~* Faith *~ An Astha - Shlok SS - updated Chapter 9 pg. 51

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niki795

@niki795

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Posted: 11 years ago

#271

awesome update
its quite intense but loved it
the story is not moving slow...I think its needed in this way
totally superb
continue soon
thanks for the pm

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Aishwarya

@Aishaa3

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#272

Astha standng 4 herself 👏 Anjali softens thnk god 😆 ..n do cntinue wid dis pace nly(it is nt at al slow) givng us loads of ashlok scenes 😳 cntinue soon:)

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sravz23

@sravz23

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Posted: 11 years ago

#273

it is awesome. do continue .

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Marybarton

@Marybarton

Rocker

+ 8

Posted: 11 years ago

#274

I just read your whole story! Totally loved it! It was so detailed and thorough! The grammar was spot on and you don't have typos even. I am totally prone to typos. Thanks for suggesting your story. This is the first one I read that I could read through without thinking about the mistakes in wording, etc. I know some people here are young or English isn't their first language, so I understand. But it is always a pleasure to read when the writing it so good!

I will be following this story. I love seeing stories to the end. You are one talented writer. There was humor like the tea on Niranjan's bald head that made me laugh, and then were were heart tugging moments. The characters are exactly as they are on the show. I struggle with this because I am really writing for a feminist fulfillment of my anger against Shlok. But you were on point with Astha's blankness and how much Shlok missed her joy. He's in love and he does not see it, you express that with subtlety. On the other hand, Anjali sounds really good. Loved her comment about Astha disappearing when she should be serving dinner.

One of my favorite scenes is the blazer scene. I am planning to write a cute bed scene, so it was really good to see how others have worked on it. We think very differently but I am very sure that you write way better scenes. The blazer hug was really very inspired. I love how you worked on her petite stature too. It was clear in many scenes that we were looking through Shlok's lenses, so we were seeing a petite Astha around and about. The box scene was also really cute. Shlok's comment about sprouting wings had so much affection that I was in no doubt that he was head over heels.

The rape attempt scene had my heart beating fast. Her pride and their subsequent fights made me very proud of her. I like fierce passion in a girl!

Waiting to read more from you! Keep at it. And also thank you for reading my humble attempts.

Mary

Edited by Marybarton - 11 years ago

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ANAM

@khuwahish

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#275

GREAT GOING BUDDY...

KEEP IT UP..👍🏼

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Arnavishot

@Arnavishot

Inactive

Posted: 11 years ago

#276

Originally posted by: xxDaydreameRxx
Awww!!! Thank you sooo much!
Your comment brought like the widest smile on my face! 🤗

And I'm sorry for distracting you 😳 Trust me, I'm going through the same problem - have exams to study for, but I'm so addicted to writing this SS and watching Astha and Shlok that I spend way too much time just daydreaming on them!

Thanks again for making my day! 😉 Luv ya more! 😛

You're welcome beautiful :) And allthough i loved the raw emotion shlok and aastha are conveying it would be really nice to see some passionate, budding romance soon, please? Also i loved the way you included Anjali's motherly side coming out to aastha and then the subtle darkness of Niranjan shown :) Please, please, please update soon👏 When i saw your update i was like YAY!!! And then i finished reading it and was like """Naaahhhiii!!!! Katam ho gaya!" 😭 😉

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jeenia123

@jeenia123

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#277

read 6th an d7th chapter now. but truely speaking...really love loved 7th chapter very much.the way Astah refused to take his help was just amazing.loved it and really got a lesson.we the girls can help ourselves when required...

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CrazyBilli

@CrazyBilli

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#278

Finally found this ff!!! You couldn't send link in the PM and also it got shifted in FF section.. 😔 Now I have bookmarked it.

Frankly,I am loving their hate-relationship more.Gosh I'm such a sadist!! 😆

Continue soon!!! 😉

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snoopy84

@snoopy84

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#279

Just read all of the chapters and loving it so far. Pleased that Ashta seems to be strong and sticking up for herself. Really feel for Ashta she has been through so much and loving the emotion Shlok showed in the last update. Cant wait for the next update

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janestone6

@janestone6

Navigator

Posted: 11 years ago

#280

Originally posted by: ShlokAstha
Thank you! I'm glad I didn't disappoint you! 😊
Yes - finally someone tells me they felt bad for Shlok! 😆 Yes Astha was physically hurt but Shlok was emotionally tortured in this whole chapter!! (Yep, he cried. 😳)

I'm happy you felt bad for Shlok but also understood Astha's point of view. :)

Thank you so much for always leaving your lovely comments - I really look forward to them now! 🤗

Your always welcome.

As a read you need to understand both the souls. If one is suffering the other automatically suffers with him/her. You just can't blame one and pet the other one on the shoulder. I love it how you make them both suffer at the same time. I would like to see how one is slightly happy and the other one can feel the happiness.

@ bold 😳 I know how much it takes people to write. So that's a little way of thanking you :)