Sandhya,
Never got to respond on the story due to busy schedule. But I started reading your story last month and absolutely loved it. You said this is your first story but what I am amazed at is the command you have in telling your story how you want with no apprehensions around not touching ArShi moments for first handful chapters and then making your readers glue to your story. There are several small moments thru many of your chapters where I felt how you are using your words and statements so aptly and with a careful thought to either build or stick to your characters. I dont remember them now unfortunately to point out for you.
Thanks to Jenny here for recommending your story in one of her FF long time back. I happened to start this few weeks back and liked it very much. Given the crazy schedule I'm going thru, I wondered for couple chapters if I want to proceed further but with Jenny's note and having liked your writing style I went ahead and you have not disappointed me at all. Except the first chapter which piques the readers interest on who is it and what that is about, you started your chapters to depict the friends relation in our minds and quite other things in its own pace you find it apt.
In another instance, there are some recent chapters where everyone was feeling bad for Arnav and I too was in the same mode. I happened to randomly come across a comment from Jenny where she was pointing out about Arnav's insensitivity around asking Khushi to move on after having a complete intimate relationship despite knowing her views, values, her background and his expectations around his own sister. That made me realize what I missed noting it. Anyways, I can understand where Arnav is coming from with his insecurities on bad luck favoring his loved ones if he is around them. In general, mostly men are like that ignorant and forgetful of certain things while a woman can be sensitive and more thoughtful of.
The incident you wrote between Arnav and Nani asking to give his moms bangles to Khushi left my throat heavy. I absolutely loved Arnav there and you for writing that. But what people think to be manageable gets quite different when they come to face the reality. This is what happened when Arnav sees Khushi and NK together. Its not easy for either a man or woman when you love that special someone.
Congratulations for new thread.
Last but not the least, was the pup in your DP yours whom you mentioned of in one of your note? He is cute and my kisses to him. BTW, I loved Shadow in the story and loved the scene where Arnav says to Khushi about alpha male and Shadow/Khushi scenes. You are not writing much about him these days. I know story is outside RM now.
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