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mrignayani

@mrignayani

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Posted: 11 years ago

#461

Just read the 3 chapters...loved the concept...loved the fact that it is a collab...keep it spinning girls...can't wait to read more!

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thumbi

@thumbi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#462

Disha, my girl, you did it!!!!!... So happy for you!!... Loved the chapter especially Arnav's dilemma on how to approach Khushi after breaking her heart after all those years back...You have maintained the breezy nature of storytelling as the authors before you... I agree with many others here - you should write more. 😊

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canapoem

@canapoem

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Posted: 11 years ago

#463

Disha for someone who is writing a story for the first time, you have done an excellent work. Keep writing, you surely are good at it.👏

This update gave a further peek into their past lives. So it was Arnav who ended their relationship. Apparently even after many years they both have still feelings for each other.

The scene where Arnav goes into the forest to look for the source of the light and Khushi following him was describe so well, I could feel that it was literally happening in front of my eyes.

Why did Arnav not tell anyone about it? Waiting to read more.

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ShwetapS

@ShwetapS

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+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#464

Finally caught up with the chapter. Disha, this chapter to me, was like hitting an ace in your debut game. It's always difficult to explain silence they say, but you did it brilliantly through out the chapter, whether it be Arnav's monologue when his spoke of his attraction, the silence there sizzled, the eerie quiet of the forest was slightly spooky, and the past rewind in Arnav's mind was insightful yet was lined with a touch of sadness.

Ofcourse, the duo's warring with words and the burning chemistry was a beautiful part to read, but what I thoroughly enjoyed was them warring with hearts as in the end they both struggled to fight their past. As a reader my heart went out to them, I too felt the slight pang when the guy chose to give her up.

But, wasn't the chapter too short? It ended too soon. :( and to further add to the disappointment was your note. After that super duper debut, you certainly can't say you won't write again. You seem to be natural at it, so keep the flame burning... Keep writing!

But first, Take a bow!

Thanks for the PM...

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rvas

@rvas

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Posted: 11 years ago

#465

chapter 3 was amazing...loved the silences mist in this chapter...things unsaid can take such a toll

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mayabhi

@mayabhi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#466

I love this ff. Its bery intriguing. And i love that its centred around a jungle, Contrary to the usual city and business life. I hope u will tel us in a bit more detail abt their past and y arnav left.

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vgedin

@vgedin

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Posted: 11 years ago

#467

@Chapter 2: Pampam is quirky and Pampam is naughty and Pampam is romantic. I like Joy, I really do. He is like his name :D Then theres Shyam - snakewa indeed. Maha-fishy. Then there past ka blast. Haye.. kya kiss tha! But raat abhi jawaan hai, sunhaane geeton ka saath hai. Me is rubbing hands in excitement 😃

@Chapter 3: Dishuuu 🤗 You must write more. Bas! It didn't seem even for a second that this chapter was from a first time writer. Smooth and perfect! Especially the scene in the forest.. the moment and panic, followed by relief and then the sexual tension. Chaa gayi tum toh! Writing like a pro! I like this Arnav - ASR hai and jungle wala - makes him even more rugged and sexy 😳 Fought against Daddy to do what he believes in.. good! Hope he is able to sort his relationship with his parents in future...

Now now.. gaadi me dono hain, drive abhi baaki hai, raat abhi bhi baaki hai.. Hopefully there is more to come!

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FVhIPVDxsPQ[/YOUTUBE]

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Ishque

@Ishque

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Posted: 11 years ago

#468

Hey you are a great writer. We will be there with you in your ride in the forest with Arnav and khushi.

The concept is great and with the known characters.Would love to read more of your work.

Joy seem to be a nice guy.And khushi seems to be very strong minded,Arnav needs his support system that is khushi.

And i am pretty sure that khushi will get her self as

Indiana Jones and try to solve the mystery.

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shipra.aqua

@shipra.aqua

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Posted: 11 years ago

#469

Awesome story darlings...

U all r working wonderfully together, the story is coming out so well...😛

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Arjuhisis

@Arjuhisis

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Posted: 11 years ago

#470

Originally posted by: Mirabell
<font size="3">Dear Authors/Collaborators
I have been a silent reader of the last three chapters and I have been completely caught up with your plot and characters.

First of all - Kudos to all of you for choosing this very unique setting for your story - Indian Forestry - a forgotten landscape in our post modern psyche..:) .. and your narrative reveals your efforts at your homework and research on this subject... :)

Second - I am impressed with your writing styles - in fact what I find amazing is that while you have each chapter authored by a different person, the narrative style and flow have not changed.. The consistency in voice is quite astounding.. truly worthy of compliments.

Third - Your updates are amazingly frequent.. and for that I thank you. Often, as a reader, I find myself having to reread previous chapters to remind myself of the story thus far and my own place to keep abreast of the story.. your frequent updates keep me interested and focused!

I like your Khushi.. she is bold.. unafraid in her pursuits - of both bad guys and her desire for Arnav.. :) I am not fully acquainted with your Arnav yet.. and I wait for you to lead me through this introduction. :)

What a great collaborative project!
--Mirabell
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Oh wow thats a great comment 👍🏼