of talking, the touch of his which was just so gentle. She did say to her family that it was her fault but none were ready to talk to her & try n understand her. Noor was totally broken with the rude behaviour of everyone. She knew she had made an impromptus decision but that was also because no body gave her a right direction or time to wait, they were forcing decision over her & she was getting frustrated.

________________________________________________Noor went to the Dargah to offer namaz, there she saw the Man, she remembered last time she had seen him here & he had droved that car so fast & she had asked Rabba to put some sense in his head. She now felt extreme confident that there may be some good reason he isn't a spoilt brat. She waved her hand & he looking at her beautiful eyes realized she was indeed Noor & Noor asked him about the last time he was here she had seen him & the way hurriedly he drove the car almost scaring the people on the road.

Man: Noor, u must have really thought na main koi ameer baap ka bigda beta hun?

Noor: she smiled & said, with her eyelashes shying away, ya…

Man: Actually….aaa…..(Noor could see awkwardness in his speech.)

Noor: Don't want to share its fine. Humey to dost bane kuch hi din huey hain.

Man: Noor, Meri Badi behan hai. Aapaa 10 saal ki thi tab se apna maansik santulan kho bheti hai. She is mentally not stable. She gets fits in between. On the day I had dashed ur car, as my Ammi & Aapa were injured. Ammi was taking care of Aapa, suddenly Aapa got hold of the knife as Ammi was cutting fruits for her, and she mistakenly injured Ammi as well as herself. I was taking them to the hospital when my car hit ur car. Ur driver said koi bhi marey & I got angry & slapped him. After admitting them in the hospital, I came here to offer prayers to God. Soon I was informed Aapa came to consciousness but wasn't in control even by the hospital staff. Only Ammi could control her but she was unconscious so I rushed back totally worried, didn't know what I was doing.

Noor was silent. She felt how difficult it must have been & what all she had judged by the mere pictures in front.

Noor: How r they now?

Man: They r much better. The day u rejected my proposal all were in the impression that somebody must have told u about my Aapa. My dad doesn't talk about her, its only because of my Ammi , Aapa is still alive.

Noor: I didn't know about this. Can I meet them?

The man was a bit surprised but he felt nice he took her to the nursing home. She saw how he was trying to cheer his Ammi, She took blessing from her. She went to meet Aapa, Aapa looked scary as she stared at Noor. Noor was a bit hesitant but he helped her out & Aapa touched her skin, her earrings, and her dupatta & smiled. Noor seemed to feel how much love is their in his heart for his sister & mother. True love, She wished her brothers would care even little. Noor was coming back with him, the Man spoke,

The Man: Noor, Ammi was so pleased to see u, I could see Aapa also feeling nice. Thanks for taking ur time out to meet them.

Noor: Actually I should thank u for all this. I had a great time. I felt like I had seen after a long time true relations. (She smiled)

The Man was pleased by her words. Noor was thinking why I rejected his proposal. The man was thinking the same, & he looked into her eyes, Noor was also looking into his eyes, she could understand what he wanted to say. He dropped at her house & they went their ways.

After few days her Abba told her they have got another proposal. Noor told with utter confidence,

Noor: No Abba I will marry the guy whom I rejected. Plzzz Abba.

Her Abba saw for the first time his daughter to plead for anything, she would fight or argue but pleading in front of him, she never did. Her Abba had two wife's & would always feel Noor never had any respect for him just obliged to show the respect, as he gave her the life she lives. He did think to at least once make her feel that he had done something for her. Noor knew how to get her way from her Abba, she knew now Abba will at least once think to go back to that proposal.

Noor had fallen in love with this guy, Noor was talking with her Rabba, " Rabba what do u think? He is nice. I like him. He loves me or not, but I could see that in his eyes, the way he wanted to say, 'I wish u could be with me for life. But I know life isn't all about dreams, practically much difficult to live with a family like mine." Rabba he touches me & I feel so special. His fragrance makes me so happy within. His voice makes me hear only him & only him. Rabba, I forgot to ask him his name…..uffooo I am such a fool. Rabba now don't laugh at me, I will ask him the next time I meet him. (She blushed thinking about him)

Ishq yeh jo Naam hai,

Iski Naa koi zabaan hai,

Mohobat kahe ya Pyaar usko,

Jeena sach mey sikha deta hai sabko.

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Originally posted by: togepe30

👏 nice part 😛

thanks Vandu... hope u like the next couple of parts they r the most imp ones..😃

hai bohot ji kubsoorat part hai and the poems were really nice

very nice! I can't wait until she finds out his name.

Another awesome part. Loved it. So Noor still doesnt know his name , Interesting. Waiting for the next part put it up soon

Originally posted by: jyothi_cool

hai bohot ji kubsoorat part hai and the poems were really nice

haiii Jyothi ... khubsurat part kaha..haiii me feelign so nice..hehe😳..poems theek thaak na..hope u liek the next part..and it brigns smile i hope😃

Originally posted by: SuhanaSafar

very nice! I can't wait until she finds out his name.

She will in the next part....😆hapy rabia u liked thsi part...comign from u is always a pleasure to know...😃

Originally posted by: golu_1677

Another awesome part. Loved it. So Noor still doesnt know his name , Interesting. Waiting for the next part put it up soon

Hi Golu, oh hooo lagta hai u really liked this part.hope next part bhi pasand aye tumhe.. Noor & who is the other lead..we will know his name soon..😉