The unknown son (An Arjuna-Iravan FF) Part 8B-Page 23 - Page 19

Originally posted by: vaikartana

Tia I am extremely sorry dear.I had read both the updates.And I thought I commented but only yesterday I realised that I didnt.I am really sorry for being so late.

The first part carries a feel of anxiousness.I mean the reader can sense that some danger is ahead.I am very happy to say that you have grown beautifully as a writer.Not that you were not one before.But you excels yourself.You expresses complex and deep emotions of a mother in such less and beautiful words.Loved it dear.

And the ending was so emotional yet beautiful.I loved the way you described the battles.Short yet detailed.And Ulupi's reaction was brilliantly portrayed.The way you described it was sombre and reflected the purest feeling called love.And Arjun's reaction brought tears into my eyes.I really felt sad for the mother and the son

And thankyou so much dear for giving me one of the best stories I read here. Iravan was a character I was least bothered about.It was only through your story that I started loving him.And with this beautiful story Iravan and you both earned a space in my heart.Love you dear.Please update the other stories too.Once again sorry for being too late

Originally posted by: Meself

And so the mighty falls never to wake again! Iravan...what a magnificent puzzle yet every bit of a true hero. He could have laid back and not participated in the war; for there was no need. Uloopi wasn't a cherished queen, he himself wasn't a desired son...yet this brave lad decided to mountain the odds and fight a battle that wasn't his. His emd is tragic and perhaps a bit gory as well and heartening for even at that moment he remained the unknown son for the mighty Sabyasachi!!

It was a beautiful fiction amd I am glad that I had a chance to read it all. Iravan was that unsung hero in the epic who failed to make his mark as prominent as the others! Beautifully penned down thoughts it were dear! Hoping to read more from you soon!

Originally posted by: taruna40

sad and awesome ending to Iravan

loved the way u have written it

Originally posted by: Patrarekha

sorry was busy in my school duties tia , and then after reading i was not in position to write. how can i say anything when i am visualizing son's head falls on mother's lap? i ran out of words and then the Peshawar incident completely drained me, so was not able to comment , i know always that Iravan's story was sad but i was not attached to him as i am with Abhimanyu but through your writing i fell in love with Iravan , so his ending was heart wrenching to me, i always hated Alambusha for killing Iravan by deceit but reading this i badly felt an urge to see how Ghatotkacha kills Alambusha, i can't just imagine what was going on Uloopi's heart , destiny never gave her anything only had taken from her , her beloved never loved her , only resort of her life now is snatched away from her , no i can't imagine what is she feeling just like i cant imagin whats going in those parents heart whose children are massacred in Peswar attack, Ghatotkach and Iravan both came to fight a battle only for their fathers no way it was related to them , still Ghatotkach gets some mentions for different reasons but Iravan none, coz Arjun was much aloof and you penned Arjun's aloofness convincingly, but Arjun did mourn Iravan's death when he came to know. but your last ending was quite raw and intense without getting emotional you hit the right cord but i would love to read Arjun's reactions after knowing about Iravan's demise.