The unknown son (An Arjuna-Iravan FF) Part 8B-Page 23 - Page 12

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Posted: 11 years ago

I have received a lot of requests to update this FF. So I updated an additional chapter. I shall post the war sequence after 25th Sept. Hope you like this update.

Part 7- Dark Omens

Iravan was in his tent putting on his armor to get ready for the upcoming day of the war. A few rays of Sunlight were coming in through the gap in the shutter of the tent. Looking around he saw two childish eyes peeping into the tent through the gap.

"Garbha, come in.", Srutsom shouted in his husky and bold voice.

A boy who looked of the age of twelve years came in. His face was quite childish but he moved with maturity. He was quite regal in his looks with lotus eyes, dark skin and a healthy body. He was dressed up as a warrior.

"Pranipat Jyesht Bhrata Prativindhya. An army of odd looking creatures have come here and are searching for someone by the name of Iravan. Mata told me I will find that man in this tent."

"Rochangarbha, you have not met Jyesht Bhrata Iravan yet!" Abhimanyu said as Iravan came forward to meet the boy.

"I am Iravan. Do take me to the people who are searching for me." Iravan said.

"Ji jyesht Bhrata. Do follow me."

Iravan followed Rochangarbha to the bank of the river. He was intrigued by the boy of such a tender age fighting the war. Rochangarbha seemed to be a boy of undefeatable spirit.

"Who are you?" Iravan asked Rochangarbha.

"I? I am son of Devi Rochana and Rajkumar Arjun, youngest among my cousins. I am going to be a great archer just like Pitashri."

Iravan laughed at his brother's last line. Iravan saw a little of him in this young boy. Somehow he thought this boy seemed to be kept in shadow just like him. It was a tough time Iravan's mother had gone through after her marriage with his father. Marriage of a widow was not taken lightly by the Naga society. His mother had to face numerous insults and there was a time when she along with her son were excommunicated. They had traveled to many places during that hateful time. It was while they were travelling they had met Chitrangada and Babruvahan. Iravan had spent early part of his life in Manipur learning war skills from his mother along with Babruvahan. It was a long time after which his grandfather had come to take them home after settling matters with the council. It was even after they returned, Iravan heard people speaking behind his back. They scrutinized his mother. It took them a long time to gain their stand back in society. Iravan had asked his mother once," Mata, is it because of me that you are called this bad names by the society?"

"No dear. Our society is very backward in thinking. They do not let its women take a step out of the line. But do not fear. As long as we are together nothing can give me pain."

As Iravan reached the river bank he saw an army of Nagas bowing to him.

The commander spoke," I have come with a message from your mother. She has asked you to return immediately with us"

"Why? Is she all right? Has something grave happened?"Iravan asked fearful of the answer.

"Your mother is very much in pain. She saw dark omens. She is fearful for your life."

Iravan said turning his back to the army "My mother knows very well that fear of death does not suit a warrior. Tell her to be strong. I cannot leave my father now. I have already staked my life I this battlefield. If I am to lose, then I am to lose. No one can turn his face from death."

Rochangarbha was looking at his elder brother with appreciation.

"But... " The commander stammered.

"I do not want to hear any buts and ifs. My mother had trained me to become a warrior. I shall not disgrace my profession by going back now."

The commander sighed."We knew that you shall not come back. We had to try. You come back or not, your mother has given us the responsibility to protect you. We shall fulfill it. We shall fight along with you."

"I don't think Mamashri Drishtadyumna will mind additional help." Rochangarbha piped out.


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Posted: 11 years ago
nice update...thnks for the pm
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Posted: 11 years ago
Nice update :-)
bt i dint knw abt any1 named rochangarva, arjun's son :s, is he ur imagination?
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Posted: 11 years ago
Well done Tia.You introduced Rochanagarbha very naturally.I love reading on him.And the way you described the problems women face due to outdated societal norms were perfect.And I am feeling sadcfor Iravan and his father.They just met and soon will be parted.Cruel fate
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Posted: 11 years ago
Loved Your Portrayal Of Uloopi's Worries And Bad Omens ! And I Really Liked Rochangrabha !! And The Last Line Was Too Cute !!!
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: SujaLuvsMayur

Nice update :-)
bt i dint knw abt any1 named rochangarva, arjun's son :s, is he ur imagination?


Ummm...actually I also got to know about the character very recently from Patrarekha's thread and later from Aru di's (Rosefairy) story. Aru di posted a citation from MB where Rochangarbha is mentioned as Ruchiparvan-
Then Kriti's son, Ruchiparvan, mounted on his car, quickly rushed against Bhagadatta, scattering showers of arrows and advancing like the
Destroyer himself. Then Bhagadatta, that ruler of the hilly regions, possessed of beautiful limbs, despatched Ruchiparvan with a
p. 62
straight shaft to Yama's abode. 1Upon the fall of the heroic Ruchiparvan, Subhadra's son

So, he is not anyone of my imagination.
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Posted: 11 years ago
wow nice update.. thanks.. in love with iraavan's character. will wait for ur next update. though i know its going to be sad & heartbreaking
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Posted: 11 years ago
Finally an update of this story after a long time 😊

Loved ur approach for uniting Arjun's two unknown sons - Iravan & Rochanagarbha in this update. I came to know about Rochanagarbha from RoseFairy's OS on Rochanagarbha and u have beautifully sketched the two characters together - the eldest (Iravan) & youngest (Rochanagarbha) sons of Arjun in the most critical & gloomy war situation.

Iravan-Grabha convo was very sweet 😊

The early phase of Iravan and his mother's life - their struggles with the Naga society was very emotional. Both Uloopi & Iravan were individually very strong & determined to survive those insults & harsh situations.

U have mentioned one line -
" Marriage of a widow was not taken lightly by the Naga society." Well I think Marriage of a widow is still not accepted in some parts of the society. Though thousands of years has passed but this insular thinking is yet to be overcome by our society.

Loved the way Iravan has answered his commander. He is a warrior & will bind by it & stay with his father in the most critical phase of war even if it would mean death to him.

Very Nice update. Post ur next part soon. 😊

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: hpatgiri

Finally an update of this story after a long time 😊

Loved ur approach for uniting Arjun's two unknown sons - Iravan & Rochanagarbha in this update. I came to know about Rochanagarbha from RoseFairy's OS on Rochanagarbha and u have beautifully sketched the two characters together - the eldest (Iravan) & youngest (Rochanagarbha) sons of Arjun in the most critical & gloomy war situation.

Iravan-Grabha convo was very sweet 😊

The early phase of Iravan and his mother's life - their struggles with the Naga society was very emotional. Both Uloopi & Iravan were individually very strong & determined to survive those insults & harsh situations.

U have mentioned one line -
" Marriage of a widow was not taken lightly by the Naga society." Well I think Marriage of a widow is still not accepted in some parts of the society. Though thousands of years has passed but this insular thinking is yet to be overcome by our society.

Loved the way Iravan has answered his commander. He is a warrior & will bind by it & stay with his father in the most critical phase of war even if it would mean death to him.

Very Nice update. Post ur next part soon. 😊

Hemangi thanks for such a detailed reply.
Your statement is quite true. Modern society still sees widow marriage as unceremonious. These days people even pass rude comments on men who remarry. I sometimes wonder if our society has actually modernized. 100 men were killed at that time to revenge Panchali. These days they hv started blaming women for whatever happens. We are more biased than people were in those days. After all, why not? We are living in Kalyug.
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Posted: 11 years ago
very nice update and i loved the way you introduced Rochana so nicely...I wish they had showed all these characters in SB but never mind we are getting a good feel for all of them, thanks to your beautifully written OS. Please continue when u get time

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