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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey thnx for the compliments guys.....it really encourages me to write more and more.....i have been so busy with my courses that i have not got the time to do much else....i have not actually typed the next part yet...but i will type it and post it by saturday morning for sure!!...sorri for the delay guys....
@ sheena....no dear he wanted to be a docter...infact he does have the degree to qualify, but under certain cicumstances he had to join his dad's business and then take over it after his death...its not much info but i will definitely write more about this after!!
@ Robin- don't worry ... dosti hi to pyaar ki shuruvaat hai ab to pyaar ki baatein bohut hi jaldi hone waali hain!!

Edited by <-*Sandhya*-> - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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lol..i just read ur whole FF...rly good!!

continuue plz
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Character reminders!
Shubh- Sapna's Sapna….whos sapna is ridzzz
Sapna- Ridz best friend
Atul- Armaan's best friend.


The next week after the 2 shook hands in the hospital:

R-Sapna ab chalo bhi yaar, kitni der lagaogi? Hum camp ja rahe hain, tere dulha pasand katne ke liye nahin. Uske liye tayaar hone ke liye bhi itni der nahi lagti.

Sapna- Ridz wahaan mera Shubhankar hoga…acha to lagna hi padega na!?!

R- Lekin tayaar hone me hi itni der lagaogi to hum train miss kardeinge...aur train miss karenge to tum Shubhu se vaise bhi nahi mil paaogi !

S- Acha baba lo main tayaar hogayi….khush? Ab next stop Railway station!

Meanwhile somewhere else in Mumbai:

Atul- Armaan yaar chal naa….bohut maza ayeega camp mein. Aur camp chalega to ache ache paudhon se milega, thoda fresh air bhi milega, aur sale flirt, bohut si pyaari pyaari ladkiyan bhi hongi wahaan pe!

A- Shut Up Atul!!

Atul- Sorry dude…kehna nahi chahiye tha…but common yaar, tere life mein pahaad se bhi zyaada problems hain. Mujhe lagta tha who moti landlord problematic thi…lekin tere problems se compare karun to who eent hai eent! To sab kuch bhula kar chalte hain na yaar…the great outdoors! Bohut sare animals honge paudhe honge, campfire….

A- Agar main aane ki liye tayaar hojaayun to will you shut up!!!

Atul- Bilkul yaar…kuch bhi, dost ke liye to jaan bhi haazir hai…bilkul sholay….

A- Atul….

Atul- sorry shutting up!

A- main jake pack kare aata hoon

Atul- Oh uski koi zaroorat nahin ….tumhare samaan pack hokar tumhare kamrey main baitha hua hai!

Armaan gives him a stern look and walk off to change over!

At the station amidst a major rush at the platform-

R- sapna sabh log kahaan hain…kahin who gaadi main to nahi baithgaye hume bhool ke…chalo chaltein hai dekhne!

S- Shubhu kahaan hai? Nazar nahi aaraha…main toh ushi ke liye aayi
R- Oh shut up Sapna…yahi kahin hoga! Mil jagyeega…lekin doosre sab khan gaaiyab hogaye…tickets to unhi ke paas hain!
Sapna eik kaam karo tum jaake check karo aur mein kuch khaane le aati hoon….bohut bhook lagi hui hai!

S- Haan jaati hoon….mere liye bhi chocolate haan!

R- Haan…bus apne shubhu ko dhoondne me mat lah jaana….tickets nahi mile….to phir mil hi nahi paaogi!

S- Haan Haan pata hai meri maa.

Ridz walks off to the snack shop.

Meanwhile

A- oh god kitni bheed hai yahaan pe! Panchgini jaana tha to hum drive karlete is mein kyun?

At- Train mein doston ke saath camp jaane ki baat hi alag hoti hai!

The train siren sounds signallin it is about to leave. Armaan is still complaining about the pollution and all when the train begins to leave. Armaan and Atul Manage to get on the train right on time…but Ridz is not as successful.

R- Arreeeee train babu train rokiye!!! Gosh Stop the train....koi kuch karoo !!!!!

She is running after the train madly yelling at someone to stop it. Armaan seems to recognize the voice and quickly looks out of the box door and sees ridz running frantically. He smile a bit and holds out his hand.
Riddhima sees him too but doesn't really recognize him…as everything seems to be jumping up and down bcoz she is running. She runs as fast as she can and grabs hold of his hand. He gently pulls he onto the car. As she gets on she falls on him. Then suddenly realizes and looks up, shocked to see Armaan!

R- Arre tum? Tum idhar kya kar rahe ho? Aur who bhi train mein? Kahin tum bhi camp nahi jaareho na?

A- To tum bhi camp jaa rahi ho. Aur mein train mein is liye hoon kyunki train mein doston ke saath camp jaane ki baat hi alag hoti hai!

At- Arre sale chor, yeh to meri line thi!

They all break out laughing.

R- Vaise im Riddhima
At- Im atul…nice to meet you!

R- Acha mujhe ab chalna chahiye…mere dost yahi kahin pe honge, meri ticket unhi ke paas hai. Mai tumlogon ko camp mein milti hoon.

Riddhima- eventually finds her friends…and meets someone new too…Anjali Singhania—Armaans ex!

S- Hey Ridz….Isse milo….yeh hai anjali singhania

R- OMG Anjali as in Armaan Mallik ki ex-gf?

A- Nice to meet you too!

R- Who im sorry, bas baat yeh hai ke, mai armaan ko bhi jaanti hoon…by the way mein/

A- Tum usse jaanti ho yeh isme mera koi lena dena nahi hai…just please don't talk about him in front of me again!

R- Talk about who?

A- thank you.

R- Heyy shubhankar!! How are you.

Sh- theek thaak…tumse to koi email ya phone bhi nahi milta….milne ke baat door!

R- Kya karoon yaar itna kaam rehta hai.

Sapna is drooling over him at the meantime.

R- Chalo guys lets play antakshari.

All throughout the game Sapna is staring and dedicating love songs to shubhankar and Shubh is doing the same to ridzz!!


They finally reach camp. Riddhima is walking and , but the station is quite crowded, and she accidentally trips over something and falls. But armaan reaches there to catch her. There is short eye-locking session and the he brings riddhima back up. Shubhankar sees all this and get really jealous.

Note- Shubhankar also sees the whole train DDLJ scene out of the window and he also sees the milkshake dropping scene in the very beginning…ridz however is unaware of this. Shubhankar is quite and egomaniac and is madly in love with ridz….he doesn't like ne1 in the way!
Back to the camp….everyone is having a gud time, and anji and ridz seem to bond really well.Anjali does not know armaan is in the camp- vice versa But anjali suddenly finds her diamond ring and cellphone, with a lot of personal info missing! She makes a big issue about it and makes everyone search frantically.

A- Oh goddddd mera saara info us cell mein that…aur woh ring meri dadi kit hi…ab main kyaa karrongi.

R- Don't worry idhar hi kahin hoga!

An- Plz guys apne purses check karo…kahin to hoga!!

R- Humare paas kaie hoga anji…hum kyun tumhaari cheez churaaenge?

Sapna and the rest chk their purse but nothing. Anjali looks thru all the purses out of frenzy too. She finally reaches Ridz…she doesn't want her to go through it but she still does. And surprisingly the diamond ring and cellphone are in there!

R- yeehh yeeh mere paas kaise aaya! Oh godd Anji mera yakeen karo maine nahi churaya.

An- haan haan tumne nahi churaya. Mujhe pata tha ke tum mere paise ke peeche ho you bloody woman…Himmat kaise hoti hai tumhaari??? Ishiliye to tum itni reluctant thi purse bataane na?

R- tum kya bkwaas kar rahi ho….mai kyun churaaongi?

An- tum jaisi ladkiyon ki aisi hi mentality hai. Tumhaari ma aur baap the ya nahin! Sikhayaa ya nahii tumhe ke chori nahi karte hain? Yaah phir who be kamine choor the.

R- ANJALI mere maa baap par mat jaana…tumhari himmat kaise hui?

A- Himmat tumhari kase hui...meri cheez churane ki ? You little B****
Anjali is so Mad she slaps ridz so hard she falls on the floor.
Riddhima get up really really mad.

R- Mujhe tumne kya bulaaya??/ Main ab tumhe choddoongi nahi…ILL KILL YOU!!!

Both sides people are pulling them apart.

Preview- Riddhima and other friends are playing cards in the lounge when they hear sapna's scream from somewhere up…ridz goes to see!

Sorry for the delay again guys…hope you liked it. Leave all comments…good and bad are all welcome!! I need it to improve and write more. I have soo much work…writing is one of the ways I relax so I love writng for all of you guys…knowing my work is being appreaciated really encourages me!!
luv sandzzz 😃


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Posted: 17 years ago
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wow Sandhya! that was reallly good! i especialy liked the ddlj scene, very cute! hmmm this anjie is such a b****! i wonder who put the things in ridz purse?!?! and this shubankar 😡 i have a feeling he will stir up some trouble! well i loved this upate, please continue soon!
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey!tht waz a nyc part plzz cont.soon n waitin fr loads of AR scenes 😉
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey DDLJ scene was nicely portrayed..i cud imagine d scene...update soon....
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey sandhya......
really nice ff...loved d ddlj scene!! 😉
rid nd ar remind me of jab v met totally....

neways gr8 work 👏 👏 👏
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Hi Sandhyya.

that was anice part but w8in 2 read sum real AR scenes.

wel post ur next update asap.

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Posted: 17 years ago
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First id like to thank u all for your wonderfl comments 😃 ...they were realy nice<3


Recap- Both Armaan and Riddhima are going to the same camp in panchgini. Ridz is about to miss the train, when armaan gives her hand and pulls her p. Shubhankar..ridz's lover sees all this and is not pleased. Ridz meets Armaan's ex-gf, Anjali and they both become friends. At camp Anjali finds that her cell and diamond ring are missing from her purse. She asks everyone to look in their bags. The stuff is found in ridz's bag. They both get into a fight where anji insults ridz's parents, calls her names and slaps her. The part ends with ridz yelling I"LL KILL YOU!

Important info- before the fiasco of the stolen stuff, Riddhima and anji decide to share a room.

About the lounge- although it is a camp and there are tents….there is a small structure with a few inbuilt rooms one for guys and one for girls. Just to relax during the day, they would come here and play something in the lounge. The rooms were for keeping belongings and changing clothes.


Sapna and other friends pull Riddhima away from Anjali and take her to the lounge.

R- sapna tujhe pata hai na…maine aisa nahi kiya! Mai aisa kyun karoongi ?

S- Pata hai yaar...tu aisa kabhi nahi kar sakti ! Tujhe kyun chahiye uska cellphone aur ring ? Uska dimaagh thikane nahi hai, to chod ushe.

Friends- Haan yaar, yeh bekaar ki batein chodh, chal kuch khelte hain.

R- Haan aise logon ko marke jahannam mein jaana chahiye. Usne meri aur mere parents ko insult kiya. Ab mai ushe chodhne nahi waali. Lekin hum apna mood kharab nahui karte hain…kya khelein?

S- waise yeh anjali kameeni hai kahaan?

Friend- Woh I think kuch 5 10 mins pehle room mein chalegayee

Ridz and friends are playing a game when ridz looks in her purse and finds her cell missing.

R- Darn, main apna cellphone kahin chodh aayee. Tum sabh continue karo main jaake dhoondti hoon.

Ridz leaves to look for a cell upstairs in her room. When she is upstairs, there is a nail sticking out from the side ridz cuts herself with it. She wipes the blood of on her right hand on her left sleeve. She also notices someone else had been a victim of the nail since sum1 else's dry blood was on it. She ignored it and leaves to find her cell. She decide to go into the room she sees some blood on the knob and is shocked….but she thinks that anjie may hv also gotten hurt with the same nail so she entered, took her cell and left.


Around 10 minutes before this…

Atul- oye Armaan tujhe pata hai teri ex-gf bhi yahaan hai…aur usne riddhima ko thappad bhi maara…abhi abhi nakul ne bataaya, who to uski roommate thi lekin pata nahi achaanak kya hua!

Armaa gets angry…

A: Anjali ho yaah koi bhi mujhe farak kya padta. Lekin uski himmat kaisi hui riddhima par haat uthane ki? M hota to usse jaan se maardeta, lekin chhodd na yaar...tu mujhe camp depress hone ke liye laaya ya phir mood behter karne ?

Armaan and friends decide to play a game, shubhankar throws something hard at armaan by accident and he hurts his hand badly.

Armaan- Dammit yaar, bohut lagi hai, kissi ke paas kuch first aid hai kya?

Atul- Yahaan pe to nahi hai…aur boys room to kaafi door hai.

Armaan- lekin girls room to paas mein hi hai…kyun naa mai whaan poochon. Aur waise bhi ridz doctor hi to hai uske paas ilaaj hoga.

After Armaan leaves:

Shubhankar- yaar mujhe washroom jaana hai…main kuch der main aata hoon!
He goes toward the girls room too, but from the back.


Armaan walks toward the girls dorm…he sees that none of the girls are in the dorm yet, so he checks upstairs and looks for ridz number. He's climbing the stairs and also hurts himself with a nail jabbing out.

A- Shit…yeh kyaa ho raha hai…mujhe pata tha camp acha idea nahi tha lekin yeh atul bhi naa!!!

He finds rids door and knocks….some girl opens it

A- hi riddhima hai kya?

Girl- Nahin, yahaan koi riddima nahi rehti

A- oh sorry

Girl- ek minute lekin iss bahaane agar tum andar aaoge to haan who yaiin hai…come in hottie.

Armaan just walks away, and goes round asking for ridz's room.. He finally finds it and knocks…though no onr opnes…he tries opening the door know with his bloody hand…but nothing….so he leaves!

Back to Riddhima…

R- heyy guys im back….mujhe mera cell bhi mill gayaa!!!

S- great ab chal continue karte hain. Oh wait riddhima…time kya zara check karna?

R- Hmm 3:30

S- shubhu ne kaha who muhje call karega lekin kiya hi nahi?? Ridz maine uska number ghumaaduya ghar par itna lekar ghoomti thi…maa ne phaad diya. Zara tere paas hai.

R- Haan meri diary mein hai…lekin who upaar hai.

S- theek hai main le aati hoon.

A few minutes later while the rest are playing they here a scream.

R- yeh to sapna thi….chillaya kyun? Shaayad makdi dekhliya isliye…main jaake check karti hoon.

Riddhima walk up and into her room and asks her whats wrong. A visibly terrifiet sapna tremblingly points at the closet. Ridz goes to see what it is and…..

Anjali's dead body falls into her arms!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You guys I know I do not have many enticing AR scenes yet…but I promise you there will be soon. I just want to sorta make their meeting more realistic…since armaan is still sad about anji and his dad, and AR are not close yet…I thot I shud make their bond storng…and then itll get romantic….i know todays part was a bit boring but it wil get interesting after a while. I also wanted to try something a little hatke from complete mushy mushy…if you don't like it…say soo and I will change the track a bit.

Again Thnk u soo much for your earlier comments…they were really encouraging❤️ =]…hope im living up to ur expectations….and plz leave comments…god or bad!!!

Luv<3
Sandzz


Edited by <-*Sandhya*-> - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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DEAD BODY????????? is she dead???????? r u serious?????
WAt a mystery yar......continue soon.....

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