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aww Mala, u r soo right yar. we are just crazy about DK. but yar ever since this ML track in the show, i had wished the show had taken this turn. things would have been soo wonderful, so spicy, and sooo romantic.

But ahh wishes are all we have. and the saddest part, they will never come true, for we shall never have Apu and sur as our DK ever again. 😭

sorry kashish, once again I am here...I got one song in my mind for this part, so I wanted to share it with you,

kaajjal's memory loss troubling our devu lot, though, this is hard for him to tolerate, singing this song for her

Kitne bhi tu kar le sitam, has haske sahenge hum Yeh pyaar na hoga kam sanam teri kasamHo, sanam teri kasam, sanam teri kasam1. Jitna tadpaayegi mujhko, utna hi tadpegi tu bhiJo aaj hai aarzoo meri voh kal teri aarzoo hogiYeh jhooth nahin sach hai sanam, sanam teri kasamHo, sanam teri kasam, sanam teri kasam2. Nafrat se dekhna pehle andaaz pyaar ka hai yehKuch hai aankhon ka rishta, gussa ikraar ka hai yehBada pyaara hai tera zulam, sanam teri kasamHo, sanam teri kasam, sanam teri kasamKitne bhi tu kar le sitam, has haske sahenge hum Yeh pyaar na hoga kam sanam teri kasamkashish, I am 100% sure, you just love this song, see I can see dev singing this song, in the screen of my eyes,don't you think every single word in this song matches so perfectly for this part. kashish you are making me crazier than anything, first you made me a writer, aur abb kya kya banaaogi tum mujhe

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Sigh another great update Kashish... the malady and confusions still prevail. But I sniff something about to cajole and jolt her out of her memory loss..... Hmmm definitely something...

Waiting for the next update eagerly...

my earlier reply and I reply again...quoting myself... Now I sniff and feel the storm building...brewing...hmmm definitely something is abvout to happen... and end of ML? Interesting Kashish and i not only liked it but loved it. 😊



o auts, indeed flashbacks are going to happen, but i think i will take this track a little longer. i am loving it and enjoy writing it. what say ?😊
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aww Mala, u r soo right yar. we are just crazy about DK. but yar ever since this ML track in the show, i had wished the show had taken this turn. things would have been soo wonderful, so spicy, and sooo romantic.

But ahh wishes are all we have. and the saddest part, they will never come true, for we shall never have Apu and sur as our DK ever again. 😭

sorry kashish, once again I am here...I got one song in my mind for this part, so I wanted to share it with you,

kaajjal's memory loss troubling our devu lot, though, this is hard for him to tolerate, singing this song for her

Kitne bhi tu kar le sitam, has haske sahenge hum Yeh pyaar na hoga kam sanam teri kasamHo, sanam teri kasam, sanam teri kasam1. Jitna tadpaayegi mujhko, utna hi tadpegi tu bhiJo aaj hai aarzoo meri voh kal teri aarzoo hogiYeh jhooth nahin sach hai sanam, sanam teri kasamHo, sanam teri kasam, sanam teri kasam2. Nafrat se dekhna pehle andaaz pyaar ka hai yehKuch hai aankhon ka rishta, gussa ikraar ka hai yehBada pyaara hai tera zulam, sanam teri kasamHo, sanam teri kasam, sanam teri kasamKitne bhi tu kar le sitam, has haske sahenge hum Yeh pyaar na hoga kam sanam teri kasamkashish, I am 100% sure, you just love this song, see I can see dev singing this song, in the screen of my eyes,don't you think every single word in this song matches so perfectly for this part. kashish you are making me crazier than anything, first you made me a writer, aur abb kya kya banaaogi tum mujhe

mala😛



aha Mala yeh DK ki mohabbat ka jadoo hai jis nay humhain deewana bana rakha hai.

but u got it soo right honey, i love this song and the wording are soo apt for the situation. indeed, jitna dev tadpay ga utna hi kaajjal bhitadpay gi. ahh thats love and its beautiful. haina.

thanks for this beautiful song. i couldnt have thought of any other.
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hello, kashishji kya kardiya apne, i just wanted to see all these things happening in the show also. but nevermind, you are really a gem you have fulfilled all my wishes, because i can imagine every scene in my mind. But kashish i must say you are a wonderfull writer, after reading your FF's i can hardly breathe. do continue fast yaar and dekhna yeh raat kahee aise hi na chali jaye i am sure there will be lot of romance.

thanks once again for giving such beautifull FF's.

Belated happy birthday.

Do continue fast.


awww dorine honey it is a pleasure reading from you. waisay to be frank i at times stop breathign while writing these pieces. ufff i cant tell you the feeling i go through ... but in one word - BEAUTIFUL. 😊

Iam so glad u enjoyed it. hahahahha so u want this night to keep going ... hehehhehehe, romance makes us all go crazy .... ahhh i wish this night never ends 😉
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😳 haaaaaaaaaaaa the love u showed us today was so much to take in one part.

thank you so much Kushish..............awesome work👏

iam glad Kajjal couldn't control her feelings😳 and iam more gald that Dev left at the middle of the Kiss [the passiont Kiss ever] cause now atleast Kajjal will know that she only belongs to Dev and only Dev, and she'll also will know how much she had heart him😡.

lovely part plz countion soon

PS: by reading yours and Mala's FF i still think Apu and Sur r with us

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Ahh, Kashish, my dear Romance queen 😉 You are once again back to making me romantic. You will turn me into a romantic, kya? 😆


Really yaar, that was an awesome episode and I thoroughly loved it. Kaajjal ki berukhi...Dev ki baaton ki Kashish...loved them...and just like Dev enticed her and made her want for more...you have enticed me with this beautiful episode and now I want more. 😛

One more thing dear, your FF has the Kashish in it...and your name really suits you. Kashish means..'intensity' right? I feel that is the meaning of Kashish..and if I am wrong correct me.😆

I feel that you are a person with a lot of passion and intensity within you and that is really beautiful and you bring it out in your writings too. Actually I feel that there is the intensity and the passion in your FFs too and that is one thing I love a lot. I loved the passion that was building up within Dev and the way he made Kaajjal lose herself to his touch was totally mind-blowing. I loved this part and am eagerly awaiting for the next part..continue soon. 😳

Love,
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...K...I feel I've been left in the same situation as Kaajjal...

Short of breath, heart pounding, and eagerly waiting in anticipation...

Beautiful continuation dear...I truly do love this FF b/c you are giving us the track we all would have loved to see - over the one we actually got...

Gosh, when Kaajjal implied that Dev was trying to take advantage of the situation...I felt that arrow from her words pierce my own heart as it was piercing his! How beautifully you narrated that part my dear...Dev's reaction, Kaajjal's realization that this time maybe she'd gone too far...it was all perfect. Her mind allowed her to throw the dart, but her heart ached immediately afterwords...uff, it was outstanding! I would have Loved to see that scene on screen! ApuSur would have done full justice to it!

You're incredible my dear! Thank you SO MUCH for this! As usual, I'll be eagerly awaiting the next installment! 😳

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Love,
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...K...I feel I've been left in the same situation as Kaajjal...

Short of breath, heart pounding, and eagerly waiting in anticipation...

Beautiful continuation dear...I truly do love this FF b/c you are giving us the track we all would have loved to see - over the one we actually got...

Gosh, when Kaajjal implied that Dev was trying to take advantage of the situation...I felt that arrow from her words pierce my own heart as it was piercing his! How beautifully you narrated that part my dear...Dev's reaction, Kaajjal's realization that this time maybe she'd gone too far...it was all perfect. Her mind allowed her to throw the dart, but her heart ached immediately afterwords...uff, it was outstanding! I would have Loved to see that scene on screen! ApuSur would have done full justice to it!

You're incredible my dear! Thank you SO MUCH for this! As usual, I'll be eagerly awaiting the next installment! 😳

👏

Love,
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Payal my dear, how i long to see this on screen as well with Apu and Sur. It would have been brilliant. as i said, ever since the ML in the show, i longed to see this track, i wish the creatives were a little more creative 😕

I am sooo glad honey u liked this part, to be frank i love writing this track as well. it always gives me goosebumps, when i write the amazing chemistry these two share. 👏
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O thanks Chandani ... i will surely continue soon

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Part 10

She gives into the sensation and anticipating the touch of his lips on hers she closes her eyes, permitting him to do whatever he wants. He feels her submission and shifts his gaze back to her lips. Their innocence was very inviting. He craved to touch them, to feel their warmth and sensation, but …. With a jerk, he stands up, leaving a restless and unsatisfied Kaajjal. She opens her eyes instantly, only to find him walking away from her. Her eyes traced his footsteps but he had already left the shed, gone into the darkness of the night.

"Dev," his name on her lips was a shivering whisper, for she was still trying to figure what had captured her senses so wildly, that she had forgotten everything in his arms.

She sat there and wondered, almost scolding herself why she gave into the moment to let him leave her like this. Although she knew why he did this; He had made his point very clear that he did not need to force anything on her, and that he knew how to control his emotions. However, she had known this very clearly that it was not him she was afraid of, but her own self – for she knew she was not able to trust herself when she was with him ….. Why??? This question still needed a clear answer.

Scene change

"aadha ghanta ho gaya hai, bahar thand bhi bohat hai, kahan chalay gayay hain yeh." Kaajjal asks herself when Dev does not return. It was getting darker and colder with every passing minute and she was losing her patience trying to wait for him.

"In kay bhi sar pay aur kandhay pay chot lagi hue hai, kahin kuch ho na gaya ho." This thought sends waves of anxiety down her body and she tries to lift herself up. God knows from where she got the energy to drag her hurt knees and stand up ….. with some difficulty she tries to walk and steps outside the hut to look for him, unaware why she was soooo restless for him and why she cared for him soo much. However, how would she had known that caring for Dev was a part of her nature.

She steps out only to find grave darkness which was preventing clear vision of anything. All she could hear was the noise of a small river crossing by … the sound of the water in this darkness and silence seemed beautiful. She once again tries to look around but in vain and then reluctantly calls his name,

"Mr. Singh …." No answer, "Mr. Singh ….." she tries again. And then all of a sudden she hears a cat meowing nearby and her heart stops. She turns around instantly only to bang into Dev.

"ouch …." She loses her balance and he instantly grabs her from around her waist.

"Watch out Ms. Behl …." This time he was also hell-bent on showing his attitude. He had had enough of her tantrums. He stands her straight and quickly moves away, banishing any contact and steps back. She looks at him at Ms. Behl and her heart skips a beat. How strange and distant Ms. Behl sounded. And realization struck immediately that when she had been calling him Mr. Singh and he had been begging her to call her Dev, it must have hurt him the same way. But why was it hurting? why did she care? She should have been glad that he was trying to be formal. However her heart got restless.

"What are you doing out here?" he asks her while moving towards the hut, bringing her back from her haywire thoughts.

"wo … wo main …." Her lips tremble, reluctant to tell him she was looking for him.

"anyways, I don't care … you can do as you please." He cuts her words, showing her his attitude (And boy you know DPS's attitude … ahhhhh a killer). Kaajjal looks at him with a surprised look, feeling the pain his indifferent behavior was giving her. He settles down on the stack in front of the fire and opens a small bag, taking out some bags of potato chips and water bottles from it.

"yeh …" Kaajjal looks at him.

"hmmm, my friend Anupum always keep something to eat in the car … I went back to get it. You must be hungry …." He says without looking at her and slides a bag of potato chips and water bottle towards her …

"no I am not hungry …thank you" she says with an ada, thinking he would ask her again. He could clearly see she was lying and he wished he could get up and feed her with his own hands …. He wished he could show her how much he cared for her, but ….. he didn't want a fight again so he chose to ignore.

"fine…" he says softly and starts eating his chips. She looks at him with a childish face, 'aik larki bethi hai aur khud khayay ja rahay hain …..' she talks to herself like a baby …. But he ignores her completely.

Scene Change

"suniyay …" she calls him while he was gulping the water from his bottle. He looks at her without a word. I have to call my papa …. he must be very worried. Without a word, he takes his cell phone and pushes it towards her. She could see he was maintaining his distance and this bothered her intensely. "O God Kaajjal, what is wrong with you. Its good na that he is away from you … but then why am I feeling restless. why am I feeling alone and deserted .. why?' she tries to jerk her thoughts out of her head and calls her papa.

"papa … main Kaajjal …"

"Kaajjal kahan ho tum beta …. We are soo worried for you …" Satya voice revealed his anxiousness.

"papa wo, aaj subha I called you to tell you I was going to meet Mr. Singh. The person who is making that hotel in Missouri." Kaajjal starts,

"haan haan yaad hai beta," Satya cuts her words in between …

" who mujhay wapsi pay lift day rahay thay tu wo …. Chota sa accident ho gaya." Kaajjal says slowly, for she knew this would create havocs to Satya's senses.

"kya … what …" Satya almost gets a heart attack.

"papa papa please calm down …. Papa ….." Kaajjal tries to cool him. Kaajjal tells him all that happened and told about Mr. Singh's talk with his friend and that the rescue team will come tomorrow morning. She tells him about the darkness and all and tries to convince him that he must not come here to find her, for Satya insisted he would come now.

"papa, Mr. Singh meray saath hain, and he is taking good care of me." Kaajjal's eyes automatically lift towards Dev at this and find him looking at her as well. For a moment, she forgets what she was saying, but then she composed herself again, "please aap fiqr na karain, and don't think of coming here at this hour. Its very dark." She convinces Satya and knowing that she was with Mr. Singh and was safe, calmed him a little.

"papa, I am absolutely fine, and tomorrow morning as soon as I am out of here, I will come home. Ok …. Don't worry …." Kaajjal smiles. Finally Satya was convinced and she breathes a sigh of relief. All through this conversation, she had referred to Dev as Mr. Singh and Satya had no clue she was with Dev, else God knows what had happened.

Scene Change

"Thank you" Kaajjal slides his phone back to him. He nods slightly without looking at her. Her eyes lingered on him for a few more seconds and shifted from his face to his shoulder and she shivered at what she saw. His olive green shirt was soaking in blood from his left shoulder.

"Dev …." She gets up with his name on her lips and reaches him instantly. He looks at her with surprise when she bends forward and touches his shoulder.

"ouch …." He sighs with pain; the particles of the glass that had broken when the car had collided were still in his shoulders and hurt really bad at her touch.

"you have bled like crazy, please let me see." She begs him to let her see the wound but he pulls away from her.

"There is no need, I can take care of myself." He says harshly. She knew he would not let her close, for what she had been doing with him, he had had enough of her nonsense. But she was not letting it go.

"Dev please. Let me see….." his name on her lips and that too possessively leaves him speechless. How he had waited to hear his name from her like this. he stops resisting and she touches his shoulder, trying to see the wound but in vain.

"its lot of blood, I can't see anything." she says while shifting her gaze from the shoulder to his eyes, "you have to remove your shirt." She says and he holds his breath.

"remove my shirt … no thanks, I don't want to." Dev says with an attitude … still angry at how Kaajjal had been behaving with him all along.

"Dev please, this is not a joke. We have to take care of it …. Now." She moves forward again, closing the distance and this time her fingers touched his button. He looks at her and then her fingers, which were gently moving on the button of his shirt to open it.

"kya kar rahi ho." He asks reluctantly, but she doesn't answer and opens the top two buttons of the shirt.

"Ms. Behl please, I said its ok …." He tries to stop it one more time,

"no Mr. Singh, it is not ok …." She says opening the third button. But, she couldn't go any further … her lips trembled, her breathing get heavy and her senses lose all control … how could she open the rest of the buttons, how could she pulls his shirt from beneath his trouser, how could she slide his shirt down to reveal his shoulder. Dev feels her reluctance and his eyes sets on her confused face. She looked sooo beautiful, so lovely at that moment that he wished he had the right to hold her and make her feel the depth of his love, but ……

"aa … aap please apni shirt utarain tu main zakhm dekhoon." She says in a broken trail of words and he, as if mesmerized by her nearness, pulls his shirt from beneath the trouser and opens the rest of the buttons. However, he does not slide the shirt down from his shoulder; waiting for her to do it. She looks at him, as if saying, I am waiting, but he bends his eyes, ignoring her pleas. Reluctantly she moves her hand and slides the shirt gently from his left shoulder. The shirt was stuck to his wound and she had to pull it a little harder to move it. This ignited the wound and Dev sighed heavily.

"O God, I am sorry …. " she looks at him instantly with eyes full of concern.

"Its ok …" his voice comes as a husky whisper dripping honey into her senses. She gently moves forward to have a closer look at the wound. The light from the burning flames fell on his skin turning it into honey gold complexion. She gets closer to his shoulder and while doing so her whole body shifts closer to him. Her hairlocks teasingly touched her cheeks and disturbing her by constantly blocking her view. She puched her head back constantly to clear the vision but the locks kept falling. Dev saw her struggle and very gently moves her hand, taking the hair locks in his fingers and pulling them behind her ears. The moment his fingers touched her cheeks and forehead she looks up towards him. Their eyes meet, passion flares and her whole world spins around her. He holds his breath but never leaves her eyes. She wished she could keep looking at him like this, for this was like a dream and he seemed like her raj kumar to her. However the wound needed to be taken care of and she shifts her gaze back to his shoulder. She picks the water bottle he had brought for her and tears a corner of her dupatta for cleaning. He looks at her as she tears her dupatta and tries to stop her,

"Kaajjal .. tumhara dupatta kharab ho jayay ga."

"aap say zyada zaroori nahi hai yah …." Unintentionally words slip her tongue and by the time she realized what she had said it was too late. She looks at him and instantly bends her eyes, trying to avoid those unsaid questions in those passion-filled eyes.

To be continued soon …

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That was simply fabulous Kashish!!! 👏

Poor Dev, I could feel his pain when Kaajjal was calling him Mr. Singh. 😭 I could just picture him having his DPS style, trying to keep his distance from her, and yet hurting inside all the time. And you brought out Kaajjal's confusion just brilliantly. See, she can't ignore her heart, and her heart is trying to show her that she is Dev's. 😳 And that last scene...omg Kashish I was holding my breath along with Dev. 😳 I could picture it really clearly, so clearly I could imagine Kaajjal's fingers begin to trmeble over those buttons and then the way they gazed at one another. 😳 Wow it was mindblowing! 👏

Thank you Kashish for another spellbinding piece. Do continue soon. 😊

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🤗 🤗 kashu, you did it again... I don't know what to say, I am totally speechless, I didn't felt even for a second that I am reading your FF, for me it was like I am infront of TV watching my dev and kaajjal, and you described each and every bit so beautifully, 👏 👏 , How do you do this kashu??
actually I was dying for this dk's tabela, and lucky kaajjal falling in love again with her DPS, god DPS, uske gusse mein ek din mein jaroor pagal hojaungi, He must be the best creature on the earth, and dps in my kashu's words, I can't tell what is my haalat right now, kabhi kaajjal showing anger at him, and kabhi dev showing his attitude, kaajjal attending his wound, Dev setting his hair, and his shirt scene, kashu what is that you planned for us?? do you think we can survive after reading this... this is not fair hun, likhthe waqt jara hamare baare me socha karo yaar, eise naa maaro hume bina hi talwaar ke..

This is why I love to be here in this forum, kyun ki here we have our kashish and her dk...

you know which song I was remembering..., Though dev was anger at kaajjal's behaviour, but his soul was feeling these words for her...

"Tumne mujhko hasna sikhaaya ho
rone kahoge ro lenge ab
aansoo ka hamaare gham na karo
woh behte hai to behne do
mujhe tumse mohabbat ho gayi hai
mujhe palko ki chaav mein rehne do

ehsaan tera hoga mujh par

chaahe banaa do chaahe mitaa do hoo aaaa
mar bhi gaye to denge duvaayen
udd udd ke kahegi khaak sanam
yeh dard-e-mohabbat sehne do
mujhe tumse mohabbat ho gayi
hai
mujhe palko ki chaav mein rehne do


ehsaan tera hoga mujh par
dil chahta hai woh kehne do
mujhe tumse mohabbat ho gayi hai
mujhe palko ki chaav mein rehne do
ehsaan tera hoga mujh par

Actually today I was watching this movie, and I didn't know that junglee kaa naam bhi Shekhar thaa,, 😳


love you love you loveyou kashish..... see I don't think I can ever be satisfied while appreciating you,, jitnaa kahu utnaa kam lagtha hein...
YOU ARE A STAR DEAR... 👏

mala



Edited by hmala on December 19 2007 at 6:46am

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