ArHi: TS-Day to be Remembered...{Completed} Shot-3(B) #Pg-10 #13-7-14 - Page 4

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Posted: 11 years ago
#31
Lovely shots.😃 My favourite was Arnav's POV.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#32
good..thank you for the PM..👍🏼
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Posted: 11 years ago
#33
Wow wow
Super narrating
Loved
But do we really need to read the devil POV..anyway need to know abt arshi so it is fine
But loves the update
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Posted: 11 years ago
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hey baby! u described arnav's feeling so well! hehehe arnav and khushi both r mad! well written sweety!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Lovely shots... 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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loved the update as always
Arnavs feelings were beautifully penned down 😳
waiting for the next part
thanks for the PM
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Posted: 11 years ago
#37


firstly my darling sravs, my cuddle cakes, Congo on becoming a senior member...I am so so happy for you...after all ham ek biraadari ke ho gae...





and now about this TS,

God Sravs i cant tell you how i first felt reading the title of this new ts of yours...Dont judge a story by its title, I GOT IT TODAY

i mean come on, i thought you are surely writing any historical kind of thriller story...day to be remembered, doesnt it mean that some thing very eventful had happened one particular say affecting everyone's life associated with it

then i started reading and trust me, mujhko zorrr ka jhatka laga....hailaa, yeh toh kuch aur hi tha...it about an unpopular khushi and a popular arnav and THE DAY is prom

wowww, to maine jo kuch bhi socha sab dhara ka dhara reh gaya...but once a started with it, i really enjoyed reading each line..

and the best part is double interpretation of same events...khushi ne jo socha, arnav ne usko alag hi percieve kia... especially that one part when both were dancing and arnav was staring at someone behind her

i cant tell you kitna gussa aaya mujhe wo padhkar by khushi's pov. how dare he glance at sheetal when khushi is in his arms, man toh kia uska khoon kar du, but then in arnav's pov i realized his intent and got it

but still mujhe bura laga when he felt enraged seeing sheetal all over a boy use kya fark padhna chahiye haina?

anyways sweetu, idea bohot acha hai and the start is amazing too. my arnie brought her to a parlour for make over...hayeee !!!!!!


i want the third part soon, toh jadli update kar warna maar khaaegi, samjhi

ps sorry 'gayab' hone ke liye...i was busy yaar


with immense love, puppy and jhappi
yours ,
cc aka simmi





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Posted: 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Scroll up for Part (A)

PART-B

Well it was, to our both surprise, Tommy and Ansh together. According to them, they met in the parking lot below the flat and made it to the door together as both their dates are in the same place.

With my hand wrapped around Ansh's arm and Clar's with Tommy's we made our way to the vehicles. It would be obvious that I'm going to get rid of Clar for some time, but then the same time I'm struck with this guy too. Won't I get any alone time? Well, probably now I guess I won't. How sad of me!!

I know this day is going to be pretty much tiresome, not only physically but mentally too. I don't know how, but I just knew it.

Reaching the college was not something too much time consuming as it's in just some less than 20 minutes reach. Normally that would be me myself driving to the college. I do have a car, if that's not obvious by now.

"So, free tonight?" I heard him ask his eyes roaming all over my body.

Well, that's where I get all conscious and disgusting. Don't they think anything other than this? Are boys always like this, acting like hormonal dogs? Apparently not, this answer from me is after meeting the certain someone I have been mentioning from some time before.

Who am I to ignore the obvious though? I love it too. Yeah, I feel disgusted and used but at the same time I like it too, true to myself.

"Yes" I replied with no emotions on my face. My life was ruined as much as it should be.

"After party, my home?" he asked obviously getting closer now. What do you expect from him after asking me out for a night?

I nodded before he roughly crashed his lips to mine his hands all over my body which brings in the tingles all over my dress, negative though.

Making way to the party I tried to move away from him, as long as possible. But I felt it difficult with him holding me tight by my waist not even letting me to at least get any drink to wet my dried throat.

Boys can be stupid's I know but I do as hell hate when boys tried to be bossy and possessive around me. And that truly snaps my temper.

"Let go of me Idiot, I need to get a drink" I half whispered and yelled to him not even minding if his bunch of idiot friends will listen or not.

He seemed to widen his eyes for a second and then left me to go my way. The second he left me I felt like been released from a prison after what seems like some ages. That's exaggeration, but you got my point right?

Making my way to the drinks counter I ordered a cocktail. My college can spend on these things. Posh you remember? That's my college.

Sipping as slow as I could, I tried partying my alone time. No my minions around, no that pathetic of my prom partner, I'm just with me myself. This is so rear these days that I'm getting some alone time.

But looks like my stars today, again, aren't ready to show me pity and have some lone time.

When I was just about to turn around to the bar slab when something caught my eye. Probably, I shouldn't have turned as that's the same thing I was dreading on seeing today. But as common as it is, curiosity gets my best.

Turning around I saw Arnav all royal and dashing in his gentlemen attire, Charcoal three piece suit and all. He's smiling and time for me to accept, that's something so real on his face to miss, and very rare he smiles though.

Beside him I saw The Nerd which almost had my eyes popping out. Yeah, true, I know that would be Khushi, the nerd, with him today. Remember I said about I guess I know who he's going to be with? Yup! I guessed it is her. Fool he is, thought I wouldn't know if he won't tell me. I too have eyes and they too can catch the obvious. The way he keeps staring the way she goes and that dreamy expression on his face, do you think that's something easy to miss? No not at all, particularly not on always poker faced Arnav.

Ok I was distracted...from what? Yeah, the nerd right? Before today I could have betted whole my wardrobe on Khushi cannot look the gorgeous in real sense. It was pretty hard and rare to see the nerd actually peeking out of her book less we would think about her caring about her looks and dresses.

And now, she's looking just...WOW!! She's absolutely stunning in all her knee length dress glory. The watermelon color Charmeuse cocktail dress was fitting her perfectly at apt places still covering her modestly. I bet this is Arnav's choice. I'm sure, even now, that girl wouldn't have done that by herself.

Just notice, the girl I am feeling like this about how 'The Nerd' is looking then just imagine how the guys would think? Well yup, I caught some staring at her too, but all those with perverted eyes not one like actually appreciating her change today.

But the obviously careful watcher in me, obviously in case of Arnav after I actually broke up with me, also noticed how Khushi's hand was strapped on Arnav's arm but that's not what I'm talking about the other supporting hand Arnav has on her hand on his arm. Well, that says something right?

That's the time my jealousy took time to hit me hard. Yeah, the observance of me made me pay to make myself jealous seeing them together. True the word, demons a time, hard to fight back.

I felt angry, sadness and jealousy rushing through me blood with force equal to the water stream falling from above the top. And this is the time I like to gladly blame my parents for making me like this.

Gulping almost a more of 5 to 6 glasses of alcohol kept before me, I jumped out of my seat. I am swaying by now I knew because of the way everyone around me are moving in weird direction even I don't know.

Standing for sometime before that nerd, a little away from her, and watching Arnav for some time, just for a single chance, for which the chances are so low I know, I waited. But he never noticed me even. Instead, he took that nerd to the dance floor and that too with a smile and so much care.

Did I ever tell you how much of a gentle men Arnav actually is? Probably I didn't. Even when he just opted for me for reasons unknown to be his namesake, girl friend he took care of me too well that for the first time I know what it feels like to be cared.

To be true I still regret losing him even though I try to pacify myself that I am not a capable person to get a man like him. But who am I kidding? I do still feel all wrong and bad for losing him. But I don't have any chance or I wouldn't use any chance to get him back too, I swore to myself.

Seeing Arnav and that nerd together dancing and getting close I suddenly felt burning sensation in my throat, yeah, probably my insides burning with jealousy.

Dragging the almost as sober as me Ansh with me to the dance floor, just besides those two, I started dancing, dancing in the sense cozily. And Ansh was not someone to stop me, do you think? He was in fact enjoying, the bloody prick he is.

I, with a hard effort, pushed back the voice screaming in my head saying 'doing the same last time you lost him and doing the same now would do nothing but make you regret later more'. I just didn't care to acknowledge it.

I caught Arnav's eye before Arnav distractedly looked down at Khushi. My breath hitched seeing Arnav inching towards Khushi. Not in the perverted way but like with emotions running in his eyes.

And then my eyes stung seeing them kissing. That's when I felt my heart being stabbed, like it's being pricked by hundreds of needles. And soon I heard the last thing that made me lose my almost losing senses.

He confessed. He said 'I Love You Khushi'. It was pretty hard to miss as I was catching all this with his lip moments. The music around was blaring making it even hard to hear the person before, if they speak normally.

And yet again he repeated the same words when after a while I noticed the big smile that bloomed on his lips before again kissing her with all his passion and the same emotions. But the only thing now is the before anxiousness in his eyes now replaced with happiness. He was happy, his eyes were twinkling.

That's it even before I knew what was happening, and all, I was being dragged by Ansh to his car and obviously the night is going to be long than it already had been for me.

I can do nothing but accept my fate. My karma's taking revenge for all my previous deeds and just by this, this day has got to be the remembered day of mine, until...until I don't know when.

My all demons a time, arriving the same day, made today the worst possible day of my life which is hard to forget even if I wish so. Gulping down the tears threatening to fall I closed my eyes resting against his car seat, I'm in now. Life is not always a dream and bed of roses, it also have thrones that hurts. And my life is now one heck of an example of the same.

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Sample's of dresses I have made Khushi, Arnav and Sheetal wear here 😉 😆

Khushi's Dress:

Arnav's Suit:


Sheetal's Dress:

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So finally I completed it. See I showed the bitchy-ness of Sheetal a little too.

Please do tell me what do you think of this now. I would love to know, as this is the very first of me of writing in first person's and I do really suck at writing them, I know.

Anyways read, enjoy, like and comment.

With loads of love,

Edited by Lucky_arshi - 10 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Sravsuuu, update jaldi kar😛

***Edited***


ufff, yeh ladki ...kyaa karu mai iska??

tune toh puri story ka angle hi change kar daala. here i was expecting the interpretation of same scene (that you described in first 2 updates) with a third person's view point. (apparently, the third person here is our lover boy's fake ex girlfreind)


I actually was looking forward to see her in all of her bitchiful glory. but no, madam ke dimaag me kya khichdi pakti hai, wahi jaane right?😉😉

you made her a sensible and sensitive character and OMG she isnt evil. thats breaking news
😆😆😆

well this unexpected twist is also nice. bechaari, haalaat ki maari, dukhiyaari, besahaaraa komal si ladki. now that you started i want to read her entire pov. and her chamchi is so irritating i tell you. get rid of her, SOON



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well, you literally got rid of that irritating chamchi of hers haa? thats like a good girl. this update was complicated. VERY VERY complicated.

I mean for a person like me, imagining a person like sheeta, offering herself to a guy she disgusts only because she likes to do that umm (u know) and even then she curse all boys for having such mentality. i mean, like she herself needs that for her entertainment and release and with if boys wants to have their fill, she feel its disgusting. thats horrible yaar and so pathetic.


coming to the next part,
her observance of khushi...no no, the NERD!!! hmmm that was very interesting. lagaa madam ko zoro ka jhatka haa? thanks to MJHT (miley jab hum tum) i can imagine our chulbuli khushi as a nerd and geeky boring student warna ufff *deep sigh*...khuda bachhaye


the dresses you selected were pretty cool and atlast you showed the same scened with 3rd person's view point too. gr8 ha bestie. meri baato ka kuch zyada hi asar nahi ho raha tujhpar.


aggar aisa hai to lets meet tomorrow at the radisson's sharp 8 o clock. aaegi naa??😆😆😆 *cheekily*


i know mai bakwaas kar rahi hu but i cant help it. tujhe aur us gandi honey bunch ko chedne me jo maza hai wo aur kisi cheez me kaha😉😉😉

btw maine bataya kya how much i love SHEETAL'S reaction to arnav's confession for khushi. aaah!! that was so soothing man, i cant tell you. but i felt bad, she isnt as bad and bitch to bilkul nahi.

and she also deserves someone speical. bechari had a sad past and someone to help her heal must there.

what say buddy, jo jaaye DTBR season 2😉😉😉😉????

just kidding haa, you know mai koi story nahi padhti without arshi as leads

all in all a very nice update and i enjoyed your thoughfulness...and i loved the story as a whole

see you gave me the deadline to unress before tomorrow morning and i did it tonight itself.

dekh kitna pyaar karti hu tujhse
. 😛😛





love you My cuddle cakes

with love,
your CC
Edited by simmi-arshi - 11 years ago

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