ArHi: TS-Day to be Remembered...{Completed} Shot-3(B) #Pg-10 #13-7-14

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Anisha

@-Aniisha-

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#61

wonderful update

loved the ending

thanks for the PM

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Sravya/Sravs

@...Champ...

Voyager

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Posted: 11 years ago

#62

Originally posted by: simmi-arshi
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Sravsuuu, update jaldi kar😛

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ufff, yeh ladki ...kyaa karu mai iska??

tune toh puri story ka angle hi change kar daala. here i was expecting the interpretation of same scene (that you described in first 2 updates) with a third person's view point. (apparently, the third person here is our lover boy's fake ex girlfreind)

I actually was looking forward to see her in all of her bitchiful glory. but no, madam ke dimaag me kya khichdi pakti hai, wahi jaane right?😉😉

you made her a sensible and sensitive character and OMG she isnt evil. thats breaking news 😆😆😆

well this unexpected twist is also nice. bechaari, haalaat ki maari, dukhiyaari, besahaaraa komal si ladki. now that you started i want to read her entire pov. and her chamchi is so irritating i tell you. get rid of her, SOON

MY SHARE of Comments for part B -

well, you literally got rid of that irritating chamchi of hers haa? thats like a good girl. this update was complicated. VERY VERY complicated.

I mean for a person like me, imagining a person like sheeta, offering herself to a guy she disgusts only because she likes to do that umm (u know) and even then she curse all boys for having such mentality. i mean, like she herself needs that for her entertainment and release and with if boys wants to have their fill, she feel its disgusting. thats horrible yaar and so pathetic.

coming to the next part,
her observance of khushi...no no, the NERD!!! hmmm that was very interesting. lagaa madam ko zoro ka jhatka haa? thanks to MJHT (miley jab hum tum) i can imagine our chulbuli khushi as a nerd and geeky boring student warna ufff *deep sigh*...khuda bachhaye

the dresses you selected were pretty cool and atlast you showed the same scened with 3rd person's view point too. gr8 ha bestie. meri baato ka kuch zyada hi asar nahi ho raha tujhpar.

aggar aisa hai to lets meet tomorrow at the radisson's sharp 8 o clock. aaegi naa??😆😆😆 *cheekily*

i know mai bakwaas kar rahi hu but i cant help it. tujhe aur us gandi honey bunch ko chedne me jo maza hai wo aur kisi cheez me kaha😉😉😉

btw maine bataya kya how much i love SHEETAL'S reaction to arnav's confession for khushi. aaah!! that was so soothing man, i cant tell you. but i felt bad, she isnt as bad and bitch to bilkul nahi.

and she also deserves someone speical. bechari had a sad past and someone to help her heal must there.

what say buddy, jo jaaye DTBR season 2😉????

just kidding haa, you know mai koi story nahi padhti without arshi as leads

all in all a very nice update and i enjoyed your thoughfulness...and i loved the story as a whole

see you gave me the deadline to unress before tomorrow morning and i did it tonight itself.

dekh kitna pyaar karti hu tujhse. 😛😛

love you My cuddle cakes

with love,
your CC

Mein toh tumse pyaar kiye bina reh nehi sakti...kya bolti ho CC?? 😉

And about Sheetal's that particular thing which you say, It's just you know, self contradiction? It's the same with her too. She's like Err...it. But at the same time loathes it. So she is kind of cliched character which is hard to determine.

And about her reaction to Khushi and Arnav's confession, well I enjoyed that too. Chahe jaha pe bhi usse mein acchi dikhau...waha par dikha nehi saki. I like Sheetal actually fuming. Phir bhi the bechari she is 😉

Anyways DTBR season 2 is far away from reach CC. No idea at all about what's going to happen in that. Agar chahe toh tum hi liko 👍🏼 Mein tume nehi rokungi 😛 Bestie jo ho meri haq hain akhir tumhe 😳

And about the update being as you asked, to be true CC wo update jab likh rahi thi my mind was roaming around your words and then I believed that Sheetal had to be alone to get her feeling out. So we matched and so the update as per your choice too 😃 see I'm intelligent

Aww...again mein tumse pyaar karti hu CC...bahottt zyada.

With lots of love, ❤️

yours new CB 😉 🤗

Edited by Lucky_arshi - 11 years ago

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_Chaverah_

@_Chaverah_

Dazzler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#63

Finally after ages I'v got the time to read this! And hun, its amazing!!!

Firstly lemme apologize for being such a sucker in following and commenting back on your works.. I'm not gonna present any excuses, bash me up hun, I'm ready to take it.. :)

And now the three-shot.. As I'v already mentioned earlier, it really surprises me with the unique ways you come up.. Honestly, a single occasion being told from 3 POVs and the story before it and the promises after is not a regular thing you come across.. And that hooked me to ya!

I truly liked the Khushi, coz, yeah, Nerds, as they say, though exceed in academics, are somewhere down the line a bit too insecure (I was) when it comes to hanging out or making friends.. And when it comes to the popular Prince Charming Stud of the college, I couldn't expect her to be any better.. You'v moulded her in the best way..

The physical make over, though is impeccable and dreamlike, it is the emotional make over that had me awing.. Its too thrilling.. Things like this are always a treat to read.. I loved her journey from a secret crush, admirer and a silent lover to a hopeful friend, a jealous yet helpless girl, a true caring soul, a confused , walking on the thin line of 'does he- or - does he not' lady and finally a woman in love, who got back her true love.. The journey was beautiful..

Now, Sheetal is a warming twist.. Its commendable, I say... Its true when they say that every person is a perfect mix of ying&yang.. And I loved the way you showed it.. Its true that most of the arrogant, spoilt people are actually the lone and suffered kids, the ones that had to see the brutality of broken families or fake families..

I like the way you showed how she's burried deep into the vortex she's got into as a escapade.. Something she loaths but accepts.. I loved the way you'v maintained the complexity.. Its sad to see she could make the better of herself but its also true that it aint as easy as we say... A lot of patience, love and courage is needed.. And I appreciate you for bringing into light a complexity as this...

But in all this, its her respect for Arnav, her craving, her hope and her pain.. I just could be empathetic.. Its her POV of Arnav and Khushi that I really loved.. And her defeat, or rather a bit too easily succumbed into the vortex nature which makes me feel bad again..

Ab Arnav ke baare mein main kya kahoon? Ek tho I'm highly biased.. Us ke upar you paint him as the perfect Prince charming.. Maar daalogi kya? I loved it, truly yaar.. Every bit of it.. His gentle-manliness, his confused state, his fears, apprehensions, back up plans and every single thing of him.. Aur haan, I must give you a hi5 for the comic sense in you, truly! It'd be an understatement if I'd say that he's like someone walking straight out of a chick-flick romantic film...

I loved his first impressions, his struggle, his confidence and above all, the honesty and the determination to never let go of his love not to take off her trust in him... True man, huh? Adorable! Well, the makeover, the dance and the confrontation was bang on! I loved his irritation at Pam and his retorts, hilarious! And then comes the kiss! Aww! Cute!!!

All in all, amazing work hun! All the best for the upcoming ones.. :)