*Updted* Vidarth FF:Indecent Proposal (Collab) chapter 11(pg 31) - Page 11

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Posted: 10 years ago
me first!!RES
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Ohhh my goddd...it was ☺️...u get a ⭐️⭐️⭐️from me!!!chandu update soon before i 🤢🤢🤢i ❤️ u for this n i m so exicted for their date...u made me love flirty n naughty Parth n stumped Vidushi so hatta off n bow down 👏
Edited by skm27395 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
parth want to win the challenge
he agree to be with her 2 more months
and omg hw romantic he s being(even though faking)
i am very much excited for nxt part
hw parth s gonna react to vidushi??
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Thanks for the dedication Ash 🤗... personally I don't really think my reviews are any good. i basically just rewrite what you wrote and say how much i like it.. not helpful at all in my opinion but i'm glad you like it.

i really like the title of this chapter... and oh my gosh the starting line... seriously you started with a romance scene? Now how am i going to concentrate on the rest of the chapter when all i can think about is that kiss, and his amazing stubble

"pleasurable sensations that were spreading across her being like a heatwave." oh trust me Vidushi i know the exact feeling because I'm feeling it right now just reading this... i swear Ash every time i read a scene like this i have to get up and run off to my room so that my parents cant hear my squealing or clapping from excitement 😆

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Pleasure and Pain." ☺️ the sadistic side of me is back... I'm not even sure if this is healthy or not?

'Isne toh sach mein Chipko movement initiate kardiya." Finally, the roles are reversed for once. I really want Vids to yell at him and tell him to back off just like how he does to her all the time. Every since you suggested that slapping idea, it's been on my mind. i really hope she does it one day.

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Kahi iska canteen mein adult movie banane ka plan hai kya?' 😲 I REALLY WANT THIS TO HAPPEN... PLEASE WRITE AN OS ON IT!!!

"We are going on a date jaan." For a moment there I forgot he has a hidden agenda and i really thought he was being sincere and serious... damn you Parth, fall in love with her already otherwise I'm going to go mental from waiting so long.

By the way I've been meaning to ask... originally the concept was to write 30 chapters for the 30 days Vidarth are a "couple"... well in your storyline because of the bet with Randhir there's been an extention of one more month na... So are you going increase the number of chapters also 😆 (hehe I know the answer to this is probably know, but still, a girl can hope)

"Parth gave her what he hoped was a seductive smile." damn you and your sexiness Parth... I can't believe I'm saying this but I think I'm falling in love with a fictional character Hoped?? Man he looks seductive even when he's not doing anything, forget actually trying to be seductive!

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...told him he was looking like a creep." 🤣 hahaha i can just imagine the awkwardness. Parth trying to be seductive but looking constipated instead, and Vidushi not knowing what the hell is happening. It's like a scene straight from a comedy movie!

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hoping his concern for his image would get the better of his newfound creepy behavior." I never really thought Parth was concerned about his image, i just always assumed that he didn't care about what other people thought and his angry-young-man image was just his personality, not his image as such. But I get why she thinks this because he usually doesn't like being seen with her.

"'Back hun? Even better for my plan." ☺️ I'm so ready for some Vidarth backseat romance in class. Not usually a big fan of PDA but when it comes to Vidarth kuch bhi chalega 😆

"2 months with Vidushi was going to kill him.
Unless he killed her first." 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣 i probably shouldn't even be laughing at that killing comment but it's so predictable of Parth, and hilarious also. Parth can be such a big drama queen sometimes, itni bhi buri nahi hai vo yaar. This just reminds me of that one interview where Ankit said that if Parth and Vidushi get together she will drive him mad 😆

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Vidushi was talking to one of Yoyo's Chamchas." YESSS let the jealousy wars begin. I love reading about jealous Parth, or jealous anyone really, jealously just makes people even more hot in my opinion.

This chamcha is annoying me like hell. Sure i want Parth to get jealous but seriously, kaise shamelessly flirt kar raha hai like he even has a chance.

"Parth's gaze moved to her lips." please put me out of my misery and just kiss her already... i can't take this suspense any more 😭 Ash you sure know how to keep your readers on the edge of their seat wanting more.

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'Stop biting that lip. It makes me want to do things.'" 🤪 I've officially lost it!! KISS HER KISS HER KISS HER KISS HER!!! Too much romance for me to handle yaar, Parth's acting so sexy aur upar se Vids keeps biting her lip, it's like everything is going in slow motion and i just want it all to hurry up so they can KISS!

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Ladki ko patana hai toh thodi bahut tareef karo...Jaise mein apne Kaustu..." to be very honest i kind of dislike the YoYo and Kaustuki drama, but he speaks the truth. But in parth's case if he keeps sending notes like the one he did I'm sure Vidushi will not be able to resist him, I know i wouldn 😉

'Shit...when did she suddenly get this immunity?' This is like my dream. Vidushi stops chasing after Parth and he sees that he doesn't have that effect on her anymore so then he falls for her and has to chase after her instead. Ash next FF you write has to be something like this. Hehehe if i could i would totally give you all my fantasies for Vidarth so you could write them out beautifully for me.

'what the hell look' this is going a bit off topic here but did you see V day tripping with Nisha and how Ankit does the "what the hell" impression of her and gets her to do it also. and there's also another part where they both do vidushi's signature "huh" together...at the same time...coincidently. I've starting shipping the two off-screen also!

"hot lagti ho...Itni hot ki..." mar gayi main... his sheer hotness has literally killed me

"His breath caught in his throat." awww how cute is that. He's unaffected by her when she ways short clothes and makeup but the moment she puts on a hoodie and takes off the make up, his breath catches.

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She did look absolutely adorable though." ooohhh is that a glimmer of something i see... could it be? could parth actually be falling for the one person he never though he would 😆 heheh i should do commentary in the future

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his hand was slipping into her hoody and tracing her bare back." you know what, i'm going to kill you for teasing so much... bare body??? Ab tak proper kiss nahi hua and every ten seconds there's a new romance scene between vidarth... I really don't know how I managed to read so far without losing my mind.

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she slid her own hands into his T-shirt, tracing his abs." GO VIDUSHI GO!!

"Ruko..I'm s...sorry " the words left his mouth." woah Parth saying sorry to Vidushi... never thought that day would come. I guess Vidushi has more of a hold on him than he knows

"Ew...I'm not doing 'it' with you!" she struggled." 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 abe yeh idea kahan se aaya... trust her and her "gutter mind" to go straight to the extreme
🤣🤣

"I got chinese for you. I heard you like it" Isn't he taking this fake boyfriend thing a little too far. I mean no one is even there to watch them, and he already got her to agree to the extra month. So why's he doing all this extra work to impress her 🤔

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Basketball, loyal friendship, capable captain, good human...But you know what...you suck at being a boyfriend." she whispered." wait what... you can't leave a chapter like that... there needs to be a finite ending to the chapter na. What does Parth say to her? What does she even mean by that? Ash if you were such a great friend of mine i would have killed you by now 😆

I think this is the longest comment I have ever written. It certainly felt like it was going on forever. Loved the chapter, loved all the romance scenes, and I loved the added touches of humour here and there. Hope you like reading this comment just as much as I liked reading the chapter.

- Rae

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Posted: 10 years ago
Khatarnaakam Vishesham update maar daala be.. 😲
LOL Parth chha gaya aur Vidushi ki batti gul kar gaya.. 😆..

Special thanks for making the Harry Potter and RON fan in me dance like a *drunkard crazy person* with this line :-

"Who are you and what have you done with Parth?"... LOL 👏

Uff the spark, conspiracy, tension, Vidushi's real self, couple of points where she bounces back again, Parth's conflicting emotions.. 😳.. Massst... 👏

Now it's really tough for me to right now.. Tough spot you have put me in.. 😆
Edited by Moony87 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: clarity

Wow, Wow and Wow!
👏👏👏

All three of you are amazing storytellers. ⭐️⭐️ What finesse! 😲😲
I'm gonna have to review all chapters at once, because I read it at lightning speed. It was that good.

I must say, you have etched your characters beautifully- with oodles of oomph and a dash of humour.👏👏 You have preserved the characterisation of Vidushi, Parth, Jiggy, Randhir etc and added your own twist to their lives.

Love how you add zingers like- 'FITE ka Sunny Deol', 'The Spiderman Song', and many more. It makes the story so much more believable because you can actually imagine these characters saying and doing things like that 😆 😆

You have shown progression in both Parth and Vidushi's characters- SH writers, take note.
The way Vidushi blushes at Parth's advances, finally exposing her vulnerable side. Vidushi doesn't blush much, and she's cute when she does
. Parth and the whole candlelight dinner, embarrassing her in front of juniors 😆😉
I must say, I enjoyed Parth blushing even more, 'cause I like domineering girls, LOL. 😳 Vidushi sitting on him 🤣🤣 I love that Vidushi is the dominatrix in their relationship and Parth is the scandalized beau.

Randhir's 2 month challenge means that Parth is also in for the short term. I just hope he doesn't end up hurting Vidu too much. Loved how she was affected by his actions in the last chapter. Want to see the same kind of butterflies from Parth's side. And may I ask for a side dish of jealousy, too? 😳

SH CVs may have forgotten the 30 day challenge, and are focusing on the solar panel/water deprived village challenge, but all of you are more than making up for it. The way this story meanders through the whole gamut of emotions- love, anger, embarrassment, guilt, selflessness, physical attraction, confusion is simply WOW!


SIMPLY LOVE THE STORY!! And now that I've read it, I'm hungry for updates. I want more! (Vidushi Style)

Take a bow. ⭐️👏


Thanks a Lottt.. 😃.. I am glad you loved the domineering Vidushi.. 😆 and the digs she takes on Parth.. Will try to incorporate as stronger Vidushi as I can.. 😳
Yep, Ash and Shreya have changed the story in the beautiful way, by bringing the surprising twist of 60 days and making both the sides equal respectively... 👏

Uff.. hope I can live up to your expectations.. 😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
I can't tell you how it feels to read my name there.I don't even know if I truly desrve it. *I'm overwhelmed* Ash...🤗
Coming to the update..!
Back bench romance..Hayee
Noo..I thought Vidu was smarter than that. He just tricked her to get an extention. He got it really easy. I wanted him to beg for the extention..!!!😆
Aww...he found her adorable.Dil khush ho gaya. 😃
I loved the update. 😃
Edited by --aimy-- - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
wow,amazing👏, loved it,thank you for such a beautiful update😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
ITS AWSMMM 👏 JUST LUVD IT... PLZZZ DO PM ME 👍🏼 WHUN U GUYS UPDATE NXT... 😊


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Posted: 10 years ago
really good..
challange...
interesting...

update soon..
do pm me plz
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Extremely Sorry for the late update.. This part is dedicated to Shree and Rae.. Both the birthday girls. Hope this turns out to be a worthy gift from my side.. 😕


CHAPTER 6

Try Try Till You Succeed

"Come again?" Parth said with a clenched jaw and a borderline temper.

"Hmmm??" Vidushi looked at him with mouth stuffed with spring roll.

"Arrghh.. Finish it off first", he said shaking his head.

"Hmm kya kahaa tumne?" Vidushi managed to speak in between finishing it up.

"Maine kahaa?.. YOU said something about my Talents" He snapped.

"Ohh.. That.. Yep, basketball, loyal friendship, capable captain, good human and you SUCK BIGTIME at being a boyfriend" she shrugged stuffing another spring roll.

"What??!! How dare.. Aur tum kitna khaati ho Vidushi?" Parth got distracted from his question as Vidushi had taken another spring roll on her plate.

"Hmmm??" Vidushi said stuffing it in her mouth.

"Arrrghhh.. Finish it off first", he said getting super pissed at her overstuffing love for Chinese food.

"Hmmm.." She nodded her head.

"Band karo ye hmm... hmmm. Kam se kam do spring rolls ke beech saans to lo." He said as she was again reaching to have another one on her plate.

"VIDUSHIII.. Mere liye bas ek spring roll.. Saare khaa gayee tum", he accussed her, baffled.

"Kashyap ji, Aapke paas bas ek life line bachi hai", Vidushi laughed as she imitated the KBC moment.

"I can't believe this.. Tum 4 sentences ke beech mein 3 spring rolls thoons gayee. Moti ho jaaogi tum", he said finally eating the spring roll.

"Hence Proved, You SUCK at being a boyfriend", she said getting off the chair.

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"Ouchh..", Vidushi squealed as Parth had pulled her back making her sit on his lap. Pushing aside the plates, he yanked her face towards him with an angry glare. He was bearing her for the sake of his friends and she was hell bent on making him loose.

"Come again?", he gritted with a sharp pull that pressed their noses together. Holding his glare, she exhaled against his lips and snuggled his nose with hers. Parth's breathe faltered and his grip in her hair tightened with the intensity in her eyes that now clouded his brain. His lips shivered in unexpected thrill as Vidushi looked at them. His gaze darkened as she narrowed her eyes at him and smirked.

"You.Suck.At.Being.A.Boyfriend."... Vidushi's lips parted in a sigh as Parth kissed the corner of her lips.

Faintly brushing her lips, he looked at her and hushed, "Even Now?"

"Hell.Yes", Vidushi sighed. And with that Parth merged their lips into a torturing slow kiss. Stroking her chin with his thumb, he parted and brushed her inner lip with an intension to irritate her with the slow space. But with her, his every intension backfired. Vidushi responded by sharply pulling his lower lip and that screwed him up. Groaning in frustration, he angled her face and pulled her into an open mouthed kiss. Venting out all the unexplained frustration into the kiss, he kissed her aggressively. Unexplained for she, for some reason, infuriated him, made him uneasy, would take him to an edge and would always tip him off.

"Mmm", Parth growled in anger and held her face firmly, stopping Vidushi from breaking the kiss. Vidushi clutched his arms tightly trying to catch her breath. As her nails dug deeper, Parth broke the kiss. Eyes loaded with passion and breathe mingled with desperation, he cussed "Damn You Vidushi" and bit her chin hard. Tipping her head back, he slided his lips down her arched neck before engulfing her into a passionate hug. Taking in her scent, his senses, for some unknown reason, relaxed.

Unknown myriad of emotions engulfed him as Vidushi tightened the hug and stroked his hair at the nape. Need of approval and praise overtook him and he eagerly whispered, "Even Now?" Breaking apart, he looked at Vidushi with desperate eyes. At this moment, all that mattered was her answer. His heart thumped as Vidushi's lips brushed his ear, "YES. Nice Try but you didn't Succeed".

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Vidushi hopped off from his lap and started walking towards the door. Parth followed her with a disoriented mind trying to figure out what saddened him more Her walking away or Her disapproving him?

"Anyway, Thanks for the date. The food was nice. Night." Vidushi said pulling over her hoodie and reaching for the door. And his mind answered "BOTH"

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Vidushi gasped as she felt Parth's palm against her stomach. Her grip on the door tightened as her back thudded lightly with his chest. Pulling down her hoodie, Parth stroked her knuckles while kissing her ear. Loosing herself to his touch, she let go of the door and sighed as she felt his lips nibbling her ear lobe.

"Where I fail as a boyfriend? Tell Me." He whispered taking them closer to the door and bolting it. Vidushi moaned lightly as he kissed her neck. She managed to speak as he bit her pulse, "Figure.. and.. Calorie.. consciousss ... guyz .. SUCK.. aaah.. Big time".

Vidushi smiled as Parth turned her around and looked at her with a murderous rage. "What did you just say?", he gritted. Fanning his anger to a volcano level, she smiled and said unflinchingly, "Figure and Calorie conscious guyz SUCK big time. Boyfriends like YOU love.. But they only LOVE their girlfriend's FIGURE."

"How dare you Vidushi?.. This is what you think about me?"

"Actually.. YES"

And that blasted the volcano. Pushing her against the door, Parth held her hands in his iron grip and took her lips in a ruthless kiss. Biting her lower lip hard, he crushed her wrists more as her words whiplashed him. Smiling into the kiss, she parted her lips and responded with equal fervor. As she responded, the same vortex engulfed Parth and he let go of her wrists cupping her face.

"You think I am so shallow? I'll love you even if you become triple of what you are now." He said earnestly.

"YES.. Triple size and still in love with me??!!.. Ha.. Filmy line. LIAR", she smirked dismissing the honesty that shone in his eyes.

Parth growled and mashed their lips again. First of all she was being difficult and on top of it she was being judgmental about him. Sucking her upper lip, he rasped, "I said those words because I thought you would be someone conscious about your figure. Normally girls are."

"TchTch Tch.. Another point where you SUCK. You thought... That's OK.. But you thought so wronggg.. And then you keep your girl friend in the same bracket with other girls. You are getting worse and worse.

Parth Kashyap... I, Vidushi Kumar, sleep like no one's watching and I EAT like no one's around. I don't kill my desires to attain perfection."

With that she pushed away Parth, who just stood there numb and gob smacked by those words. Opening the door, she walked out of the lab. As she walked out, his sanity returned like a thunder struck him.

What just happened? Shit, I kissed her?.. I'll love you.. Bloody hell.. Where did that come from?

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"Parth" Vidushi's voice came from the corridor. Forgetting everything Parth rushed out of the lab and stopped as Vidushi stood at a distance with her arms crossed over. His breathing accelerated as she looked strong as well as beautiful standing below the bulb.

"I thought as a custom, We should exchange some good night pleasantries. So, apart from the food, the whole date was a disaster. YOU being the biggest disaster. But then, we have 2 months now. Let's see, if you can even earn a Diploma degree in being my boyfriend.", She smirked raising her chin.

"Till then.. Try Try Till you SUCCEED", she challenged showing him a royal thumbs down. With that, she stuffed her hands into her back pockets and walked out of the lab block swaying her hips.


Edited by Moony87 - 10 years ago

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