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thephoenixenigm

@thephoenixenigm

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Posted: 10 years ago

#931

The update was fantastic, Arnav's restless ness,khushi's confusion, the various bonds highlighted a story is not just two people but so many play an important role,the adorable part of meera-arnav ❤️

Amazing update!

Thank you for making it long.

Love

Sum.

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sban

@sban

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Posted: 10 years ago

#932

wow.. u write so beautifully with the emotions.. touching piece

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rulama

@rulama

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+ 8

Posted: 10 years ago

#933

Waiting for someone you love is never easy when the one you are waiting for is not aware that you are waiting... This is the case of both Arnav and Khushi... Both are hesitant to make the first move yet wait for the other to call... The initiative was taken out of their hands by Buaji and that set the tone... Manorama and Buaji both adore Khushi and seem to have set their heart on Arnav for Khushi but right now are silent spectators... Nani and Maya too seem to be of the same opinion...

The most touching aspect of this update is Meera's tentative queries to Arnav about his patient... Arnav on his part has given her his complete attention and has cleared her doubts... His open talk on how they deal with not so successful patients burst open the dam, overpowering her control, flooding with the memories of her appa... Her bonding with Arnav and seeking solace from him is witnessed by the other three... Your title... Incipience is just apt... It sprouted a ray of hope in Arnav, Khushi, Manorama, Buaji, Nani and Maya...

This Arnav is sensitive to the emotional turmoil underneath the smiling faces of Meera and Khushi...

Loved the update...

Edited by rulama - 10 years ago

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kanika

@kank_dah

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Posted: 10 years ago

#934

it was a great update,very touching,

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ranogill

@ranogill

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Posted: 10 years ago

#935

it is tinkling feeling when i think about your arnav and khushi...sometime i want to fast forward your story and want to read the last chapter...but no i will wait with this tinkling feeling ..i am enjoying it

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Jayashree

@JshreeB

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Posted: 10 years ago

#936

I must say Meera is very sensible child, i just adore her 😊 very nice and emotional update

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Arjuhisis

@Arjuhisis

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Posted: 10 years ago

#937

oh MB what do I say about this update

iam pretty bad at commenting -

I just want to say that I envy your writing skills - what a debut dear - excellent going

Meera has stolen a piece of my heart

beautiful characterization, excellent piece of writing

awesome update

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

Stunner

+ 8

Posted: 10 years ago

#938

So I just read the first chapter and though I could blame it on some personal stuff, I realize that its just not that. Your writing is extremely personal and beautifully transcends the page and tugs at the heart making one think about the chances one lost, never took or took to regret.

Very very well written. I shall offer you my feedback as I read along :)

Edited by AngelTeen - 10 years ago

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Shree Nanda

@Mrs_Darcy_Shree

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Posted: 10 years ago

#939

that was really beautiful dear
loved it

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

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Posted: 10 years ago

#940

Chapter 2

Ten years, ten months and eight days...

Its amazing how we remember the exact time that has passed about such situations, isnt it?

Again very well written...my only issue was with the sudden chirpiness in Arnav and Khushi's exchange when he asks her to meet him for lunch...although it was short lived, it seemed strange but maybe thats just me...I mean when you suddenly meet someone with whom you have a history, conversations could blow hot and cold, cheery and awkward I assume...

Any how, I like how all the characters are getting etched out and their situations and feelings getting expressed...even if they are not physically present like NK or Arnav's family back home...