RaBir FF -A Cast of Characters chapter 97/98 & Epilogue pg121/2 (4 - Page 62

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: nividances

The Vihaan in this story has redeemed this character in my eyes and made me forget the bitter taste that the Vihaan from the show left in my mouth. Poor Naomi...her parents have left her hanging on pins and needles in this situation. Perhaps a mother-daughter conversation is due soon. Will it happen after the mother and prospective son-in-law conversation takes place?


Mr. Patel's conversation with Rachna...are we going to find out what that was all about? 😕
I am getting the feeling that Sonal has obtained her ticket into the Tripathi house with this injury of hers. Rachna's words at the end did nothing to change my thoughts on this matter.

The mystery man's message has left me scratching my head as I try to figure out where you are leading us, so I will pass on commenting any further about it.

Update soon Kelly! 😊

Nivi, you may as well just add story developer to that business card of yours😉.
I' glad you liked the update. As it relates to Vihaan, I had definite mixed feelings about the character on the serial, so I am glad I get to write him as I would have liked him.
I'll just let you keep scratching your head over the mystery man LOL.
And believe it or not I'm actually going be early with an update...hope you enjoy the next one.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: RaBir

Naomi Vihaan sweet one talk. Poor Rachna do much now Kabir no here. No problem Sonal side please. Rajeev help Rachna to safe everything.

I'm glad you enjoyed the interaction between Vihaan and Naomi. Unfortunately I can make no promises on anything else.
I hope you enjoy the next update.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: DLSR

KELLY DIDI I CANT VISIT THE FORUM FOR ATLEAST 3 DAYS COZ I FAILED IN MY ECONOMICS XAM
I HAVE TO APPEAR THE RETEST TO BE PROMOTED TO CLASS 12TH . I NEED YOURS , NIVI DIDI;S,NURIT DIDI;S,AARTI DIDI;S, & EKRA;S BEST WISHES TO PASS THE XAMS 😭😭😭🤢🤢

Oh Dear, I hope you have done well and you next posting will detail your success. Let us know.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Nuritzur



😆 I guess she always be around us, so we can't run from her 😆

Yep and now I'm going to borrow her back from you for my next update. You can have her back when I'm done though!
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Nuritzur

I guess I am the only one that Notice that Kabir is not in this part 😭

I think there same problem with Sonal and Rachna worried about it but I still not believe in Sonal and I think there her plan behind it.

Poor Noami look like her parents not want to talk with her but why? 😭 thank for Vihaan that make her little bit better but is it not Rajeev job to keep her happy. hope this weird small talking will not effect Rajeev or this what you try to do 😉

Sanjay so sweet boy I like how he name Rachna his second mother but Rachna right Sonal are his mother but lets face it Rachna is much better then her after she turn Sanjay to her spy 😛😆

Any way lovely update just like it Kelly.
Next time dont forget Kt 😉 it like read Rabir story with out Kabir 😆

Forgive me for no Kabir...it's the time zone messing up everyone's interactions. Likewise with Rajeev people just aren't connecting that's all.
Rest assured Naomi's parent aren't ignoring her purposely😆, she just needs to learn some patience.
Sanjay is the best, and he deserves a lot better than Sonal doesn't he.
Now let's see if we can find KT😆
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: nividances

You're right Nurit...I didn't even notice that KT was missing from the last update. I am too focused on trying to see where Kelly is taking this story.

Update soon Kelly...I am unable to write the next chapter myself because I am trying to be a detective with your FF to connect the dots that you have already given us in an attempt to figure out what I am missing. 😕

Well it's a good thing I'm posting my next update soon, or you will have a riot on your hands then Nivi!
But now you have me worried if the story is that convolutedConfused
Anyhoo, hope you enjoy the next update.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Chapter 49

"So if I understand right, you are actually a faculty member of the college that my daughter did her semester exchange at Rajeev?"

A cacophony of protests rose from the other two participants on the skype call, refuting the implications of the statement, but in lieu of commenting, the man to whom the question had been directed gazed stoically back at the woman who had spoken.

"Mother, you have taken this information totally out of context. Do you truly believe I would have allowed such a thing to occur? I would have gone to Banaras myself to bring her home, if anything of the sort..."

"Please Aunty, what you are saying... nothing can be further from the truth. Rajeev Sir would never cross the boundary of teacher and..."

The older woman held up one hand, a directive for silence. "Stefan, Rachna, it is more than obvious that the two of you have your opinions, but this question was not asked of either of you. I'm very appreciative to both of you for connecting us, but I think it's time that both of you disconnect from the call now and leave Rajeev and I to talk." She looked at her watch. "Frankly Stefan it's past your bedtime and I know you have to get up early for work, so perhaps you should sign off so that you can get some rest."

"Mum..."

"Good Night son, I will talk to you later. I love you."

"I love you too Mum. Good Night."

She turned her attention to her daughter's friend with a gentle smile. "Rachna dear, by the mere fact that you are a mother I know you to have a busy day ahead of you. And that is not even taking into consideration your own work. I am more than certain that Rajeev can survive without your presence."

"Ji Aunty."

"That's a good girl. Kiss the baby for me and please give my regards to your parents and Kabir's grandmother, okay dear? Oh and Rachna, when you speak to Stefan in a few minutes, can you reiterate that for now Naomi is to know nothing of this conversation."

Rachna had the grace to look sheepish. "Ji Auntie, have a good evening."

Down from four connections to two, the older woman focused on the remaining participant. "Now where were we Rajeev?"

"I believe you were questioning the nature of my position at SVC and if there was the remote possibility that Naomi and I could have met when she first travelled to Banaras. The answer is no. I have just returned to SVC this past academic year after a lengthy absence. Assuredly I would have encountered Naomi, had I still been at the college, if for no other than reason of her friendship with Rachna, given Rachna's participation in hockey. Obviously this would have made even the thought of a relationship with Naomi untenable. With hindsight being 20/20, I am most grateful that we did miss each other."

"Then it was through Rachna and Kabir that the two of you met?"

"Our formal introduction was made here, however it seemed we were fated to meet prior to that evening." He briefly described their encounter, unabashedly admitting that Naomi had made more of an impression than he had on her. Throughout his dissertation, he noted that Naomi's mother kept an impassive expression on her face, but she definitely reacted when he mentioned that her daughter had appeared to be crying, over and above the circumstances of Aryia's misadventure.

"She was extremely unhappy when she arrived home."

"I would say the circumstances weren't much better when she first returned to Banaras."

"And now she is waxing poetically about life and one's destiny. Am I to assume that this is solely due to you Rajeev?"

"I wouldn't be so arrogant to assume full credit for this Aunty. I can only say that she has gone through a period of growth, totally separate from our relationship, and perhaps this has made her more receptive to the possibility of us. However nothing would please me more than to know that in some small way I've returned her to a happier state of mind. She deserves all the happiness in the world."

"And do you believe yourself to be the one that can provide this happiness, Rajeev?"

"Absolutely; how could I not, when she has become the source of mine?

The slight raise of her eyebrows, barely perceptible was the only reaction to that statement.

"So Rajeev, tell me about your family."

"I just don't understand Stefan, how could your mother be so mistaken to believe that Rajeev was on the faculty during Naomi's attendance?" Rachna hadn't been able to hide her panic that her friends' mother could possibly be considering such impropriety as a factor in her daughter's relationship with the coach.

"Mother knew exactly what she was doing by asking that question, Rachna. Now that I have had the opportunity to think about it, I'm even more sure that it was a test. Let's call it a character litmus test of sorts. For someone in Rajeev's position, it was a particularly offensive suggestion. My guess is that she asked it to gauge his reaction."

"And the verdict?"

"I deduce that of the three of us, that Rajeev came out looking the best. One would say he showed the control let's say one may need dealing with someone as melodramatic as my baby sis."

"That's mean, Stef."

He laughed. "You know I love my sister, but I also know her character. And although she's the best, you have to admit that she can be over the top. I doubt that this will be their only conversation before this is over, but I'm certain Rajeev will be put through his paces. Mummy will do it in the nicest way possible, but she is definitely in fact finding mode in order to determine if he is worthy of her daughter. "

"It just has to work out; you just wouldn't believe how perfect they are for each other, Stefan."

"I hope you are right, Rachna. I've gone out on a limb here supporting him for the mere fact that he makes her happy. I would hate to be wrong about him." He sighed. "Anyway Mum is on the case now, and there's nothing more formidable than a mother in protection mode, right Rachna? Nevertheless, I am going to have to get some shut-eye, so I will have to say good night, or good morning as is the case."

"Take care Stef."

There's nothing more formidable than a mother in protection mode.

These words played over and over in Rachna's head until finally she couldn't wait anymore. She picked up her phone, deciding to call KT on the off chance that he was available. He picked up on the second ring.

"Rachna, is everything okay?"

"Everything is fine Kabir, I just wanted to see if you were available to talk."

"We're back at the hotel; actually we have just settled down for dinner here at the hotel restaurant."

"You and Naomi?"

"And Nathanial from the firm. We just have a few things to discuss, but if it's urgent..."

"No KT, everything is okay. I will give you a couple of hours and call you back, thik hai?"

"Ji Rachna. I look forward to speaking to you my love."

"I can't wait. I love you KT."

A slight stirring was heard over the baby monitor, and Rachna realized that one or both of the children were probably awake now. Before leaving the room, she checked her laptop, and noticed that Skype was showing that Rajeev and Naomi's mother were still logged on. She mumbled a quick prayer for her friends and headed towards the nursery. She opened the door and smiled on seeing Sanjay standing near the crib entertaining his sister.

"Good morning betas."

Both children turned in her direction at the sound of her voice, and her heart melted at the sight of the two innocent faces smiling at her.

"There's nothing more formidable than a mother in protection mode," she thought.

Rachna watched as Daadi left the room with the two children. She spun around in the chair to face the computer monitor.

"Alone at last, Beautiful."

She smiled at her husband. "Is it necessary for me to let you know how much I miss you, Kabir Tripathi, or can we get straight on to conversation?"

"I'll take your word that you miss me just as much as I do you, so perhaps, we can just get on with talking. But before we do, thank you Rachna."

"For what KT?"

"For everything you do; you are just incredible my love. You have had so much on your plate in the past few days, and you have just handled it effortlessly."

"I'm a wife and mother, my first responsibility is to my family's wellbeing, you have to know that."

"Well I think you are amazing . So what has been going on with you on top of everything you have had to contend with, Rachna? Was it something specific you had hoped to speak to me about earlier?"

"Sanjay beta, I am just stepping outside thik hai?"

"Okay Aunty, I'll stay with mama."

When Rachna had looked back at Sanjay in the hospital room, she thought she saw a look of panic in the Sonal's eyes, but it was gone so quickly, that she assumed that it had been her imagination. She smiled at the little boy before turning back to Mr. Patel. "Why don't we step out into the hallway?" she said, and lead the way out of the room.

They had made small talk of how her work was progressing, the commissions she had picked up since the launch - even he was aware of her success of her first client- and then out of the blue, Mr. Patel had offered a business proposition that could revolutionize her brand if it were to successful.

"KT, Mr. Patel would like to showcase Banaras Beauty as part of an Indian fashion symposium for some of the UK's leading fashion distributors." She rambled off some of the names of the distributors he had mentioned. "The intent had been to contact me in a few days, but with Sonal and Sanjay's mishap, and our chance meeting at the hospital, he decided to impart the information then and there, to see if I would be interested." She stopped to give her husband the opportunity to respond.

"Incredible, absolutely incredible Rachna. There are some very impressive names amongst that list you do realize that don't you?"

"Ha KT, aside from that there are some young startup companies involved as well. Obviously I haven't committed to anything, but this is a very exciting prospect. It is definitely something to think about."

"Definitely, Beautiful." Kabir smiled at her excitement, but even through the monitor, saw an underlying concern. "Rachna is a... but coming now?"

"Not so much with the proposal, KT; it's just something that Mr. Patel mentioned. At least of two of the newer distributors were referred to Patel Industries by Sonal from her past dealings with them."

"That shouldn't be surprising, Rachna, she did have a modelling career here in New York if you remember."

"Yes, but these are UK based firms KT, so don't you think that's a little strange?"
Her husband laughed. "Rachna how can you ask me that, when I'm here in America due to my partnership with a New York Firm. I think you are just overthinking things."

"But Kabir..."

"Nay Rachna, stop. Don't take on more than you must. Why don't you just think about this fantastic opportunity and if you intend on taking advantage of it. How soon will have to make a decision concerning the symposium?"

"I still have some time. I will be receiving a formal proposal from Patel Industries in a few days, and you will be back well before I have to make a final decision."

"Excellent, that's just excellent. I am so proud of you, Rachna; you are a star, there is no doubt of that."

"I had the very best of mentors."

They talked for a while longer, before it became evident that Kabir was ready to rest. Rachna blew a kiss to her husband and bid him a good night. The time differences were definitely a downer to this trip, but at least they were afforded two opportunities a day to talk. Moments after she disconnected the screen saver initiated and Rachna watched the rotating images for a while until her mind wandered back again to yesterday.

Mr. Patel had re-entered the hospital room, and while she waited quietly, had bid his assistant goodbye.

"Remember Sonal, should you need anything, please just get word to us." The bedridden woman nodded. "Mrs. Tripathi, I will be in touch in a few days with that proposal. Hopefully we can look forward to a favourable response. I think that especially for one of the younger firms that Sonal sourced for us, the opportunity to serve as UK distributor for Banaras Beauty would be a major coup; don't you agree Sonal dear?"

"H...ha Mr. Patel," She cleared her throat; to Rachna it seemed that she was slightly nervous.

"But, I find I must be leaving, Namaste."

"Namaste Mr. Patel."

Now in the room alone, Rachna addressed Sonal. "It is good to see you alert Sonal. Sanjay was quite worried. Kabir insisted that Sanjay get re-checked by the family doctor, and thankfully he is quite well. He will be back to school in another day or so."

"Thank you Rachna, I honestly appreciate you being able to keep and care for Sanjay for me."

"I imagine it must be difficult to be so far away from your family at a time like this, Actually when Sanjay made mention of your mother residing in New York, my thought was to make mention of this to KT and get him to contact them to let them..."

"Nay...nay, I mean that's not necessary, uh Mr. Patel, I mean my job has already contacted my parents on my behalf." She settled from her outburst. "But thank you for the consideration."

"Truly it's no trouble, Sonal" She looked down to identify the incoming call on her mobile. "Excuse me, I have to take this."

"Mama, do you think my naanii is still mad at you?"

"Hush Sanjay, don't you see Rachna on the phone."

"But, Mama."

"Bas Sanjay!" she hissed back.

Engaged in conversation with Arpita, who was back at the workshop, Rachna had raised her head slightly, at the odd question Sanjay asked his mother, wondering at it and why it had evoked such a harsh response from Sonal to her son.

The computer screensaver rotated through another cycle. The image she waited for came up and then gave way to the next. Something was wrong here; definitely wrong. She was sure Sonal was hiding something. Despite how cordial she had been at the hospital, Rachna would never trust her.

"There's nothing more formidable than a mother in protection mode," she thought.

Edited by crtkelly - 9 years ago


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Posted: 10 years ago
What a chapter! Lots of things happening but first a huge thank you for accepting my requests. 😊
I have more to comment on but I will come back later to add to my post since I'm fighting droopy eyes to stay up and finish my pending work.

*Edited*
There's nothing more formidable than a mother in protection mode.
This line deserves applause. 👏 I absolutely loved the way it was used and repeated throughout the chapter. I would say that this is also a bit of foreshadowing in terms of what Rachna can do when her maternal instincts are turned on...which they have been, going by the way you ended.

Story developer? Did my comments to your last update give you a burst of creative juices to help plan out the flow of this chapter? If so, yay! 😊 😳

Now I'm not commenting as much as I'm thinking aloud...er typing out my thoughts (?). 😆
London UK...Vihaan, the project Mr. Patel proposed, Stefan (is he in London too?? I can't remember at the moment)...I want to say that the first two might tie into Sonal's plan (if she knows about Vihaan that is) and then the last one might be one of the foils that leads us towards a happy ending. Or perhaps Vihaan and Stef can join hands to give us the happy ending? All of this is just one of my many attempts to figure you out Kelly...please ignore my rambling if it sounds like complete rubbish and is entirely off track. 😛

As for Naomi's mum (since I know a bit more about the inspiration behind some of these characters than some of your other readers 😃), is she based off of a certain real life someone as well? I would imagine that those dialogues shooing Stef and Rachna away and interrogating Rajeev might have been easy to write if you were able put yourself in the character's shoes...if you know what I mean. 😉 😆
Edited by nividances - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: crtkelly

Well it's a good thing I'm posting my next update soon, or you will have a riot on your hands then Nivi!

But now you have me worried if the story is that convoluted😕
Anyhoo, hope you enjoy the next update.


No no don't worry based on my comments...you're doing a good job building the suspense. It's just that I have a habit of wanting to have a vague idea of what lies ahead so I tend to dissect things until I figure it out.
An overly complicated convoluted mish mash is what I created with some parts of True Love 😕 (I definitely would change things if I had a chance to rewrite it)...you seem to have a clear storyline in mind and things are fitting together with each additional part. I definitely stand by this statement after having read the last update. 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: crtkelly

Oh Dear, I hope you have done well and you next posting will detail your success. Let us know.



Hi Dear dont worry stay positive you will pass it. I wish you all the best 😉

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