Arhi SS: Tewari & Sons, No. 23, Chandni Chowk (THREAD I)

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Minnie

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Posted: 10 years ago

#571

hey writer,

This looks really interesting. I am enjoying reading it. Havnt started Chapter 3 yet... But you have done a great job with chronicling the past and weaving them between the chapters. Awesome job done.

Eager to continue reading... 😊

ehhhgg!! when would I sit to write if I have such amazing works infront of me to read!! 😕

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sslmay11

@sslmay11

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Posted: 10 years ago

#572

IF has changed their setting.

Love reading this story. IDK how many times i refreshed your thread for update. I liked Khushi and Preeto part. At least she has one friend other than Aakash.I think the phone call is from Aman. I really don't know much to say or analyse. I love reading this story. Will be eagerly waiting for the next update.

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1chilly

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Posted: 10 years ago

#573

Ugh! Barfi in the shape of a diaper! And with saffron on it.

You trying to get me off eating mithai now? 🤢 😆

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radhvi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#574

Read all the chapters in a go...I'll be back with full comment on the rest of the chapters but for this chapter, I felt the urge to comment about one thing in particular...

When Payal considered taking Sonu as a dowry to Raizada House...that really cracked me up as I remembered HP was a part of Poonam's dowry and now he a spy, willing accomplice trusted aid...to Poonam...

Though it won't happen, I still couldn't resist contemplating that if at all Arnav marries Payal and Sonu comes to RH as a part of dowry, then it would be Senior PASR & HP v/s Junior PASR & Sonu...🤣

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lilakumariacnw

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Posted: 10 years ago

#575

nice update...loved it...

i felt very happy reading the preetho friendship...

i dont know if i should like or dislike payal..her character is really confusing me...

feeling sadd for khushi..seems like ...she suffered a lot becoz of raizadas...waiting for the details...

oh...chawla is also dangerous...???.

waiting for the next update dear..

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shimerrr

@shimerrr

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Posted: 10 years ago

#576

hey dear writer
this story is amazing ...d way u are building up d characters is commendable ...u are not ready to reveal much about khushi...are you ? ...i feel dat each character here in this story is mysterious ...even HP is ...LOL...
but each character is presented in a very refined way .
Khushi ...by far is d biggest mystery for me ...she runs tewari and sons ...a sinking sweet shop and as she and akash says dat she does something else too ...and i really want dat something else to be something dat no body envisioned ...i really want to see her do something which can never be percieved by new onites ...and which completely blows
away arnavs confidence of reaching out to khushi ...all in all i would love to see khushi as a strong and independent lady .
all d best
keep writing and keep posting...!

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RasgullaSP

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Posted: 10 years ago

#577

Unresd here: https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/117314333

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anu1017

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Posted: 10 years ago

#578

And the mystery continues Ms. Radhika lol!!! Awesome update yaar, after reading the update I want to beg you for the next update. Please update pronto, like now hehehe!!!!!!!

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Onlooker

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Posted: 10 years ago

#579

Phew!! I didn't know I was holding my breath!! I wonder why? Well..i assumed Kushi and Arnav were going to meet at La's Sangeeth.

Dard de hues and Sonu made me chuckle 😃

So it is without dispute that everyone seems to agree that Arnav and Payal were too cold..As they were no love strings attached, there are no expectations or dreams..so now worry factor there..

How come Akash has maintained his friendship with Kushi?..Is there any soft corner there? I liked the fact that Akash was very upfront when Arnav questioned him..

Friends like Preeto are a gift..Am happy that atleast she got Preeto and Akash to be called as friends..Did Preeto sense anything more in Akash's friendship to Kushi that she called him Jeejaji?

I am eager to know Arnav's reaction when he spots a beautiful n delicious Kushi?..Will he be attracted to her? Arnav does sense something more in Kushi..but i guess he cannot put a finger on it or he feels it is degrading him to be attracted to her.

I wonder what exactly did his mother do to Kushi that he wants to redeem it...

Anjali and Joon are an awesome couple..

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@GhalibIsDead

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Posted: 10 years ago

#580

I enjoyed this update, it had an underlying element of humour and yet revealed a lot.

PaMan aka Payal and Aman are a thing. That explains a lot 😆

I think it must have been tempting for you as a writer to convert Payal into a one-dimensional mean girl, but props to you for keeping her complex, independent, annoying and interesting.

Preeto and Ginny sound like good people. Glad that Khushi has them in her life. When you mentioned Preeto for the first time, I was not sure if I cared for her. But I see you have given her some growth and kept her real. She has the right idea on how to deal with the Raizadas - taser them 😆

Akash is ensuring that he is not reduced to playing host at Khushi's wedding as well and is gently asking Arnav to keep away from his girl. But thanks to Poonam Raizada, this love triangle will reunite at Lavanya's wedding. Can't wait!

Good to know that Jun and Jali are getting some action! 😛

Arnav is a rebel-poet's grandson. Nice touch that 😉

Somewhere deep down, Khushi is a regular girl. The one who dances to Baby Doll, wears borrowed clothes from BFF and goes overboard with eye make-up. That warmed me. Both Khushi and the readers needed to see her out of Tewaris. That initial bit of Khushi and Chandni Chowk was somehow so poignant though. Happy that her parents are around, wondering about the fall-out though.

I like how slowly the threads are connecting, especially Anandrams and Tewaris. I think Arnav will finally get the closure and his redemption when he helps Khushi save the shop. There has to be a reason why your story is Tewari & Sons.

Liked the radio motif recurring. Agree with Payal, Pataka Gudhi is the song that urges you to go on a road trip alone! And yeh duniya is indeed pital di 😆 Also kind of optimistic about the future that Faisal Bhai bought a baby doll remix as opposed to another dard version.

This is such a fantastic story with so much focus on characterisation, it is a lovely read!