~* Faith *~ An Astha - Shlok SS - updated Chapter 9 pg. 51 - Page 29

Originally posted by: Angel1618

Nice update. ... Astha let her all frustration out it was really good... And finally so here also shlok father is a creep.. lol 😆 you see I don't understand what word to use for him... I hope Astha will now try to see Anjali in a new way... And relationship b/w Astha and shlok will change...😊

Originally posted by: niki795

awesome update
its quite intense but loved it
the story is not moving slow...I think its needed in this way
totally superb
continue soon
thanks for the pm

Originally posted by: krushnaa3

Astha standng 4 herself 👏 Anjali softens thnk god 😆 ..n do cntinue wid dis pace nly(it is nt at al slow) givng us loads of ashlok scenes 😳 cntinue soon:)

Originally posted by: sravz23

it is awesome. do continue .

Originally posted by: Marybarton

I just read your whole story! Totally loved it! It was so detailed and thorough! The grammar was spot on and you don't have typos even. I am totally prone to typos. Thanks for suggesting your story. This is the first one I read that I could read through without thinking about the mistakes in wording, etc. I know some people here are young or English isn't their first language, so I understand. But it is always a pleasure to read when the writing it so good!

Awww - thank you so much for giving it a try! I'm glad you like my writing style - to be honest I like to avoid typos myself and thats why although many times I think that some dialogues sound better in Hindi, I've decided to stick to English because when I'm using Hindi is when my typos start!

I will be following this story. I love seeing stories to the end. You are one talented writer. There was humor like the tea on Niranjan's bald head that made me laugh, and then were were heart tugging moments. The characters are exactly as they are on the show. I struggle with this because I am really writing for a feminist fulfillment of my anger against Shlok. But you were on point with Astha's blankness and how much Shlok missed her joy.

Can't thank you enough for this! Every writer gets their fair share of compliments but the best thing is knowing exactly what your readers like and enjoy! :)

About the characterization - hey mine isn't 100% either. If you noticed, this Shlok is a little less concerned about revenge (in the flashbacks - you see that he pretty much gives up on dealing with Astha and fires her), his main problem is his habit of running away from his emotions. The same problem is in the Shlok of the show but in my SS, his fear of emotions sort of takes precedence over his other flaws. Similarily, your FF is doing complete justice of the characters - you've just emphasized the fire and zeal of Astha a tiny but more, but thats what makes it interesting. ;)

He's in love and he does not see it, you express that with subtlety.

This line of your analysis on Shlok made me want to dance around in happiness! The thing about subtlety is that its very easily ignored and only rewards when someone actually catches on. 😉

On the other hand, Anjali sounds really good. Loved her comment about Astha disappearing when she should be serving dinner.

Phew! I have to work hard on her dialogues! I always think of her typical abusive lines in Hindi and initially they usually sound stupid and ridiculous when I convert them into English. 😆

One of my favorite scenes is the blazer scene. I am planning to write a cute bed scene, so it was really good to see how others have worked on it. We think very differently but I am very sure that you write way better scenes. The blazer hug was really very inspired. I love how you worked on her petite stature too. It was clear in many scenes that we were looking through Shlok's lenses, so we were seeing a petite Astha around and about. The box scene was also really cute. Shlok's comment about sprouting wings had so much affection that I was in no doubt that he was head over heels.

Oh, thank you so much! I'm loving your reactions to all that I wrote!

And hey - its pretty unavoidable to have similar scenes in different FF's. But every writer still ends up writing the same scene in their own unique style which makes it enjoyable to read nonetheless. And I'm super confident that the future chapters of your FF are going to be absolutely riveting and I'm already enjoying the fighting and passion in your FF so I can only imagine how much I'm going to love the romance. ;)

The rape attempt scene had my heart beating fast. Her pride and their subsequent fights made me very proud of her. I like fierce passion in a girl!

Waiting to read more from you! Keep at it. And also thank you for reading my humble attempts.

Thank you so much Mary!! And please can you not call your attempts humble!? You're a friggin genius! I LOVE your FF!

Thank you so much for reading and commenting in such detail! You like made my day! 🤗

Mary