A (not so) simple (cliched) love story! RN fic (Chapter2 updated)

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hello! I'm a big fan of Rajveer- Naina Jodi. I used to read fan fictions when the show was on air but had stopped it a long time ago. I recently saw that RN stories are still going strong here in IF. So here I am... to give it a try. But a word of caution!! This is my first attempt at writing so please forgive any errors that may occur.

A (not so) simple (cliched) love story!

Characters

Naina Singh Ahluwalia, a fresher in college .Daughter of Sanjay Singh Ahluwalia, top businessman and Priya Ahluwalia, School Head Mistress

Navin Singh Ahluwalia, her brother, Final Year student.

Prof. Aashish Chandok, Principal of College

Neetika Chandok, Final Year student and Navin's g.f. Her mom died in an accident when she was 5. She is the only weakness of Prof. Chandok.

Rajveer Singh Shekhawat, a mysterious new entry to College

Pooja Ghai, fresher and Naina's best friend

Aalekh Sharma, fresher

Ali Baig, fresher

Yadhuvansh Sahni a.k.a Yudi, fresher

Amardeep Huda, fresher

Suhaan , Final Year student and Navin's best friend and confidant

Suriji - He runs the canteen in college

The rest of the characters will be introduced in relevant updates.

Location: Bangalore

PREVIEW

Pooja had a really bad feeling about this. So she calls up Naveen. "Navin bhaiyya, Pooja here..."

Anger clouds Navin's face. "Main abhi aa raha hoon".

He shouts "Abhe saalon , jaldi kar. We have to rush to college." And he runs out to his bike. Suhaaan who knows Navin better than anyone else recognizes the reason for the sudden change in his behavior. "NAINA"


P.S: I have formed a rough outline of the story but haven't written it. If anyone is interested in this story, please let me know and I'll start. I'll be away for almost a month and access to the net will be an issue so by around June first week I'll check this page and if there is enough interest, I'll start 😊

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Please do continue..It's a very fresh concept
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hello guys! I got some unexpected free time and internet access. So here is the first installment. Hopefully you will like it. Please give me frank comments so that I can improve :) Next update by around June first week!

Chapter 1

Naina woke up with a smile on her face. It was the first day of college and she was eagerly looking forward to this day for a long time now! Her phone alerted her of a text message.

I'm sure you are up by now. Don't be late. We shouldn't make cute guys wait ;)

Naina laughed at her best friend's message. Typical Pooja! On the lookout for her Mr. perfect as usual. But she silently agreed that Pooja was right and shot up from her bed to start her perfect day!

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"Nainaa... breakfast is on the table. Do finish it before you go" Priya had a stern look as she looked at Naina.

"Okay Mamma.. Pappa kidhar hai? ".

"He went to his other wife! I wonder why he comes here at all", sighed her mom. Naina couldn't help laughing at her mom's irritation with her workaholic dad.

"Uffo! Kitne baar batau Mamma. He can't live without his princess "came Naina's teasing reply

"Haan Haan. Pappa ki laadli. Why do I bother telling you! I'm alone in this house. You and Navin are always siding with Pappa"

"Mamma, you are so filmi! Who would think that your school kids call you Lady Hitler?"

"It's a well kept secret" Priya winked at her daughter. "Acha, I've to leave now or else I'll be late and my Hitler image will be gone. All the best for your first day in college Naina and don't get into trouble like Navin"

"Mamma you worry too much! Even Pappa is okay with bhaiyya's suspensi..." Naina bit her tongue for talking too much.

"Sure! Why not! I should be ecstatic that he got suspended for fighting in college."She glared at Naina. "Your Pappa was just like this in college. He must be happy that Navin is following in his footsteps."

Naina gave a serious expression and went to hug her mom. That was one trick that usually shut her mom up. "Oh! Mamma! You are so adorable. Go now or else you'll be late. Have an awesome day"

Priya couldn't help but smile at her daughter. "You too beti. And ride safely. Don't go too fast." Naina mock saluted her mom!

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Meanwhile in Suhaan's flat

"Hey! We should go to college today. Its Naina's first day" announced Navin.

"And your sasurji will kill us. Did you forget that we have 2 more days of suspension", grimaced Suhaan

"Rehne de yaar! BC will kill us and he will escape." joined in Dev with a laugh.

"Tu chup kar! We got suspended only because of you" Suhaan glared at Dev.

"But in a way it's good yaar. Even they are suspended and I don't have to worry about them ragging Naina" grinned Navin, trying to make peace between the two.

"Wo tho hai" conceded Suhaan.

"So let's go guys! I'll manage everything. Trust me" Navin gave a bow titling his imaginary hat.

"Now do you guys need a special invitation?"Navin turned to Ishaan and Joseph."Fine Fine! Let's eat some food and go" grumbled Joseph.

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Naina rushed through breakfast and ran out to her trusted scooty. Her dad had gifted the scooty for her last b'day, despite her mom's protests.

Naina soon reached Pooja's house but had to wait for half an hour for Pooja to get ready!

"Aur Kitna time Pooja???" Naina asked impatiently.

"Bas! Ho gaya! I've to look good na. What if I end up meeting my Raanjha today?"Pooja asked slyly.

"What happened to not making cute guys wait??"Naina's eyebrows arched.

"Better to make them wait than to look bad. Can we go now or do you have more qustions? " retorted Pooja.

"Hey Bhagwan! Isse thoda buddhi de!"

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Naina was positively beaming as they entered the college gates. "Finally the best years of our life has come" she dramatically sighed. "Haan yaar! We have been waiting for college for so long" agreed Pooja.

"It's a pity that your bhaiyya is not coming today. He must have good looking friends, right?" asked Pooja with a slight grin and Naina could only shake her head at her best friend's antics.

"Atleast Bhabhi will be here somewhere. I'll call her in sometime. Bhaiyya was telling that we will have some sort of Orientation in the Auditorium to tell us about the rules and all that."

"Thank God ki your Bhabhi is the principal's daughter. We can break some rules as long as we involve her in it"

"Yeah sure! Bhabhi has to save bhaiyya and now you also?? Let her breathe a bit"

"You are such a bore Naina. Luckily for you, I'm your best friend! Or else you would never do anything fun. Oh! look! Some guys are playing basketball! Let's go watch. Nothing like watching a good game of basketball to get a good start to your day" Pooja pulled Naina along with her to the seats next to the basketball court.

"Tu bhi na yaar Pooja" grumbled Naina.

"Arre Naina.. Usse dekho! Bilkul Kuch Kuch Hota Hai ki Rahul ki tarah dikhta hai!" said Pooja dreamily.

"You are hopeless Pooja! I don't know how..." Naina started but abruptly stopped. Her eyes locked with a guy leaning against the canteen counter and she felt as if something was squeezing her heart. A Surreal warmth surrounded her. At that moment, the guy turned away and she felt a twinge of disappointment. She couldn't shake the feeling that he somehow looked very familiar. She hastily turned to Pooja to continue her conversation,

"But I have high hopes for you Naina!" Pooja replied with a knowing smirk.

"What? I was looking around to see if I could find Bhabhi"

"And that guy looks like your Bhabhi??" asked Pooja pointedly.

"What rubbish! He looks familiar. Must be bhaiyya's friend" Naina told the first excuse that came to her head.

"Hmmm Hmmm Hmmm.. " mocked Pooja.

"I'm feeling so thirsty. Let's go to the canteen "

" Tu jaa! Aur mujhe Rahul ko dekhne de" sighed Pooja. Naina got up, thankful for the opportunity to go alone.

"Bhaiyya , 1 pepsi" she ordered, sneaking a glance at the guy who was absorbed in his phone. He seemed oblivious of Naina's presence there. But Naina's mind was in a state of turmoil. She had this strong feeling that she knew him from somewhere. She tried to ignore this nagging feeling and concentrate on her pepsi!

But someone else was concentrating on her!

"Guys! What good is it being final year students if we can't rag freshers?"Sameer was looking for trouble as usual.

"Yeah! It's our right to rag them" Gaurav , the ever fervent supporter chimed in.

"Look guys! We are already under suspension. Let's take it easy for a couple of days atleast" reasoned Vijay Shetty

"Tu kaisa Shetty hai re? Darpok saala. Come. Nothing will go wrong. That girl at the canteen looks like a fresher. Let's start with her."

Naina somehow managed to finish her pepsi and decided to go back to Pooja before she lost her mind. As soon as she took a couple of steps she found her way blocked by a group of guys .

"Ohoo! Who told you that freshers can enter the canteen?"Sameer glared at her.

"You will have to pay a fine for this." Gaurav joined in.

At this moment, Pooja turned to look for Naina. She saw a couple of guys glaring at Naina. She had a really bad feeling about this and decided to call Navin.

"Navin bhaiyya, Pooja here, Where are you?"

"Hey Pooja! We are coming to give you both a grand welcome. Almost there now."

"Come fast to the canteen bhaiyya. Some seniors are harassing Naina"

Anger clouds Navin's face. "What the... Main abhi aa raha hoon".

He shouts at the others "Abhe saalon , jaldi kar. We have to rush to college." And he throws some money on the table and runs out to his bike.

Suhaaan who knew Navin better than anyone else recognizes the reason for the sudden change in his behavior, shouts "NAINA"

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PREVIEW

"Do you people have to block the way?" asked an irritated voice.

Naina turned around to look at the face that looked so familiar yet so distant and she felt her heart flutter!

"Do you think you are some fu**ing hero?" shouted Gaurav and pushed him.

P.S: Hopefully there are no errors. I forgot to edit it before posting.

*hides face and runs away*

Edited by PokerGuy - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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This was written very nicely!
The concept is great! I am 100% sure that the guy Naina locked eyes with was Rajveer!
This is a very fresh and nice start!
Continue soon as I am waiting! Do PM me when you update!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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nice concept keep update
I will read part later
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Posted: 8 years ago
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add me too yaar different concept
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Posted: 8 years ago
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nice ff
continue soon
and pm me whenever you update
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Guys, I had made a small error in Navin-Pooja conversation.

"Come fast to the canteen bhaiyya. Some seniors are harassing Naina"

Chapter 2

Suriji was having a hectic start to his day. He was barely able to manage things in the canteen with the morning rush and having to store provisions that was just being delivered when he saw Sameer and the others coming towards the canteen.

"Ye gadhe yahan kya kar raha hai? Aren't they suspended?"He asked the canteen helper who merely shrugged. "Mujhe lagta hai ki Chandok sir ko call karna chahiye. Oye! Tu kya abhi bhi yaha khada hai? Kaam kar. Ye sada hua network bhi na. Main landline se call kar ke atha hoon."

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Naina was mentally scolding herself for her strange behavior when a couple of guys blocked her way. She heard their questions and froze up unable to say anything. Naina hadn't expected to get ragged because of her being Navin's sister.

"Why are you staring at me? Freshers ko apna aukad pata hona chahiye. When a senior asks a question, you answer. Understand?" thundered Sameer. Naina started to tell about Navin when...

"Do you people have to block the way?" asked an irritated voice.

Naina turned around to look at the face that looked so familiar yet so foreign and she felt her heart flutter! He was looking coolly at the guys behind her.

"Who the hell do you think you are?" Gaurav was looking red with rage.

"That is not your concern. Just move and let me go through."

"Do you think you are some fu**ing hero?" shouted Gaurav and pushed him.

"It doesn't have to be this way" he warned.

"That's for us to decide and for you to find out."Gaurav pushed him again.

"Okay. Suit yourself."

"You fu**ing ..." Gaurav tried to push him again but he stepped away at the last second and pushed Gaurav down.

Sameer threw a punch at him which he deftly avoided and kicked him lightly making Sameer fall.

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Navin had just got off his bike when Suhaan and Joseph entered the parking. Navin merely shouted "canteen" and he ran out hoping Naina was fine.

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Gaurav jumped up screaming abuses.

"Now you are beginning to piss me off." the other guy looked angry now.

Vijay was too shocked at the audacity of this fresher to join in the fight.

Gaurav picked up a chair and tried to hit him with it. But he easily avoided it and kicked at Gaurav's knees and he fell with a thud.

Sameer tries to punch him again but he easily catches his fist and starts punching Sameer in the gut mercilessly until he falls in a heap. He turned to look at Vijay who was trying to help Gaurav but Vijay had no intention of joining in.

Naina was looking at the scene in front of dazed, unable to believe what was happening.

He saw Naina looking stunned and took a step towards her to ask whether she was okay.

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At the same time Navin comes there and sees Naina looking panic stricken and a stranger walking towards her. The protective brother in him rushes to the guy and catches him by his collar.

"Don't you dare touch my sister."

"What is happening here?" thundered Prof. Chandok walking in briskly. "I will not tolerate this kind of nonsense in my college!"

On seeing the Professor, Navin abruptly leaves the guy and walks towards Naina.

Naina wakes out of her stupor and runs to Navin and hugs him.

"Navin! I had made it clear that I don't want to see any of you in college till your suspension is over."

Suriji came hurriedly." Sirji, Navin ne kuch nahi kiya."

"Pap..Sir I was told that Naina was being harassed and I had to come."

"I can see that your gang is here as well" looking at Suhaan and the others who were rushing.

"Naina, are you okay?" Prof. Chandok asked Naina with concern. Naina merely nodded unable to say anything.

"Oye gadhe! Paani laa" Suriji shouted at Chandu (helper).

"Ye paani pee le puttar. Sab kuch ab theek hai."

"Suriji, make arrangements to take these 2 to the hospital and the rest of you in my office. NOW" Prof. Chandok ordered and left.

While Pooja was trying to explain to Navin what had happened, the other guy followed the professor without glancing at the others.

"Chandu, Tu in dono ko hospital le chal. Main Chandok sir se baat karne jaa raha hoon" And turning to Navin "Fikar na kar, Main sab kuch sambhal loonga."

Navin gave him a weak smile.

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"Sirji, Wo Sameer aur dost pehle uss ladki ko pareshan kar raha tha aur phir wo naya ladka jo bahar hai usse dhakka de raha tha aur phir usne un donom ko mara. Jab Navin aa gaya tab ab bhi waha pahuncha" Suriji explained in a breath.

"Thik hai Suriji. I'll be glad when this year finally gets over. I should throw them out of college. But our Board of Trustees is filled with Minister Shetty's lackeys and also our grant is up for review this year. Vijay is a good kid but in bad company.

Anyways, don't worry Suriji. I won't be taking any action against Navin. I'll let him off with a stern warning. And please send that new student in when you go."

By the time Navin and the others came to Prof. Chandok's room, only the professor was there.

"I don't want to see any of you in college till after your suspension is over. You were lucky enough not to be directly involved in the fight because make no mistake; all of you would have been expelled. So leave the premises immediately. Navin, please stay back."

"Navin, is Naina okay now?"

"Yes Pappaji. Thankfully she was just shocked at what happened. And she does not want to make a complaint. She just wants to put it all behind her."

"Okay. You better go now"

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Instead of going out of the campus, they ended up going back to the canteen.

"BC and his bloody discipline. We didn't do anything and he still had to shout at us." fumed Ishaan.

"Well I'm just glad that we only got shouted at. BC is very much capable of extending our suspension." countered Suhaan.

"Bhaiyya, why do they keep calling Chandok uncle BC?"

"Well, our seniors had kept this name because of his love for discipline - Brigadier Chandok!!"

"So Navin bhaiyya, is this a military college then?? I mean, is it as strict as military?"

"Don't worry Pooja. It's not so bad here. These guys exaggerate everything. Naina, you are okay na?"

"I'm completely okay bhaiyya. Don't worry about me. I think Pooja and I should go attend the orientation before we miss it completely! See you in the evening."

"Acha. Then go. And don't tell Mummy about what happened here."

"Okay Bhaiyya."

~~~~~~~~~~

"Suriji, hum log iss baar bhi baj jaye. All thanks to you!" started Navin

"Wo sab rahne de putar. Mujhe jo sahi laga maine kiya. Bas utna hi.

Main tho tum logom ki bare main thoda der pehle hi soch raha tha. Wo Chandu koi kannada gaane ka video dekh raha ..Thirabogi ya thurbogi aisa kuch tha naam tha. Aur tho usme bhi vo log suspend ho gaya tha!"

"Suriji ! aap bhi na. Hum log abhi yaha se chalta hai. Varna suspension dismissal ban jayega!

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PREVIEW

"Naina, if our princi is a Brigadier and this is a military college, then your mystery guy must be at least a captain. Tho vo hua Veer aur tab tum ho Zaara" teased Pooja.

"Pooja! Stop this nonsense yaar. What all nonsense you think of?" Naina was trying to look stern in spite of blushing deeply!

Edited by PokerGuy - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I had started this fic with a fear that nobody will end up liking the concept. But now I'm on cloud number nine. Thank you all for your interest in this fic! Looking forward to more comments ;)

The song mentioned towards the end is "Thirboki Jeevana" from the kannada movie "Kirik Party". Check out the video on YouTube and I'm sure you will like the video even if you cannot understand Kannada (like me :D).

Next update by around second week of June!
Edited by PokerGuy - 8 years ago
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Wow!! Great concept yaar! Yeh Raj-Naina ke scenes dekho na!
2nd week of june?? Are you serious?? NO PLEASE UPDATE FAST!!
Do pm me when u update!!

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